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BATTLE OF SONNETS ROUND 2

June 18 UPDATE  I HAVE EXTENDED THE CONTEST UNTIL THE 19TH.  THAT IS AN EXTRA 24 HOURS.    I hope that is all right with the rest of the contestants. 

 

 

 

 

 

UPDATE !!!!  IMPORTANT  PLEASE RESPOND!!!

 

I have been asked to extend the contest by 48 hours by one contestant who had problems.  Give me an opinion.  A "yes" or "no" will work.

 

 

 

 

 

UPDATE   June 6:    Here is a Petrachan sonnet for you to study.  Since the contestents have

 had so much trouble with the Petrarchan sonnet I thought it best to give one to you so that you know what I have been looking for. 

 

 

 

 

On His Blindness
by John Milton
When I consider how my light is spent
Ere half my days in this dark world and wide,
And that one Talent which is death to hide
Lodged with me useless, though my soul more bent
To serve therewith my Maker, and present
My true account, lest He returning chide,
"Doth God exact day-labour, light denied?"
I fondly ask. But Patience, to prevent
That murmur, soon replies, "God doth not need
Either man's work or his own gifts. Who best
Bear his mild yoke, they serve him best. His state
Is kingly: thousands at his bidding speed,
And post o'er land and ocean without rest;
They also serve who only stand and wait."

 

 

 

UPDATE:   I know I said I would not help in this contest, but the rhyme scheme of the Petrarchan sonnet seems to challenge many of you. I also know you will find any number of schemes but, there is only ONE truly acceptable rhyme scheme for the Petrarchan sonnet. Most of the sonnets I have found do not follow this scheme. Ho Hum. The sestet rhymes cdecde. I will accept cdcdcd.

The "Read" comment I have used means that I have read your sonnet and most likely scored it. When you label your poem as a revision, I go back and re-evaluate.

INVITE ONLY
If your name is not on the following list, PLEASE DO NOT SUBMIT A POEM.

The list:
maa
Kaibab
Duana
passim
ea
Room of doors
Pamela Lamppe
ma belle
macey muse
masterblaster
Margaret G
Barefeet on Concrete
buggirl
Vera Rich
monkus666
Jeff Sean
Shenton
Smithlarryw
twistedmindscrytoo
Kiusha
shewalksintomine

RULES
1. MUST !!! follow the standards for the Petrachan sonnet. ANY DEVIATION will eliminate the poem. Most points are given for Rhyme, Meter, and format. CHECK AND DOUBLE CKECK these three items.

2. Will deduct points for grammar, punctuation and spelling errors.

3. No erotica,sticky caps, funny fonts, juvenile angst, profanity, suicide, cutting.

4, 2 poems per entrant maximum

The sonnet form for Round 2 is the PETRARCHAN SONNET.

If you need to re-acquaint yourself to this form there is an excellent article here on AP. Click on Classes, scroll to SONNET FORMS, Click on Petrarchan.

NOTE: Do not use the other Italian forms. Petrarchan sonnets have traditionally been love sonnets, love of friend, family, country, lover, God, etc.

For this round I will award points for
gold 400 points
silver 200 points
and
trophies for gold, silver, and bronze.

I will use the same 100 point system I used in Round 1.

This is an anonymous contest, but I will allow edits until the contest closes. If you edit, put "Revision" after the title of your poem and I will re-read and/or re-evaluate. I will read your poems ASAP after they are but will not comment. I will warn with an EDIT if I see a problem. I WILL NOT GIVE EDIT HELP IN THIS ROUND.

If you have any questions IM me. I will be glad to help.

Contest is Over

  • Contest was judged on June 19, 2007
  • Rewards: Gold: 400, Silver: 150
  • Final notes:


    CONGRATULATIONS TO THE POETS IN THIS CONTEST!!!

    First of all I want to thank the poets who entered this contest. What a great group of poets.

    EVERY ONE OF THE POEMS ENTERED IS A WINNER!

    This has been a most amazing contest. I score on a point system of 100. Every poet that entered had at least one poem that earned over 90. THE TOP THREE SCORED 98, 99, AND 100 POINTS. Just shows the caliber of poets on this site!




    The three top poems are:

    GOLD Petrarch Sonnet by Monkus666
    SILVER Unrequited by Duana
    BRONZE The Bird Cage by Margaret G

    MOVING ON TO ROUND 3

    monkus666
    Duana
    Margaret G
    bugggirl
    passim
    masterblaster
    ea
    Kiusha
    Pamela Lamppa
    maa

    I hope to see poems from all of you in the next round.

Contest Winners

  1. Petrarchan sonnet (?) - revision
    Those distances, contained, formed that embrace / Which brought our hearts together, for a while. / The subtle look, the apprehensive smile
    by monkus 15 lines, 4 comments, on Jun 5 8:13 AM 2007
    Gold trophy winner
    • Commented on by judge. [remove]
  2. Unrequited (Petrarchan sonnet )
    I spent my life in search of what I could / not finding that which I could not define. / and not a single tear or sigh of mine, / seeped th
    by Duana 15 lines, 16 comments, on Jun 8 1:12 AM 2007
    Silver trophy winner
    • Commented on by judge. [remove]
  3. One Day's Race
    The eyes, they shine with something so immense,
    A mountain range to rise beneath the sun.
    by buggirl 14 lines, 3 comments, on Jun 4 8:41 PM 2007. In Personal, Sonnet
    • Commented on by judge. [remove]
  4. A Lost Friend
    Describe a friendship? How shall I describe? / Acceptance of what is, and equal place. / No pressure there to change, an easy pace. / No qu
    by passim 15 lines, 13 comments, on Jun 5 6:22 PM 2007. In Friendship, Sonnet
    • Commented on by judge. [remove]
  5. My Homeland
    This world is such a temptress in disguise. / She beckons me to visit every shore. / If in this life, I had time to explore, / Such wonders
    by passim 16 lines, 13 comments, on Jun 6 1:57 PM 2007. In Life, Happiness, Sonnet
    • Commented on by judge. [remove]
  6. Teardrop
    A window pane, a slash of glass across, / Will act as if a lens to focus light- / It's splaying spotlights on my love's sweet site, / And focusing the view of my eyes' cross. / It's staring through a film that's like
    by buggirl 14 lines, 3 comments, on Jun 7 10:05 PM 2007. In Sad, Sonnet, Love
    • Commented on by judge. [remove]
  7. Forevermore (A Petrarchan Sonnet)
    by Pamela A Lamppa 19 lines, 23 comments, on Jun 8 1:09 PM 2007. In Love
    • Viewed by judge. [remove]
  8. The maid of Orleans
    Such michief stirs within this cloistered hall / Where shadows slither on the silent stone, / In silent prayers the maid of France lies pro
    by masterblaster 14 lines, 9 comments, on Jun 11 6:19 AM 2007
    • Commented on by judge. [remove]

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  • MargaretG silver member
    June 5, 2007
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    Dear mamad - thanks for your edit! I am unreasonably sensitive about my name.
    I will be back with a proper Petrarchan sonnet.

    • mamad gold member
      June 5, 2007
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      I understand. With a first name no one could pronounce. I ended up not answering to my teachers. They had to learn too.

  • mamad gold member
    June 5, 2007
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    read

  • maa gold member
    June 19, 2007
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    wonderful ! another round - another sonnet-form to learn for me ...
    heartfelt congratz to the winners of this round, especially my sister margaret ...


    maa