Respond to these lyrics ... pretending it's a letter written just to you. Try to follow the rhyme pattern if you can.
Goodbye My Lover
James Blunt
Did I disappoint you or let you down?
Should I be feeling guilty or let the judges frown?
'Cause I saw the end before we'd begun
Yes I saw you were blinded and I knew I had won
So I took what's mine by eternal right
Took your soul out into the night
It may be over but it won't stop there
I am here for you if you'd only care
You touched my heart, you touched my soul
You changed my life and all my goals
And love is blind and that I knew when
My heart was blinded by you
I've kissed your lips and held your hand
Shared your dreams and shared your bed
I know you well, I know your smell
I've been addicted to you
[x2]
Goodbye my lover
Goodbye my friend
You have been the one
You have been the one for me
I am a dreamer and when I wake
You can't break my spirit - it's my dreams you take
And as you move on, remember me
Remember us and all we used to be
I've seen you cry, I've seen you smile
I've watched you sleeping for a while
I'd be the father of your child
I'd spend a lifetime with you
I know your fears and you know mine
We've had our doubts but now we're fine
And I love you, I swear that's true
I cannot live without you
[x2]
Goodbye my lover
Goodbye my friend
You have been the one
You have been the one for me
And I still hold your hand in mine
In mine when I'm asleep
And I will bare my soul in time
When I'm kneeling at your feet
[x2]
Goodbye my lover
Goodbye my friend
You have been the one
You have been the one for me
I'm so hollow, baby, I'm so hollow
I'm so, I'm so, I'm so hollow
I'm so hollow, baby, I'm so hollow
I'm so, I'm so, I'm so hollow
Or
pick one line from the song and go with it.
Goodbye My Lover
James Blunt
Did I disappoint you or let you down?
Should I be feeling guilty or let the judges frown?
'Cause I saw the end before we'd begun
Yes I saw you were blinded and I knew I had won
So I took what's mine by eternal right
Took your soul out into the night
It may be over but it won't stop there
I am here for you if you'd only care
You touched my heart, you touched my soul
You changed my life and all my goals
And love is blind and that I knew when
My heart was blinded by you
I've kissed your lips and held your hand
Shared your dreams and shared your bed
I know you well, I know your smell
I've been addicted to you
[x2]
Goodbye my lover
Goodbye my friend
You have been the one
You have been the one for me
I am a dreamer and when I wake
You can't break my spirit - it's my dreams you take
And as you move on, remember me
Remember us and all we used to be
I've seen you cry, I've seen you smile
I've watched you sleeping for a while
I'd be the father of your child
I'd spend a lifetime with you
I know your fears and you know mine
We've had our doubts but now we're fine
And I love you, I swear that's true
I cannot live without you
[x2]
Goodbye my lover
Goodbye my friend
You have been the one
You have been the one for me
And I still hold your hand in mine
In mine when I'm asleep
And I will bare my soul in time
When I'm kneeling at your feet
[x2]
Goodbye my lover
Goodbye my friend
You have been the one
You have been the one for me
I'm so hollow, baby, I'm so hollow
I'm so, I'm so, I'm so hollow
I'm so hollow, baby, I'm so hollow
I'm so, I'm so, I'm so hollow
Or
pick one line from the song and go with it.
Contest is Over
- Contest was judged on October 6
- Rewards: Gold: 300, Silver: 200, Bronze: 100
- Final notes: thank you for entering and congratulations to all the trophy winners. You were all deserving of gold but yeah, that's how the system works! thank you again for entering.
Contest Winners
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by AliceinPoetryLand 49 lines, 4 comments, on Oct 5 6:39 AM. In Contest, Lyrics Inspired, Rhyme, Love, Sad
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I feel drawn in by these words and hope to enter this contest. I like your new pic. Rose
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I will definitely enter this contest! I love the lyrics of this song.
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Oh my, good lyrics, I'll have to go download and listen to this now. I'll have to see what I can come up with.
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I've got an idea but it doesn't rhyme, does it really have to rhyme?
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I'll take a look
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it turned out to semi-rhyme, hope you like it.
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This contest is unfair.
To the people who enter after this is posted if there are any more entries:
Don't even attempt to be positive, you will be shot down, the contest judge is miserable and wants everyone else to be miserable with her. I don't care if this comment causes a backlash. -
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first of all, you asked if you could enter something that didn't rhyme and I gave you a
though the contest does ask for rhyme; now you call me unfair because you aren't getting a rave review.
The James Blunt song doesn't sound warm and fluffy though it does ring of love. Nowhere do I see him asking Ms. Bunny a question ... he is serious throughout the poem.
I think if people read my writes they will see I am not miserable Daniela. Some are sad, but many are tinged with humor as well. I find it unkind of you to try and stop people from entering. I can easily delete the contest and get my points back.
If you didn't like the tone of the contest, you merely should have passed it by, instead of trying to change it to suit your own write.
Your comment doesn't merit a backlash. Most will ignore it as I should have done.
Best wishes in all of your writes. You are still welcome as always to participate in my contests. (if they fit the criteria.) No more special treatment, you don't appreciate it.
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That's alright I never asked for special treatment.
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You're the only entrant that PMd me and and said that you "had an idea" but it didn't rhyme, and asked if you could enter it anyway. I said, "sure." Since you are the only person to do that, I deem it special.
Your words are above: "I've got an idea but it doesn't rhyme, does it really have to rhyme?"
It's all good Daniela. I enter more contests than I win; I don't like it either. Sometimes I am removed and not even told why. At least I attempted to comment on my reasoning. -
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But it ended up rhyming anyway... I only asked because the idea I originally had didn't rhyme but it didn't translate to paper that way. I wasn't looking to win specifically, I guess it wasn't totally your fault, I was more ticked off because of the other comment on my poem that called me "delirious"
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That's screwed up Daniela. I didn't see the comment or I would have remarked. Usually people know not to bash each other in contests. We were in the E.R. from 3:00pm until well after midnight last night so when I saw the message on the contest I wasn't in the best of moods. Our youngest grandaughter has a condition that causes severe pain in her jaw and eardrumb, she's also very sensitive to sound. She was screaming in pain so they gave her a pain shot. )delauded?) she had an allergic reaction, so they gave her benedryl and that made her sick. Then they gave her something for that but again, alergic...it was awful. I thought for a moment I might grab the Dr. and throw him against the wall!!! Not his fault though ... we knew she was alergic to mycen anti-biotics and codeine ... I'm so tired; but happy to see you are doing well.
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Thank you ever so much for the gold! I am thrilled.
Congratulations to the other winners and thank you for hosting
Gaylene
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