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~ Blanket of Snow

 

World has fallen asleep under the blanket of snow
I ask the wandering wind, to say my last goodbye to you
Ages away, across the frozen seas and unseen lands
I remember this same wind.. when on eastern shores it blew

This land has been forsaken.. I see the old trees of past
Beyond the horizon now lies the desired spring of yesterday
The silence fills the air, gloom shadows my road home
I wish the winter would sleep.. I wish it'd go away

But the beacon has long fallen beneath western seas
And I can no more even see the stars of old twinkling light
So in my loneliness.. I quietly light out the last candle..
And watch the west wind.. riding away.. out of my sight

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Written February 7th, 2005

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  • Decorus Somnium
    February 12

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    "Wow"...that's what I just said out LOUD This is incredible. So sad, so powerful yet so peaceful and gorgeous. PERFECT!!
    Keep writing


  • Lonely
    March 30, 2005
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    Thank you very much for the comment CelticAngel
  • CelticAngel1605
    March 29, 2005
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    Oh how sad!!! Honey I know how you feel! I am hating this prolonged winter, it's driving me bonkeroos. Great write, very eloquent writing style and the flow was nice as well.

  • mina nagi gold member
    February 17, 2005
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    I can relate to the blanket of snow… I see it at my back garden every morning… its like a earth’s been carpeted with white material… your poem is lovely … desire is longing for a change of weather.. we are too hoping for ugly winter to move on and let spring come through… keep on writing Sherish… I apologise for not commenting earlier on…
    mina

  • The Eros
    February 16, 2005
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    yeh tarasna baraf kay liya hay ya for something SPECIAL well let me tell you yeh kaam bara he hopeless hay , one wrong turn and ur history ! khair goodluck in that SPECIAL stuff lol

  • Lonely
    February 16, 2005
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    yar jis cheez ko benda teresta hai ussi ke baarey main likhna hai na! hahahah acha kher... shukriya janaab ji... for the comment!

  • The Eros
    February 16, 2005
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    whats that sad again ! ur quite good at being sad i must admit , i mean wow ,even i dont think you ever encountered THAT kinda sadness but hey it great sad writing and excellent poem once again with that "kool" touch os the snow !

  • -Tainted- LOoVe
    February 14, 2005
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    Hi Hi! I love this! so just wow! hehe! I know I am not good at making comments ~!~ LOL ~!~ But, I just reely Love this poem!
  • adorable yeti
    February 8, 2005
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    Fascinating...

    hi... this si so beautiful... it's been a lond time since I've read about... for some unknown reason... I find it very fascinating... maybe becoz I've never seen snow before... It's filled with nostalgia...something I can never do with my poetry, and therefore have a great respect for... everyone here is wishing for 'winter'(plesantly cool) to go on for ever and ever... coz the summers are scorching... and here(there?) you are wishing for it to go away... ...
  • StevenHoward
    February 7, 2005
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    Beautiful

    I'm running out of superlatives to put on the bottom of your work. As always, this is beautiful. I love reading your work.
  • Betty Davis eyes
    February 7, 2005
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    I thought it was very lovely! Your poetry always flows so well and is always filled with such imagery and passion. I do not believe any changes need to be made to this . Great write!

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    February 7, 2005
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    A very beautiful poem! Your imagery is top notch and the flow is very smooth. Believe me, I am ready for winter to go away as well... it seems like I loose my leaves in winter too and have a hard time dealing with being naked . Spring will be welcomed any time it sees fit to come and stay.

    Best wishes and s ~genielassie~

  • Lonely
    February 7, 2005
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    Yep the same old style of Lonely I wonder if any of my ideas that linger in my mind are ever unique lol! always the same thing... But I love my work anyways!
  • Willow
    February 7, 2005
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    Well this is proof that letting something linger in your mind comes out to be a beautiful piece of poetry. Very nice work, sissy!

    ~Willow~
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