The silent moon grows strong, my friend,
And yet I hear her song, my friend.
Stars fall in glory through the dark,
Freed from the pressing throng, my friend.
The lightly scented night wind blows;
It heals the soul of wrong, my friend.
A gentle arc holds all our dreams
Bound in a stardust thong, my friend.
Soft feathered and unseen, one tolls
The heart of nature’s gong, my friend.
Can lone Zahhar, atop the hill,
Ever be there too long, my friend?
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to learn more about the ghazal: allpoetry.com/Column/784848/all=1
Written April 20th, 2002
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Fantastic!
I think I might have read this before when I was looking at your chapbook things.... but I didn't get to comment on it there so..... I really like the flow of this one and the way you make it all piece together ending with "my friend"... this form seems like the easiest to me so I might want to try this one after I learn the tanka... which is what I think you had planned next anyway... right? The way you keep expressing nature then saying "my friend" it almost seems like the
"secret of life" sort of meaning. Like you are whispering the secrets of life in your friend's ear.....
Fantastic write!
KAY -
Beautifull,my friend
touching ,my friend -
not bad not bad at all
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I am not to good with forms so forgive my comment lol. This was interesting to me, the second line of each stanza felt like someone was whispering sweet nothings in my ear. The feeling of this write is very soft and warm. I enjoyed this thanks for the read.
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Greetings Erin,
I'm not certain, but this poem might be an antidote to my slightly toxic write by the same name.
As always, this work is well penned and in fine form and quite frankly, your word flow and tone blending is getting smoother.
Almost lost you when you changed names, but could not resist seeing what you were up to lately.
Peace,
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i like it. interesting. reminds me of Auden's Refugee Blues...the flow of it, anyways. different. enjoyed. good job.
BLu -
penumbra: thanks. i'm glad you enjoyed this. the image i was intending for "stardust thong" was the milky-way. i wonder if i can improve that line somehow.
yes, where nitebloomingflower is concerned, i try to do very thoughtful rtfs when i comment on poetry here. i have this large queue of poems that are bookmarked for rtf purposes, and since i only rtf for comments that seemed very thoughtful and intereting, i make a special effort to leave thoughtful and interesting comments in return. apparently, the comment i left on nbf's poem "Be Brief" wasn't to her liking, though i am almost certain i did not offer any personal opinions on what i thought of her as a poet or person as she has done with her comment here. a little unbalanced, i suppose, but the world is full of unstable people and it's the best we can do to just shoulder past them and move on.
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well, i liked this-- the "stardust thong" made me chuckle-- but i have to say i appreciated this much more after reading your column on ghazals-- i even get the background graphics too, we're all entitled to our opinions-- but you have a lot of talent and skill as a poet in my book... i will look for more of your work as i always learn something new about the craft from you... pen
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sucks ducks,lol
okay,and you knocked my poetry,god how pathetic!!
nice try,but you better stick to your day job,not everyone is cut out to be a poet,and you are one of them when i'm published,you can sign my first copy 
runs off laughing dork,nbf
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That's yet another breathtaking ghazal! My favourite amongst all of your ghazals is still 'Vapours', but even this is superb!I really couldn't comment any more, for I find it flawless!
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As you know, I have my own perspective on romantic encounters, but I could offer an answer to Zahhar's question if I felt he truly wanted one. However I believe it is more rhetorical in nature than one where he expects any voice to enlighten him.
The shorter lines in this Ghazal seem to indicate a bit of anxiety and self-contemplation. The hint of erotica suggests perhaps a tiny bit of wonder and amazement...unless I have read too much into this one. Well done, "my friend".
Cheers,
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lol, zahhar: allpoetry.com/Column/843926
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This is beautiful. What is Zahhar?
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