It was just the moon and me,
we came silently to agree.
he would take me on a ride,
when he went out with the tide.
So I put on my gossamer best,
sprinkled stardust on my breast.
I put on each rainbow heel,
to see how they would feel.
It couldn’t come too soon,
till I’d ride out with the moon.
He smiled down at me
and I knew he did agree.
I took a jasmine bloom
and used it for perfume.
The scent filled up the night,
and gave the moon delight.
He acted like a child..
He lit right up and smiled.
And then he saw the tide
and took me for my ride.
All the time, the moon he knew,
that my heart belongs to you.
He’s the owner of romance,
and when lovers take a chance;
The moon, he always knows
because the heart he can expose.
So as we took our ride,
He saw my heart inside.
He shot a moon beam through
and he saw my love for you.
We went behind a cloud,
but he said it was allowed.
Then he smiled with delight,
and with that, we said good night.
©mary jolly zayas2005
Author notes
entering cause you like fantasy...sigh
Written April 7th, 2005
A contest entry
- Anything at all. I need to read good stuff. by FyreMyst.
300 points, ended April 8, 2005, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Did You Win A Gold Trophy? by Nam.
525 points, ended October 19, 2007, 23 entries
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Wow this was absolutely delightful. Very, very beautiful, leaving me speechless.
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What a soft and beautiful write Mary. I see why you took gold for it.
Very well done
Roses
raker
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Congrats on the gold, so well deserved fo this piece,it has very deep emotions and feelings, very nicely written.
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me next me next! I love the act of preparation at the beginning. then how you explain that he knows what you're feeling because he's the creator of love...you're so talented. I really do love this piece.
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This was a good poem. Its really from what use to reading but thats why I like it. Nice wording, fo real. It is heart felt and shows deep emotion. To make a long story short it was a great poem. And oh by the way I dig that picture.
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this poem is so beautiful it hurts...it awakens feelings long slumbering...what it feels to be in love, to be loved as only a man can love a woman (if I'm allowed to call myself one at only 17) you deserved the gold for this...too bad there isn't a platnium trophy...you would have deserved that one too...and one encrusted with diamonds...and I'll stop now...hehehe.
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This is such a wondrful poem ........I liked it alot!
Gothic Angel
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wow that was awesome dude~! So original for once...everyone on this site corrupts it by using the same shit over and over and soon it becomes a pain too read...But it shouldn't be a pain. Apart of writing poems is about to write new ideas and wat you did here was amazing and that is prob why you won the contest... keep it up.. and remember..in poetry..different is special
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thanks for the gold..thanks a million times over
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Brilliant. Bloody brilliant. I loved this poem. I could see it, feel it. I loved it and you get so many Brownie points its not even funny. Good Luck in the Contest.
All The Best To You and Yours
SilverSun -
Very very good Mary.... This is the briliance that takes my breath away! *big sigh*
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