WHY I WRITE
There are many reasons why I write
But it’s not to prove that I am bright.
I write to get things of my chest
That otherwise make me depressed.
I write to poke some gentle fun
When e’re I see daft deeds done.
I write to help me to relax
In this hectic world of phone and fax.
I write so that I may play my part
When others indulge the Folk Music Art.
There are many reasons for what I do.
I’m sure it’s the same for each of you.
BUT
Whatever the reason I add letter to letter
I know that sometimes I could do better.
And that’s one reason why I joined "AP"
So that perhaps you might help me.
I hope someone will point out
The poetic rules I sometimes flout.
Or perhaps you may trouble to report
Where my muse is falling short.
That those of you who know your stuff
Point out spellings that I fluff.
Compliments are nice of course
But without reason they lack force.
Please tell me why you like that
Or else why this, just falls flat
The critics that I like the best
Are those with improvements to suggest.
To honest complaints I cannot object
Even if your aid I then reject.
And in this way you'll find I too
Will sometimes drop an "IM" on you.
So in the spirit of this site
Let’s help each other get it right.
Author notes
Reading critiques and criticism of critiques was the prompt for this. A boring rail journey the opportunity.
Having written and posted it I know I am now fair game so fire away.
Written June 8th, 2005
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Thanks for your comment and thanks for reading some of my writing.
We can't all like the same things. I was brought up to see a difference between poetry and prose but that has been blurred over the years. I still believe poetry needs some structure and, for me, that includes rhymes as my site-name indicates. Not veryone will agree but that's life.
Jim S -
What I liked: your rhymes were very tight.
What I didn't like: I thought your rhymes -- as good as they were -- were overcoming your basic message. I think of rhymes as one of many literary devices to enhance your work. But they should never detract. -
Thanks for your comments. It's nice to hear things from someone who writes as well as you. I've had a peek and I think you write good stuff.
Jim S -
I like this because I can see so much of myself in this poem. I write for many reasons and as the result of many experiences. There are times when something happens and you just have to get it out somehow.
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Yes they are simple words. It was written very quickly, a sort of stream of consciousness sort of thing, and is the first piece I've submitted without polishing. It was telling people why I write not what. The point you make about visuals is unclear to me. I write poems to be heard (hence the group rhyming aloud). I personally do not look upon poetry as a picture in itself although I do hope, sometimes, to create a picture in the recipients mind be they reader or audience..
But many thanks for looking and for commenting. It always makes me re-evaluate my offerings.
JS -
Well writing is cool but this poem's words were too simple not thought out or put into a visual enough. I think you were just trying to tell the other writers something, you dont tell people about your writing you let them see and judge for themselves.
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Thanks for taking the time to look and comment. I agree it was a little raw but this was a case where the message was more important to me than the medium. In the short time I have been a member I have realised that some critiques are just unfocussed glad-handing by people who in the outside world, I would describe as liking the sound of their own voice too much. Unlike yours which pointed out some pros and cons backed by experience (I've read some of your offerings).
JS -
I like your rhyming style Jim, the meter in this one was a little uneven but other than that it was a pretty well written piece. Take care and Have fun. Steve
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Thanks for the compliment Darkness Fairy. When I was writing it it seemed a bit too simple. But it does say what I feel so OK
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Wow. I really like this... its simple... yet complicated at the same time. I really like the style and everything just flows so well. This is a wonderful piece... and I am now adding you to my favorites. Please check out some of my poems and give me some advice. Thanks.
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