When there is only one, a single bloom
To spread the scent and own the throne,
Cornered neatly in a closed huge room,
On an opulent vase, it calls its own.
Where granite floors, sparkle with hue
From garbled gem stones far below,
An awaiting eye to watch the dew -
No, not one, to watch them flow.
Lay the unsmelt flowers, still to spread
The jocund smell of refreshing scent,
Like an opened book, still unread
Pages traversed, in the breeze that went.
Like the violet pearls beneath the sea,
Bunches of grapes, quietly lay
Holding the wine to feast a bee,
Which at least, might care to stop some day.
And they lay, that white rose still
Unsmelt beside the untouched grapes,
With just the scent they had to fill,
On the silky carpet of caramel crepes.
When the sapphire curtains slowly dance,
To the moving wind's lovely tune,
The lonely flowers, steal a glance
To watch the stars and the misty moon.
When in the sky there is only one
A single star with a silver glow,
That Winter's sky, it calls its own
Ruling the night and the wind in blow....
Author notes
Written August 4th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Painted with words by Legend.
300 points, ended August 11, 2005, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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this is beautiful with deep meaning had to read it 3-4 times to get to thebottom of it
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Your ability to rhyme the lines is extraordinary. Every word easily glides off the tongue. This is eloquent. The poem in its entirity is bravely written, and accents the visual art with the evidence of great talent. Just perfect! Your skill outweighs any luck I could wish for you in this challenge. A wondrous work of word art here. I am thoroughly inmpressed.
Much Love,
Renee
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This did indeed describe the picture wholely and completely. It even made me notice stuff in the picture that I hadn't seen before. This poem was so rich in literary elements too; simile, personification, and all that other stuff they try to teach us in school.
Beautiful write and good luck in the contest.
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Magical
Wow. That was so beautifully magical- you know what I mean? Awesome imagery, and I love the lines about caramel crepe carpet! Again best of luck to you in the contest! -
this moment captured in all hues
Ha, Raspberry the weaver of magic, I didn't know until i read this little masterpiece , how I could feel this spell in time , the scents so divine that flows on a winter's night,the fruit laid to mix the hue, this room on glassy marble ,mirored
so far it captures the moment ..such imagery as an enchanteress
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So inviting and beautifully written! Love the all of it! Best wishes in the contest!
Sam
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This is beautiful raspberry
I love-love your sixth stanza, absolutely beautiful
Best wishes in the contest
Cindy
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A gorgeous write! Beautiful words, form, flow, rhyme and images! Excellent work! Best wishes and S... ~genielassie~
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Lay the unsmelt flowers, still to spread
The jocund smell of refreshing scent,
Like an opened book, still unread
Pages traversed, in the breeze that went.
such beautiful words to capture the scene portrayed in the painting. Best wishes in this contest
Ruth -
Hi Raspberry a truely enchanting write from you, a lot of detail, lovely visuals, all the best in the comp, hugs Di
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ah darn
I have a confession to make 
I've read this poem a few times (when I had my morning mood, when I had a regular mood, when I just had a freaking nagging customer 
) but I just didn't find one single rhyme that was forced this is truly one splendid take on the picture, and really, really wonderfully done
Leander -
Hi great miy friendlove and hugs Di
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brilliant
cool great write! how ya doin raspberry? haven't spoken in a while... p.s. keep up the great work luv chocolate moose -
Good
Very well done love it the ending was cool good luck in all your writes and all you do -
You have done a great job drawing your thoughts from this picture, This was a magical in thought write
bravo to you
and best of luck in the contest
Tears -
Wow indeed Raspberry I read this through spellbound,it was only after i had read it that i returned to the image posted.There i discovered things that where only brought to my notice by your words.Most would have only seen the main characters in the picture The Vase, The Rose and The Fairies.You really took in the image and produced from it a wonderful work of art.As ever you give me something to wonder at with your ability to weave a canvas of magic Excellent Good luck in the contest
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loved it
this would look better if it were centered. -
wow...very nice...VERY NICE... enjoyed the flow of this write.. enjoyed the flow as well as the rhyme...effortlessly done.. love your imagery.This stanza really stuck with me visually:
Lay the unsmelt flowers, still to spread
The jocund smell of refreshing scent,
Like an opened book, still unread
Pages traversed, in the breeze that went.
Very nice write.. thank you for pointing me to it
Good luck in this contest.. I see a gold Amy
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