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Of Birds,Girls and Glass Streets

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Bird Gehrls can fly ~~~ Antony and the Johnsons





As the sticky streets
lick their feet & toes-
barely touching them
barely there

They see her
her wing'ed shoulders droop-
down to the slick-back street
She is their night

Time sits on the curb
with the dregs, drunks-
disasters awaiting to come

Come gathering
Oh, Angeline-
bird girl of the city-
you are free-
falling at last

Streets sing out of sorrow
sex, seedy lines-
See how you sink them
sink me-

"Fly to me
please"

Along the shapeless oceans-
of city streets
where the pride preen
and pluck feathers from you
From your wings

O'er Oldham street down
to Tib street alleys
where the dark and wounded
Lay out before-
night-crawlers crowd
around

Let them slip and sing
to you -
Angeline


For I will wait, in the shadows
in the sticky-slick-backed streets-
Life has never been
satisfied

Here -
in the night
as the streets crawl



With the manna of the
moon, man
&
birds of the past

 

Author notes

Musings around Manchester with Angeline

Inspiration from Bird Gehrls by Antony and the Johnsons, who have just won the Mercury Music award

   


Written September 8th, 2005

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  • Blondita
    October 3, 2007

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    The likes of Angeline make the world go round in some respects. Filled with life and emotion and sadness and dirt and reality and complexity and...

    Gimme Angeline anyday.

    Loved it.


  • catz Moderators member
    September 11, 2005
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    I am always enchanted, amazed, drawn into the vivid images you paint with your poetry, Gill. I became a part of the streets as I read this, one of those derilics on the curb, the hooker on the corner, feeling the night engulfing everything around.

    I've read the other comments and can think of nothing more to add without sounding redundant. Suffice to say that this is a superb piece of art, a picture alive with sadness, destitution, and that glimmer of hope that always finds its way to where needed the most.

    A series, huh.... I need to check out the previous poem.

    love and
    Dee
    Edited on Sep 11, 1:39 p.m. because ''.

  • jantastic gold member
    September 9, 2005
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    She makes your words sing and I think Ms. Angeline needs her own collection even if you keep her in Manchester Musings. The line that Lisa mentioned and all of the alliteration and sounds (sticky/lick)flow so very well.

    Jan

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 9, 2005
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    thankyou Lisa..
    so glad you digged it.. yeah the pride/preen one was like peacocks to me..
    heheheh

  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    September 9, 2005
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    /where the pride preen/ damn that's a fine line.. it is, as are they all.. and the end.. has such a ring to it .. poetic, yet at the same time earthy..

    I can't begin to explain the images this brought to mind, so many of them...so I won't even try.. of course I will say now I want to hear whatever it was that inspired this...grin..

    ~~Lisa/whims


  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 9, 2005
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    ahh thankyou Niko for your lovely words hun...

    made me feel all smiley and happy..

  • The Bear
    September 9, 2005
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    It echo of T.S. Eliot in some atmospheres , the licking and the shadows. And there is something else, something I read once a long time ago , or maybe a song where the city pulses like life blood. In all the Manchester poems, what makes them special is that even when most lonely feel, there is never detachment, never looking in from outside. I find this is compelling because the poetry draws me , who is reader and oberver right in too.

  • cherche -d -ame gold member
    September 9, 2005
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    I love the scene of this sort of seedy city, yet with a magic and allure all of its own. I was there , once upon an epoch I think...I felt it and I flew...I am the birdgirl literally
    Just kidding, I do not know this group but I loved your write...it lets me imagine so much , it is sad , it is happy, it is the dregs filled with some hope...it was , it is and it will be the heartbeat of the city
    xoxoxo
    Reenie

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    he is absolutely intoxicating.. it's such an unusual voice.. I am mesmorised by him

  • misselaineous gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    have just listend to antony for the first time ever! thank you for the education and yeah ... bird girls can fly...

    elaine

  • transcendental baby gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    I loved the allitertion in this one Chilly, it's so hard to do it well, and of course your images are magical as usual ... and that pic!!!

  • vaseline
    September 8, 2005
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    im fucking hungover right now, i cant give a decent comment, this confuddled me...dont read poetry after drining...the sidewalk is talikng to me

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    I just like to word-play.. hehehhe and see what can come out..
    but yeah, she is the City,a siren callin' your name

  • ca ne fait rien
    September 8, 2005
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    Angeline likes those run on double meaning words, doesn't she. I think Angeline is laughing behind her hand. I think Angeline is the city. That makes me feel all shivery.

  • CountryCousin
    September 8, 2005
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    Unique but entertaining.

    You know I would say this one fits right in with what happened in New Orleans and elsewhere. I do like how you handled your subject matter here. You did well.

  • IamMEg
    September 8, 2005
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    This is definitely unique - I enjoyed this. Wonderful imagery - good descriptions. One can picture the scene and feel oneself there in the midst ... nicely done!

  • Pierre Richards
    September 8, 2005
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    excellent!

    I cannot say I have ever heard of the group, but then I am very limited in my listening.
    The poem though, does flow very well and has a strong voice.
    You have a good philosophical view on society in this piece.
    Very well done my friend!

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    thankyou for puddle-jumpin' Claireyone.. .. i will come back and say more .. very soon.. but I got pasta boiling over.. rofl

  • September 8, 2005
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    "I am a bird girl now, I've got my heart here in my hands now I've been searching for my wings some time I'm going to be born
    into soon - the sky - because I'm a bird girl and the bird girls go to heaven, I'm a bird girl and the bird girls can fly,
    bird girls can fly" - ah I love them, Antony is like some beautiful, strange giant who's slid down the Faraway Tree for a visit - there is something so uncomfortable about him, I was listening to The Lake EP at about 3am this morning and there are bits when his voice startles me and I really want to switch it off but I can't - sort of how I imagine it must be if ghosts exist - and you meet one and you want to turn away but something stops you - he makes me think of China Dolls, birds and glass. "The Lake" is brave, he does Poe's poem justice, "Fistful of Love" is brilliant - no wonder Lou Reed was so happy to work with him on that, (and by all acounts it sounds as if he's shed a tear or two over Antony's music) but my favourite track is definately "Cripple and the Starfish" - stingggyy thinggggyy intooooo little me, me, me - it's so painful, yeah - crippling -too right - and vulnerable to start off but the ending is crashing and aggressively hopeful, sort of like if you should dare to doubt him he'll throttle you with those incredibly flexible, balletic, rare vocal chords of his - he frightens me, those lyrics and his bizarre confrontational shyness. I know I probably sound sickeningly melodramatic about Mr Antony and the mighty, mighty Johnsons but I'm obsessed with them at the moment (and I think it'll stay that way for a while). Antony gushing over for now - so will move on to gushing about the poem - gush/gush/gush - Angeline sounds as damp and pretty and glittering as the bright streaks streetlights cut through puddles and tarmac. You know the feeling you get when you walk down streets at 2am wearing high heels? - and you look down at them, and they look right and they sound right but there's that unease that any second now they're going to betray you and crack at your ankles and make you going falling tits over arse - the poem reminded me of that feeling - real city feeling, real people are just clattering out of the clubs feeling - and everything is good now but something dangerous is about to start, and it's shameful and so exciting. Bloody good.

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    thanks Spidey..

  • Smilingspider
    September 8, 2005
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    Nice pic, the poem reminds me of Faithless

    "For I will wait, in the shadows
    in the sticky-slick-backed streets-
    Life has never been
    satisfied"
    That stanza I like.

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    Thankyou so much.. maybe next trip you can actually stop on by

  • SimpleSarcasm
    September 8, 2005
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    I always enjoy your writes. I didn't see much of England when I stopped there, I was on my way to Istanbul. I enjoy the nostalgic feel to your writes they seem...comforting.
    ~Dee
  • LadyMidnight07
    September 8, 2005
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    i really dont know how to respond to this poem its beautiful but kinda of dark and sad, i dunno mabye its just me.
    the pic is beautiful too!

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    Thankyou for a lovely critique.. really appreciate you dropping by
    again.. thankyou

    ~GILL~x

  • Child of Decay
    September 8, 2005
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    This is such a unique poem! I loved the story that you told; it was inspiring to me. The words that you used, your structure, it was all perfect. But something that I really liked as well was your title. It was distinctive and eye-catching, but it also had this clinging mystery to it, that made this write especially captivating. Wonderful job.

    ~Laura~

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    I found it on WEBSHOTS.. in the Fantasy section.. I think it's a Royo.. but don't quote me on that..

  • grannyeri gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    The picture is one that keeps haunting me. Goes well with the write.

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    yes...
    she is an eclectic mix of many
    and she loves life whatever it flings at her ...

  • queenie
    September 8, 2005
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    angeline symbolizes.for me,a woman who is able to deal with her life on the streets,enjoy the freedom of that life and respect the struggles and challenges that go along with it.this is by far my favorite.they all are so elegant but this ones takes me to a different place.i'm enjoying the series immensely.

  • grannyeri gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    A timely poem, dealing with current issues and forever issues. Enjoyed the read. Well done.

  • September 8, 2005
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    This was a great poem, Yes sounds like she gets around I also felt alot of regret discust and hope and a great feeling of need, Then again, im always thinking something other than what things are
    Awesome write, Perfectly woven as always
    always
    ~ vini ~

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    heheheh

    She likes the Nortern Quarter of the City.. hehehhehe
    she sticks to where she knows.. lololol
    she's too feisty for ya.....
    let her get lost inside you oh,wocky-one..
  • jabberwocky
    September 8, 2005
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    That Angeline, she sure does get around a bit, doesn't she? I suppose it's a good thing though, because she sure inspires you to write some really awesome stuff.

    Your writing is complex and intertwined and always leaves me thinking about what you had to say. I always look forward to the opportunity to get lost inside my head for awhile, after I read a piece like this from you!

    You go girl!
  • p
    September 8, 2005
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    Nice!..great stuff..Nice feel and flow through out the poem..Keep writing..And Good luck for more splendid writes!!..

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    hehhe thankie..
    not a problem

  • spamwitch
    September 8, 2005
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    Very cool, and I will need to come back later and check out Guinevere, what an original idea of writing a series. Your writing style seems very educated, I must admit, so much so that at times I have to read it more than once to try to keep up. That is meant to be a compliment.

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    Many thanks Jason.. so glad you dropped by

    ~GILL~x

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    thankie sir.. and yes it is becoming a series, that started with Guinevere and is now developing with her sort of half-sister Angeline

    and yeah.. I'm not sure on the noun/plural thingie.. but will ponder it awhile
  • Jason Logan
    September 8, 2005
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    Incredible Work

    Very moving, your first stanza was great and really hooked my interest. I think although i truly don't understand this, i can still feel it downtrodden and wonton desperation of waiting for things to look up. This lines are my favorite:
    For I will wait, in the shadows
    in the sticky-slick-backed streets-
    Life has never been
    satisfied
    Thanks for the wonderful poetry.

  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    Many thanks for your lovely comment

    glad you dropped by and found it interesting, I appreciate your kind words
    ~GILL~xxx

  • windhover3
    September 8, 2005
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    a very nice compliment to the prior whose name escapes me... you are writing a series! The plural noun/singular verb between lines one and twomdistracted me for the barest moment, but it seems to meld into the whole somehow. the free-falling is a touch of perfectly appropriate cleverness,and the whole sweeps along as slightly disjointed perfectly smooth music- sorta city muse like. You have a way of meld/molding images I am still just learning to appreciate even as I appreciate them.

  • capricornpoet silver member
    September 8, 2005
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    angel falls in the city

    Prosaic and aritstic, written with originality and an imagery
    evoking falling souls and a crying angel as the dirty streets
    of night beckon all man ; a prayer poem and a song poem ;
    classic read , loved this , so deep its moorings to all souls.
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