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First day at School

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The first to come in was a boy who said he was Year 7
“But that’s only at school ‘cos I’m really eleven”
His face was well washed and his hair was brushed back.
He carried his books in his bright new back-pack.

The next to come in was a lass in Year 8.
She had run all the way so she would not be late.
Her buttons half-done; she looked a right mess.
As if she’d never been taught how to dress.

The next to come in were a pair in Year 9.
They looked far too ready to have a good time.
Sharing a walkman with one ear-piece each.
Here were two kids I’d struggle to teach.

The next to come in was a gang from Year 10.
Five little boys who thought they were men.
Pushing and shoving and acting the fool.
They didn’t care that this was a school.

The last to come in were a crowd from Year 11.
I’d been trying to teach them since the start of Year 7.
I’d offered them knowledge but they’d rejected my gift.
After 5 wasted years I felt a bit “miffed”.

When I went to school it was years 1 to 5.
And for a good education we’d all really strive.
A good education was your passport to life.
We wouldn’t dare give the teachers such strife.

W
hat’s caused the change? Why this disrespect.
Why are teenagers brains all hitting reject?
Old fashioned values have been knocked into touch.
People value the individual far too much.

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Written September 8th, 2005

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  • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
    October 2, 2005
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    Thanks for the nice comment Tiya.
    I suppose the half agree / half disagree comes from the different teacher / pupil perspective.
    I have to confess that, despite the problem cases, there are still a lot of students who want to learn and are willing to work at it.
    Any way I'm glad you got something out of my offering.
    Jim S

  • blind alley
    October 1, 2005
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    I loved your rhyme, the piece was well written and different from the ones I have read, I half agree with you and I half don't, nice write, keep writing...
    ~^~Tiya~^~

  • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
    October 1, 2005
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    Thank you for your comment and generous applause. I am glad you liked this offering.
    Jim S

  • simpliterature
    October 1, 2005
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    Descriptive. I can feel the crowd while reading.
    Message relayed well. A sad sentiment which I can relate too.
    Very well done. My applause.

  • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
    September 9, 2005
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    Thanks for the applause and the comment. I hope dad liked it too.
    Jim S

  • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
    September 9, 2005
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    Thanks for the vote of confidence. But yours is still a contender.
    Jim S

  • Gonzo
    September 8, 2005
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    hahaha...I love this...my father is a teacher..so i hear things like this all the time. Great work Mr.S keep it up

    K. Castania
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