What’s up with the ku
petite and unfurled?
they’re..
droplets of dew
immersing the world
a tiniest beam
that's pouring with light
one taste bud quenching
a huge appetite.
Why fuss with the ‘ku’
and what is its worth?
a whiff of sweet incense
that covers the earth
a vaporing mist
that floods to the shore
this poesy by seed
where less -is much more!
Author notes
Although this isn't in the form of a 'ku', or 'haiku', I purposely wanted to illustrate its special content and purpose by the use of iambic pentameter.
For the labor that goes into its small structure, I especially dedicate this to those who are passionate to pass on its flair to the Western world. This is for you, ESPECIALLY....'haikumonk'. Thank you for your fastidious examples!
Written January 14th, 2003
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Okay. I did a go-see, and until I feel that way about it, the more contemporary rhetoric was purposeful in that so many do not understand the coiffure, thus the potency of the ku. I liked your suggestion just the same, though
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Hmmmm.....Well. I must take a fresh look at it then. It's been awhile since I wrote it. Thank you for your very honest and progressive critique Warmly, CookieZeal
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I liked how you put the answers to your questions. However, I did not care as much for the way the questions were asked. The answers were poetic. The questions incorporated modern slang and so did not fit as well with the answers
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bonn! I think
Interesting. Yes I don;t really understand your poetry but it seems good anyway. I bet if I understood it it would make more sense. -
droplets of dew
immersing the world
Those are my favorite lines, though the whole thing was brilliant. Another excellent write
Meg -
don't touch it!
C. Ku-doe's to you. This is a very nice example of the design and meaning of Ku. It is so difficult to translate Japanese Haiku into English since it looses it's feel in the translation. However, the number of poets that are becomeing familiar with this style are doing some fantastic work with it and their numbers grow daily. I really enjoyed this write.
Mike
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Very nice.......... stunning depiction........... and for me? Thank you so much. You've gone and made me smile..... Beautiful moment you have given us here. YaY for haiku!!!!!!!!!!
yer forever pal,
Monk -
don't touch it!
I have a friend that is trying to teach me about iambs and stuff!! This is a great write, and form. Ku's have always interested me. There is so much to learn with this poetry lark! One thing I am thankful for tho...is coming over thsi site. I forget how I found it, but it has helped me heaps!!! The people here (well most) Are amazing!!! Well written. -
excellent
Elegant and lovely piece. Reminds me of light, fluffed frosting on an expensive pie. Friend of appetite. -
excellent
Cute write. Enjoyed it a whole lot.
Eowyn -
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simply sweet perfection...
as ever I am in awe of those who manage to produce these tightly structured writes...
my own are more reminiscent of the wanderings of an emotionaly charged spider whose been dipped in a mix of lsd and ink and allowed free range across the page...literally if you were to see the handwritten stage...a auperb write and homage to the haiku...
Victoria -
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simple and sweet.
absolutly awesome.
,,,=^..^=,,, Clare -
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right on meter. coolies. -
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Nicely done. Ku is great. -
don't touch it!
simplicity at its finest
wonderful -
excellent
can you come visit my Ku? it is pretty new and actually my first... alot of work for such little in words...
the name is Vitality!
thanks
Tamara -
don't touch it!
Perfectly beautiful write...the flow of this was so natural and wonderful
AS for the content you are absoultely right :) I love reading haiku but not many appreciate the effort that goes into writng those tiny little beauties...Sherry up there knows though because she writes them beautifully everytime :)
Thank you for giving us this insight...beautifully written
~~Dawn -
don't touch it!
Aunt Cookie, This is a excellent piece because it shows just what the Ku or haiku represents. You wrote about this in such a soft and tender way its a sweet poem.... I think its beautiful
put together.....it shows the heart of writing when it flows out. I love you and thanks for your comment on Unknown Dove.
Please read Elephant Love and Mixed Up Clown if you get time I think you may enjoy them. One of your better ones Aunt Cookie... Don't touch this one I like it:o) Hugs,Sherry
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