On the lively evening of a rainy day
In the avenues where the skies are grey
You go strolling down the muddy way
Your raincoat wet, your heart so gay
Through the wet streets and fair stalls
Crowded mall, old buildings, cracked walls
The faded lamp posts with shades so green
Filtered light, ah! Terrific scene
People passing by, crowding burger bars
Smell of fries fill the air, as rain falls
Laughing, chattering group of teenagers
Beneath a weeping sky a thousand strangers
Last busses to the town arrive at city stops
As the black creeps in and night drops
A walk through life, a hide from your past
Wishing the rainy day could forever last
But you have to go back, alone again
Praying for tomorrow in this silent rain
The summer ending rain shall hear your call
You shall linger forever in this rainy mall…
~*~
Author notes
(¨`·.·´¨)
`·.(¨`·.·´¨)
`·.¸.·´
Written September 14th, 2005
What did you think
Comments
1 - 5 of 5
-
Beautifully Inscribed!
You have weaved your dreams and prayers here my dear friend through the drops from the skies to your loving eyes so tender true. Know, I love you!
-Timothy
-
Yep I was leaving allpoetry, but no ofcourse I can never leave without your permissin mommy... And I will never abandon you lol! Even if someday you will decide to abandon me, I'll still follow you 
-
I wish I knew how to paint a town like that. This has gorgeous imagery, and I think that I'd linger in such a place as this forever. I see you've returned to the "original" rhyming scheme you were first employing, which is refreshing and wonderful. I can't seem to control meter to save my life, ugh, but you seem to do it with no effort. Were you leaving?
I didn't give you permission for that young lady, you can't just abandon your poor mommy! 
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora ("Mama")
-
You know how to paint a picture with words… you’ve drawn a detailed description of a rainy day in your town… I can visualise the scene through your words… I used to love rain during scorching summer… rhyming is unforced, and you’ve a knack of controlling your meter naturally….your meter always reads perfect… I’m glad you’re staying and sharing your talent with us… thank you very much…
mina
PS: Daren’t you leave
Edited on Sep 16, 8:17 because 'PS added'. -
Excellent
This was fabulous! I have to say it is one of my favorites that you've written. You created such vivid imagery! I don't even know what else to say, but I absolutely loved it! Great, great job!
Adding your comment:
1 - 5 of 5
