When I consider most my life is o'er
Each day a gift, a moment, saved in time
To treasure those lost loves, those loves sublime,
To wait for Death to open Heaven's door.
And when I walk that white light's corridor
Will I be blissful? Will I know that I'm
Prepared to pay the price for flaws? Will chime
Of bell give me the happiness to soar?
Will God forgive stupidities and mistakes
I made or will He say, "Go back and learn
To do it right?" And when the souls I face,
Those hurt along the way, will they placate
My pain? I pray souls' sympathy. I yearn
For peace within God's arms, within God's grace.
Author notes
Option # 2 An Italian Sonnet
My other entries are titled:
Option #3 Sometimes
Option #4 Sacrifice
I have tried to delete the comments on this poem, but cannot do so. I hope this does not detracts from the poem.
In a list
A contest entry
- Form Poetry II by Feel Good Candy.
301 points, ended April 30, 2006, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - POETIC X FACTOR ROUND 2 by Laura.
450 points, ended May 5, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I hope you don't mind,if I take a look at your sonnets,while I still studie in your class
Your poem is really beautifull,full of metaphors.It even touches eternity.Sincerely
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That is a pondering we will all face. I guess there is no answer until we get there. Very well done and something we should all think about when we are still young.
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this is a beautifully written Italian sonnett, it flows wonderfully... I love the first stanza the most, it is very well worded with great imagery.... I like the questions within the poem, you have placed them well... well done..
thank you for entering my contest and good luck..
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this is a lovely poem very thought provoking and calming well doen and thank you for your entry good luck in the contest xx
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I think you have used the form well in this piece, but unfortunately this poem doesn't really stand out to me.
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i have to say, being young foolish and very naive, i think i continuously forget this aspect of life, at how fast time decays in retrospect. wonderful piece to me, simply for reminding me just to take a bit each day and breathe a bit of beauty
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Great
It's the first time that I hear about different Kinds of sonnet I am Indian as my language is not English I knowledge about it is limited - I think sonnets are pretty serious than other forms of poetry - Anyway nice write Wish you all the best
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Thank you for you very nice comment on my poem Ending Time. It has been very difficult for me to have people on this site comment on my work. They read, but do not comment or critique. Ending Time was not written for a contest. It was a peom I had started and worked on and worked on ......So any nice comment is really appreciated. Thank you again.
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Thank you. This is my favorite poetic form althouogh it takes me forever to put on paper what I want to say and the way I want to say it. Thanks again.
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I'm not surprised in the least to see that this is a trophy winner. It was an excellent example of an Italian Sonnet.
Plus, it was not lovey-dovey, so thanks for following the rules in that regard
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Well done, lovley sentiment and expression. I'm impressed with the rhymes of time, which can be difficult to contrive - here they flow with your intent. Congratulations on your bronze.
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What beautiful sentiments expressed so well in this sonnet. I leave the technicalities to Hugh, but I know what I like and I like this. Good luck.
Cheers
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Beautiful and sincere
I will have to study this form a bit and try one. I love the formal sound it presents, and your subject matter, I believe, is what lies in the hearts of many as they approach the Fall of their years.
What a delight to read. Thank you. ~Pam
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Dear Mamad,
I also write, rewrite, revise and edit or, as I usually describe the process: "honing and polishing". The writing of a perfectly rhymed and metered sonnet with a worthy message is one of the greatest poetic challenges which you have now aptly met.
Love, Hugh.
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I like th3e sonnet form although it takes me forever to get one right. I write and rewrite and revise and edit. But I like the lyricism of the poem. I have given up on the haiku and the cinquain. I have been trying some of the off beat forms. The sestet, rime couee. The are a challenge but give me more lines and feet to work with. I shall never be able to write a lucid image as you do in the cinquain. I guess it must be each to each? Take care and noe that your must is awake????
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A message to live by and ponder. I have found that with growing older, I am more introspective. I know that picking apart my life will accomplish nothing, but I fear it is human nature.
I know nothing of this form and honestly, Iambic pentameters scare the daylights out of me. Sonnets period intimidate me. Best of luck to you in the contest.
s and ♥
Sally
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