Recessed in browning earth,
the fluid glass maze spreads
while rippling blue waves
drift You in, O’ Lord~
My beloved Angel Swan!
who lets me rest,
your long silver throat
arced in noble stretch
curvaceous-
pedestal of Your glowing ivory Crown.
Oculus that sees both sides
higher than the geese
vision divine-observes here and afar
Ever awake-
You lunge in feverish approach,
gathering me to YOU-
(this lone dove of tattered wings)
As out of the storm,
You love and coo me
with aching trumpet bellow,
wrap me in white downing
for calm repose-
permitting the events
of my awakedness
to equal the scenes
behind my eyes-
this dream!
Foreign/Medical term:
Oculus- Medieval Latin for ‘organ of sight’, the eye.
Author notes
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Written January 28th, 2003
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I have always loved the picture of resting beneath the shelter of God's great wing (see my poem "Twilight Communion!"). This was a lovely write, carefully chosen words and beautiful imagery. Great job!
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i've read four of your poems now, and i'm always left confused. my brain at the moment is working on minimal power so everything has to be "fire bad tree green" kinda thing but i got peace, and love from this. pretty words
i enjoy reading your stuff even if me brain dont understand it
tc
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WOW this is incredible...
your write here, takes me to heights i've seldom known...
"As out of the storm,
You love and coo me
with aching trumpet bellow,
wrap me in white downing
for calm repose-
permitting the events
of my awakedness
to equal the scenes
behind my eyes-
this dream!
incredible ending to an incredible piece of work!
impart upon me some of your talent!!
blessings,
love and light
and
may peace be with you
mike -
Masterfully Penned
A Great Poem. I wish I had half your talent. I like this poem alot. It shows me that rhyming does not make a poem, but the use of words, which you seem to have mastered. I cannot thank you enough
thanks for sharing.
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this found a place to touch within my heart!
Yes... I did enjoy!
Keep taking me places that I've never been before!
Keep penning on my friend!
Bill -
don\'t change a thing, beauty captured in tim
So inspiring, so beautiful What a title and so perfect. the flowery background with pic of a trumpet swan with words glues all together so divinely. A white swan as a comparison to our Lord. I like that analogy. Swans are rare and unique. Flow is so enchanting, almost musical. Thanks 4 sharing this with us. God Bless -
Wow, I just started reading some of your stuff. It's so beautifully written. You have an eloquence, that is not seen everyday. My poetry would most likely drive you crazy(with all your grammar fettishes.) You said your poetry flowed better because of your history, well that's good then...I hate it when my poems don't flow quite right. Thanks for sharing beauty! ~ash
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A beautiful write. It's like a dream--a wonderful dream. The imagery is amazing. Very well done.
Meg -
Very happy peom full of joy. The imagery is excellent, and soothing.
You're also pretty perceptive. You commented on my poem, Can You See?, and were right on the mark. It wasn't necessarily to be one dealing with a God, persay, just the greater truth in the universe. Your interpretation seems to hold more meaning, though. -
also i love this background!
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lovley, gentle, inspiring.....also comforting. This poems has so many feelings in it, but they all sum up to give you that warm and fuzzy one good write!
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Dianne, thank you for posting this work of art. I loved the spiritual context; the contrast between the graceful Swan (the Lord) and the tattered dove (the poet representing mankind). Within the Dream, these are serene but powerful symbols.
Good use of alliteration and assonance and words echoing one another.
I am grateful.
Kindest Regards,
Myra -
Your words, the background, the image...PERFECTION! Thank you for sharing such a beautiful and inspirational piece...
~Kathy -
don't touch it!
This reads beautifully, and spread its serenity over me like silk. The image of the swan is just wonderful, Cookie. -
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Reading this poem gave me such tranquility..
How beautifully you write...So gentle, so full of imagery and feelings....
Rhonda -
excellent
That was 'Swan Lake' and 'Romeo and Juliet all in one. This is a sensantional piece of work. -
don't touch it!
This is indeed a fantastic write - so filled with imagery and words of Joy and Love --- I really enjoyed reading this!
:-) chris -
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This is beautiful... i cannot for the life of me write poetry like this... i tried to write about tree's once and really struggled, i ended up having to personify them...lol I have a ton of respect for this very classic type of writing, and the creative imagery it takes to do it well.
I adore this...much respect,
~Wendy -
I was going by the preferences/criteria of the style and content that Myra wanted for the publication, Sherry. IM me if you'd like me to explain. Thank you for reading!!
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excellent
Deep but lovely verses Aunt Cookie....dont be disappointed if dont fully grasp this one (Please) this is talking about the swan and His beauty you enjoy right? Hugs and love,Sherry -
don't touch it!
what an inspiring piece to wake up to! thank you for making my day great before it has begun. phenomenal ( i also read it 2-3 times) -
don't touch it!
hehe i had to come back for a second read
beauty just flows all over this page
you are one fine poetess
this makes the night so much better :)
((hug))
ashes -
Thank you all ..so tickled you like it! It was a labor of love. And I have such good influences. *winks*. I work with the best. Bless you all! Mykie, Ashley, Claire, Danna, and tam!!!!
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don't touch it!
I hope this will be included in the book of dreams for our dear friend.
this flows with elegance and dances with joy....
a beautiful image of the swan and symbolism it does hold the cadence and tone quite well.
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This is so beautiful... very inspiring as well. A favorite for sure, Cookie. -
don't touch it!
this is gorgeous, really really gentle. -
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What a heartwarming write...Great images! Great work! -
don't touch it!
this was so beautiful,
so celestial,
quite a moving write my friend :)
(smiles)
ashes~~~
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