She teaches me not in wise words
Not in actions nor splendid deeds,
But in hushed silence as she hears,
Not just with her attentive ears
But with her silent, tear-filled eyes.
The water in her eyes cleanses
The wounded soul and poor spirit.
Her loving smile adoring her face
Reflects the tender savior’s grace
Teemed with benevolent beauty.
The warm touch of her velvet hand
Sets fire to a smoldering heart.
Love ignites for the man who died
As she draws in words you confide
Breathing back to the throne of mercy.
In the busy distracted life,
This pause belongs solely to three:
You, her and the Spirit of love
Descending again like a dove
Bringing peace to undisturbed time.
Author notes
I've revised. I was not happy with the first version which was
She teaches me not in words
Not in actions nor deeds,
But in silence as she hears,
Not only with her ears
But with her silent, tear-filled eyes.
The water in her eyes cleanses
The hurting soul and spirit.
The smile on her loving face
Reflects the savior’s grace
Expressing his benevolent beauty.
The warmth in the touch of her hand
Sets fire to a smoldering soul.
Love burns again for the man who died
As she draws in the words you confide
And breaths your cares toward the throne of privilege.
In the expanse of busy eternity,
The moment belongs solely to three:
You, her and the Spirit of compassionate love
As you feel Him descend again like a dove.
Nothing disturbs the precious time of divine blessing.
Written October 14th, 2005
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perfect~
Well
I happen to like both versions
The first one was good the second was great
Thanks for all your love and prayers
Loved this revison
Love n hugs to you too
Hugs
Susan~~~~
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Thanks for including me in that mile once in a while.
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very nice either way, spoke your words well with the pen in your hand..keep penning and you know i will read..so many
poets to keep track of i have a list i think a mile long lol Linda
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nice job...keep up the good work and have fun while you are hope to read more soon
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You are always in my prayers. Thanks for reading my piece. I've rewritten. Please re-read if you feel up to it. I'd appreciate your opinion on the new vesion.
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I've revised and shortened, I'd appreciate your opinion on the new version. Thanks.
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I've revised, my poem. It's short and hopefuly pushed forward a bit. I'd appreciate a re-read.
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excellent~
I think it's beautifully written sweetie
I must say your muse is being good to you here as of late I like that and loved the message that was included in this poem
Hope all is well with you and please continue to keep me in your prayer group tonight is the first night I have felt half way decent drawed my blood today but it's still awful low don't know if I will have to have blood or not but plz continue to pray for me
Love n hugs
Susan~~~
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Beautifully written I really enjoyed it very much so. I would like to hear more from you and read more of your poems. Much love. Jacki
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I really like this. Agree with boilerjim, there's a wealth of emotion behind this poem, perhaps it just needs to be pushed forward a tiny bit. But you clearly have a delicate and intelligent touch with poetry, so keep writing! well done.
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Nice job! I would have liked to see some more analogies so as to provoke thought and target the intended understanding more clearly. The passion was clear for the author but did it, could it provoke passion from the reader?. Thanks for the words
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good
Nicely written, and this fit well in here. The moment belongs solely to three:
You, her and the Spirit of compassionate love
Very warn and reflective
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