Awake with thoughts which haunt and stir inwardly
My world, being agitated at its core,
Sinks down to death, oppressed with melancholy
As waves of despair crash upon the shore
Standing tall and secure for a decade
Ordered towers of pleasure tumble down
Bearing the weakness of what was man-made
Breaking the vainglory of the renown
Who are you to build me a home of wood
He who numbered all the stars in the sky
Who alone is pure, just, holy and good
On you, o frail man, I do not rely
I will destroy towers and I will raise
It is I who sets time and numbers days
Author notes
"Go and tell my servant David, 'This is what the LORD says: Are you the one to build me a house to dwell in? I have not dwelt in a house from the day I brought the Israelites up out of Egypt to this day. I have been moving from place to place with a tent as my dwelling. Wherever I have moved with all the Israelites, did I ever say to any of their rulers whom I commanded to shepherd my people Israel, "Why have you not built me a house of cedar?"'
- 2 Samual 7:5-7
The ministry I've been doing for a decade is being severly shaken and I fear will end for me. I am despairing. David wanted to build a tower as a ministry for God, but God humbled David and forbid him to build a tower.
(Option #4)
Written October 29th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- 1 cross + 3 nails =4given by MidniteRae.
300 points, ended October 31, 2005, 6 entries
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This poem is fantastic in the way that it is so humbling. God knows the plans He has for us, and it can be very confusing when the door that was open suddenly slams shut. And we find ourselves on the outside! I pray that your ministry still continues whether or not it is you who are leading it. Sometimes we have to hand the baton over. Sometimes we actually need a rest and get a different view on it. I hope you get some peace about all this.
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I really liked this poem.
It had a lot of emotion in it.
There was also some good imagery.
I really liked how you got the poem from the passage.
Great poem.
Keep it up.
Good luck in my contest!
~Midnite Rae
[the morbid mistress]
ps. sorry for any spelling mistakes, i just got home from the airport -
This is good, sir, and I wish you well. Have you thought of having different families in your congregation host your services? You know, the Joneses one week, the Jefferson's the next, the the Ford's etc.? Good luck!
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You have written about your dispair well in this poem -the emotions are expressed through the words and images you have created. Hopefully you will find some source of renewal and be able to continue. You will know what you are to do, and you will do it.
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excellent writing
This is really very intriging poetry. It really made me think. I like your format here. Very interesting and thought provoking.
etherealforu
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Well-written expression of your faith and core values.
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