A short time ago
You were family, such a big part of my life.
Now to you, all I am is your brother's wife.
Silence is too loud
Since I made a mistake you could not forget.
Involving everyone, not caring who else got upset.
So much for love
The friendship we once had was so easily undone.
Makes me wonder if it ever should have begun.
You have your reasons
Still unsure why or how this stupid fight did happen.
A broken friend and sad family I did not intend.
But remember this
The ball is in your court, it always has been.
Come on, be mature, it's starting to wear thin.
Move on with life
I tried my hardest to work these things out.
Now I conclude, your presence we are better off without!
Author notes
Give honest comments... Wanna give this to the person I wrote it to!
Written November 15th, 2005
A contest entry
- Closure On a Relationship by SoICanErase.
350 points, ended January 26, 2006, 11 entries
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there are times we all find paths that we choose to walk reguardless of the consequences...
maybe she should realise the consequences she chose.
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill -
awesome!
This is beautiful...you captured the emotion so well. I like the rhyming, too. I'm sorry things aren't going so well right now....but somebody always cares...just keep that in mind. Very good write!
<3Mary
(P.s.- thanks for your comment. It's very much appreciated
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this is a really touching poem. sadly i know how this all feels too, me and my sister inlaw are just like this. its sad and childish really, but just like you said, the ball is in her court. this was written extremly well, and you displayed you emotions beautifully. you should give this to her, ive always wanted to give the poems ive written about my brother and her to them but have never had the courage, but i think they should know how you feel. all the best with this. i hope things get better for you. keep up the great work. until next time, take care. and thanks for the comment on my poem
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you should totaly give it to her.....i would.....it tells her that your thinking of her
Em -
haha i reckon you should give this too her...i would
yea i think its really deep and shows how you are feeling right now about her, hopefully if it is what you want, things will resolve themselves and you can both move on and feel the love once more
thanks for you comment on my author page i really appreciate it
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wow! this is pretty deep i like it alot, "great job here! This is a very beautiful and wonderful poem, one of this best The imagery was strong and very vivid and the flow was smooth from start to finish. I love the emotion put into this piece it really lets the readers mind just kinda wonder and set up the scene in there mind. Excellent job!
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Family arguements arn't all that fun are they. I ike the rhyme especially at the start it was great, the whole thing is great actually! hope everything works out ok between you two! Thanks for your comment!
Big Scary -
Wow this was a deep write I loved it. The flow was perfect and the picture you paint with your words wow. I am goin to be keeping and eye out for you new works as i like your style.
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Thank-you very much, your words have great heart-felt meaning. Just wish everyone knew what it means to love! This world would be a better place if we all show UNCONDITIONAL love. Sorry for the loss of your mother. Best wishes always
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Excellent writing talent
I have no answer for this. I have blundered with the being right at all costs. Since my mother died I think of all the times I could have loved instead at all costs of being right. For being right at all costs is never right. Best wishes. I hope things work out. I have had some people be very mean to me. See we all don't have scripts and even those who do in the movies often do retakes until they get it right. In order to do retakes in life to get it right someone has to give up the fight to be right because two wrongs never made any ONE right. I would give every time I proved I was right away to have another chance to love instead. People don't want to be alone, hurt or lose their ability to survive with dignity and yet often we end up losing it all due to the fear of being alone, hurt or losing ability to survive with dignity. Good luck.
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Sounds like you had alot to get offf your chest. It also sounds as though you want to make amends. Making you the better person. Sometimes, yuo have no choice but to let it go so it doesn't eat you up.
Keep it up!!
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Yes, I totally agree! This my way of getting on with life... let them hold on2 their anger & hate. IM FREE!!!!
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beautiful poem.
This is a beautiful poem. Sometimes it's best to let family go their way and you yours. So all that unnecessary drama they can hold on to, and not you......Thank you for sharing this poem with me.... Keep on writing......
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