Color bled this tinge dawn over the lake
While looming the willows to drink the dew awake
Painted her sun through the clouds in amber yawn
Over the lake, color bled this tinge dawn
As the mountain, steps ridged a wondering stair from trees
Below the valley, flutter her branch her hand limb esprit
Down to the lake whisper to welcome a truss bridge
A wondering stair from trees as the mountain steps ridged
Between the elated of the wing butterfly’s drink
Stepped too many paths leading her animal trail, blinked
Welcome the morning sun rising over clouds belated
Of the wing butterfly’s drink, between the elated
The palette of the artist skills upon the amber, sky
In rich vibrant colors of rouge blended up high
Set the tones of red bleeding through orange spills
Upon the amber, sky…the palette of the artist skills
There is a picture painted between land and water’s edge
Rustled the flutter of the leaves blowing on airy ledges
As the butterfly come for the morning acquainted
Between land and water’s edge there is a picture painted
Author notes
Swap Quatrain
The Swap Quatrain was created by Lorraine M. Kanter.
Within the Swap Quatrain each stanza in the poem must be a quatrain (four lines) where the
first line is reversed in the fourth line. In addition, line 2 must rhyme with line 1, and line 3
must rhyme with line 4 and so on, BUT not repeat the same rhyming pattern on subsequent
stanzas.
Rhyming pattern: AABB, CCDD, and so on.
Written November 16th, 2005
A contest entry
- PRE - WRITES WITHOUT TROPHIES ONLY by lindaburns.
1750 points, ended July 28, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Judge:
This is not my favorite style. The requirements of the form make the meanings more difficult to grasp. Even not understanding everything, I see it is very vividly descriptive and I thank you for entering the contest.
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thank u
thank u for the wonderful comments given to my poem. this is not an easy form to do, should have fixed better. Saddie23
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Thanks for pointing them out to me and I will correct them. Saddie23
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The palette of the artist skills upon the amber, sky
In rich vibrant colors of rouge blended up high
Set the tones of red bleeding through orange spills
Upon the amber, sky…the palette of the artist skills
go and edit like this:
stanzas one and two
Color bled this tinge dawn over the lake
While looming the willows to drink the dew awake
Painted her sun through the clouds in amber yawn
Over the lake, color bled this tinge dawn
As the mountain, steps ridged a wondering stair from trees
Below the valley, flutter her branch her hand limb esprit
Down to the lake whisper to welcome a truss bridge
A wondering stair from trees as the mountain steps ridged
stanza four
The palette of the artist skills upon the amber, sky
In rich vibrant colors of rouge blended up high
Set the tones of red bleeding through orange spills
Upon the amber sky, the palette of the artist skills
Rae
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