Dancing lightly on the currents of Life,
the Soul navigates
through treacherous climes ~
submerged in the mighty depths
of the tempests' wrath,
we navigate thought perilously close
to madness...
We must become pirates of destiny
before our vision can surpass
the boundaries
of an imposed horizon,
seizing bounty with zealous intent,
clasping treasure to our rapid hearts...
N'er regret
the lack of wind in your sails ~
patience will be rewarded
with sudden gusts that unfurl your flags
with impertinent speed...
There are those left behind
on the silent shore
who would willingly trade
their earth~bound feet
for a chance
to coast along these unfathomable waters,
quietly free...
Be glorious as you soar
towards the sacred sky,
for there are eyes upon you,
measuring the distance
between you and the sun...
~ January 8, 2006
3:10 p.m.
Author notes
'Pirates Rock!'
Option #3
Graphic Artist Unknown
This is a considerable revision of a poem I originally wrote in approximately 1982...I thought it was a decent one then, but as my style has changed quite a bit over the years, I wanted to elaborate further...I kept a few of the same elements, but expanded on the theme considerably, altering my use of language & metaphor...
The original poem, circa 1982
"Journey Beyond Time"
www.allpoetry. com/poem/69080 9
"The Soul navigates
through treacherous climes
and reveals
direction of Thought.
We must become
pirates of Destiny
before we can
see beyond the Horizon.
Take flight into Oblivion
& do not regret
the lack of wind in your sails---
there are those
on the Silent Shore
who would willingly
trade their earth-bound feet.
Be glorious as you soar,
for there are eyes upon you,
measuring the distance
between you & the Sun..."
"Among the Haida Indians of the Pacific Northwest, the verb
for 'making poetry' is the same as the verb 'to breathe'."
~ Tom Robbins, from the book: "ANOTHER ROADSIDE ATTRACTION"
Written January 8th, 2006
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Wow this is a pretty amazing poem, and it has great meaning behind it. I'm glad you posted the older version of this piece aswell in the notes, as it really gave me insight on how much you have changed it and it is quite interesting to see. They're both wonderful. I love the last two lines, it gives a great ending. Thanks for entering!
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Ahoy scibe off the port bough bouying brave to blow her broadside...a fun write this is...
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"There are those left behind
on the silent shore
who would willingly trade
their earth~bound feet
for a chance
to coast along these unfathomable waters,
quietly free...
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What pwoerful poetry. Oh yes....I would sooner be anythign but earthbound....sounds liek drudgery to me...
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Thank you for hosting & for your kind comments, Kizzy Kat...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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seizing bounty with zealous intent,
clasping treasure to our rapid hearts...
I liked thos two lines in it especially, though the whole thing was wonderful. It has deep meaning, and it gives the mind a challenge, even just reading it and thinking about the words... (that's a good thing). Anyways, awesome job and thanks for entering! -
I htought I found perfection..."we navigate Thought perilously close
to madness..."
and then I hit the last "Be glorious as you soar
towards the sacred sky,
for there are eyes upon you,
measuring the distance
between you and the Sun...
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This holds layers and layers of meanings..of feelings, of wishes and dreams and pleas. Beautifully done, as always. -
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Ooops. You already read it. 
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Well, here we are well into September. Now, the Winklings host you. This poem is not so much postmodern as someone said but rather, metaphysical & spiritual. It is a song of life; a song of hope. Indeed, you become quite didactic with injunctions:
We must become pirates of Destiny
before our Vision can surpass
the boundaries
of an imposed Horizon
This is an imposing write, Wanda.
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Thank you for hosting & for your kind comments, StormGoddess...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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This is beautifully written. And I like both versions. It is interesting to see how you have changed your style and grown over the years. The write overall, was just simply wonderful
Thanks for entering
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Thank you for your efforts in hosting a great contest, D. ~ I'm glad you enjoyed it, my Friend...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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"We must become pirates of Destiny
before our Vision can surpass
the boundaries
" and the last line open up so many mental windows! This is a well written work.
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Thank you for hosting a grand contest, Zayra...I'm glad you enjoyed it, my Friend...This revision is still one of my own favorites...I appreciate your Time...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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"Be glorious as you soar
towards the sacred sky,
for there are eyes upon you,"
Wanda, your poetry is always so inspirational and rich. This poem in particular was like going on a journey. Thank you for sharing it with us.
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Thank you for your kind words, Nanette...I'm glad you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Brillian write..improvised to perfection. Well done!
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Thank you, Tigris...I'm glad you enjoyed it...Thanks for hosting...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Using the sea as a metaphor is such an creative approah. Nice work! I really enjoyed this.
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Thank you, grannyeri...I'm glad you liked it...Thanks for comin' by...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Enjoyed seeing the way you have grown over the years in the change of style. Liked both really, they are so different in style. First time I have ever seen the word climes used in a verse. Like the part about never regreting not having wind, that it will come with big gusts to move you forward if you just wait for it patiently.
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It's only 12:30 here, my Friend...that's prime time for me...
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I think I told you I did construction news reporting for 12 years; I understand the feast or famine of the trades...It'll be alright, Benjamin...things will turn up for ya, my Friend...I love horses; I bet the foal was beautiful...& yeahhh, I liked your story; if you think it runs on a bit, work on it & tighten it up a lil'...maybe add to it a little more...Most of what we write is from Memory anyway...I think it'd be good...Who knows??? Maybe you could sell it to a hunting magazine or something...Hope ya get some rest, my Friend...It's been a long day for ya, I know...I dunno how I helped, but I'm glad I did, Ben~jammin... Wanda
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Oh yeah, and Go to Bed! Its late and who knows what dreams may come...
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Thanks. You helped alot tonight. Sailed my ship home 31/2 hours from Arkansas since last we talked. Saw a day old colt from a mare the vet assurred was not(!) pregnant. I'm in a real slack wind place right now... Out of work with 5 employees. Bids pending; hoping something breaks. I needed to sing and dance for potential customers this weekend but tended to family first. So you like my story... It seems to run on a bit to me. That was 18 years ago. I didn't actually sit in the owl gunk, and got there too late to see the sun come up, but the rest is true.
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Really touchy poem. Life in the dimension of time and analysing it within a frame of water and sea. Impressive. You are a matured poet, I appreciate your style of presentation of sentiments with symbolic effects.
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you were right..like it alot! its a captivating write, couldnt take my eyes off it till i was done, its very almost vast and open , but delves very deep.
well done! from Steph
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Wow. I liked reading this poem. I have been writing a long tme too and it is so wierd how our poems change with time. Style may come and go but we never lose our ability to create wonderful poems. Even if no one else likes them, they are the depths of our soul so it is ourselves that we must please and no one else.
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Excellent
Wow, this is an incredible poem... It's always nice to put a spin on things. Keep up the good work man. I really like this one. -
Excellent!! Brava!!
Your style has changed yet, the soul of inception seeks new horizons as in the magnficently crafte piece... your growth shines and the finished production is another new birth... in your work and in you... Brava Magnolia you always had the skill and talent it just becomes an endless progression of beauty Thank you for taking me away!!
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Thank you, Mouse Poet...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thank you for your kind words, Sau...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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I do like this one. How it causes the mind to drift on the waves of time. Nice.
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I loved this poem; it is very inspiring. The word-order and structure of your writes, and especially this one, uses great imagery to convey a message emphatically. I liked the description of the 'gush of wind' as reward for patience... So many times in life, frustration and helplessness creep up. Thanks for sharing these kind words...
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Sorry to see you drop out of the workshop/contest, but I know exactly where you're coming from as it is quite time consuming. I think I like this version even better than the original save for those 'scattered capitalizations' Wishing you all the best
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Thank you, Rob...I'm pleased you liked this one & glad it gave ya a lil' lift...This is a brand new write & was never in the workshop; the original one was...I have left it in the workshop, as Lyndon didn't want me to quit...I was just concerned that someone might object, considering the workshop critiques I received on it (which I largely ignored, by the way; they kept telling me to drop the caps, ampersands & ellipses...the usual criticisms I get...) Here is the original, my Friend... Sweet Pea
(the original poem)
'Journey Beyond Time'
www.allpoetry.com/poem/690809
The Soul navigates
through treacherous climes
and reveals
direction of Thought.
We must become
pirates of Destiny
before we can
see beyond the Horizon.
Take flight into Oblivion
& do not regret
the lack of wind in your sails---
there are those
on the Silent Shore
who would willingly
trade their earth-bound feet.
Be glorious as you soar,
for there are eyes upon you,
measuring the distance
between you & the Sun...
~ approximately 1982 ~
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(the original poem)
'Journey Beyond Time'
www.allpoetry.com/poem/690809
The Soul navigates
through treacherous climes
and reveals
direction of Thought.
We must become
pirates of Destiny
before we can
see beyond the Horizon.
Take flight into Oblivion
& do not regret
the lack of wind in your sails---
there are those
on the Silent Shore
who would willingly
trade their earth-bound feet.
Be glorious as you soar,
for there are eyes upon you,
measuring the distance
between you & the Sun...
~ approximately 1982 ~ -
Yeah, what James and Jim said!lol.
By all means, leave them both in. But it back in the workshop as well. I will just consider the entry that scores highest in my judging system. This one struck me as I happen to be afloat
in the doldrums at present and this gave me a moment of fresh breeze. Thank you.
Peace, Rob -
Sighhh... Ohhh, James... You're so sweet to your Wanda, my Friend...what lovely words you always manage to leave in your wake...& I love you, too, James...You're very kind to me & always have been...I'm pleased we met so many moons ago, my Friend... 
Wanda
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Oh you're such a bundle of love!!!!
How you manage to keep such a strong heart truly amazes me and makes me feel good just for knowing you. Whenever I stop by your poems I don't ever feel down or left behind. You keep your readers involved and warm with your cool and inviting personality.
Meeting you is one of my favorite memories here at allpoetry, because you came out of nowhere and ran like a tidal wave over this site. Everyone knows who you are dear, because you are so lovely and wonderful. I remember just meeting you and now here we are, nearly a year and a half old in our friendship. I love you dear.
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Oooooooh Wander, I love it!! This is gorgeous! Love your use of words in this...all with such power and purpose, so perfectly placed to create vivid images and imaginings.
submerged in the mighty depths
of the tempests' wrath,
we navigate Thought perilously close
to madness...
LOVE this stanza! I actually felt like gasping for air!! "...perioulsly close to madness..." Brilliant. So many times I've reached that point, too! LOL! Superb, dear friend. So very much stark truth and power here. Masterfully crafted display of word art! Brava!! Love ya, Wander Woman!!
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"Be glorious as you soar
towards the sacred sky,
for there are eyes upon you,
measuring the distance
between you and the Sun..."
Those lines are gorgeous. I love this poem. Of course, though, right?
You never cease to amaze me, with the power you have with the word. I read, always in a state of awe and wonder.
Love and light,
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Oh Wander, I love this one ... it is so full of hope and beauty and just acceptance and joy
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Excellent poem, Wanda! I really enjoyed the read!
Good Luck in the contest!
Much Love,
<3 Maureen
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Thank you for your logical response, JD...I appreciate ya, my Friend...& while I still have my 'random capitals' goin' on, there aren't nearly as many... Thanks, my Friend...I'm glad you liked it...Truthfully, I'm not sure why I even entered the workshop...I never edit once it's done & posted...& I'm hard~headed as Hell... I do listen, but still do as I must to be able to look myself in the mirror... Wanda
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I see no reason why the poem can't be in a contest and in a workshop as well, as long as you leave it as is, and don't change things during the contest based on critiques from the workshop.
If you did that, there would reason for others to be upset, since they wouldn't have the same "edge" that you would. I imagine Rob would agree, since he's very level headed. Whether the other people who entered would agree is another story. I don't know. However, that would be my take on it.
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Hi, like this better than part one no so obscure, it paints a clear and beautiful picture, a very good write, all the best in the comp,Di
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Eloquently written
Wanda you never seize to amaze me my dear sweet sister. I will make sure Rob reads this one also. I feel it will help him relate this to what he is now going through. Thank you! -
Wunderbar
Wunderbar! This poem reminds me of several post modern poems i have read. I especially like the use of capitalization for personification and emphasis, it adds another level to the writing. Also and excellent choice of words. I loved it!
~Eric
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