Where the silence is heard
Inside the portal of my mind
Near the garden of sorrow
Summer of tears you will find
Where empty cradles rock
And reaper of life creeps
Close to the centre of heart
Drugged patience sleeps
A coffin of dead hopes lie
In corner where shadows play
The willow weeps near spring
Close to where rests my day
Night of infinity sings lullaby
Over my worn, wounded soul
Freedom rests in winter stream
Wish I could change this role
This drama goes on for ever
With same sad genre of sorrow
A drama with no audience I play
The end I shall never know…
~*~
Author notes
Written January 23rd, 2006
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very good poem
i enjoyed the poem from the beginning till the end
it has a great flow
nice work -
An eerie feel to the piece...like someone lost in the woods...
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There are some amazingly great words written. I love your style and the way you express your feelings. It's so deep yet very professional. Very well done.
Keep writing
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Lovely personification ...
in this poem and emotions interwoven with nature. Expressive in its sorrow and successful in paradoxes and irony. You are such a dramatic writer! I loved this.
Best wishes for a wonderful 2008 and MORE poetry please!
Love
Myra
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Hey! It has been quite awhile I know, but this is a beautiful piece. The emotion is palpable and I can definitely relate to this.
Hope all is well with you....
Megan
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Very interesting poem, I must say. I liked it. My favorite lines were:
"Night of infinity sings lullaby
Over my worn, wounded soul
Freedom rests in winter stream
Wish I could change this role"
The poem was smooth(I don't know if you can understand what I'm trying to say), and I liked that. -
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Thank you very much for the comment
~ Lonely
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A troubled soul I also feel I am, this hit home here...Love this stanza and the way it's expressed...A coffin of dead hopes lie
In corner where shadows play
The willow weeps near spring
Close to where rests my day
I hope you see brighter days, as I do hope for us all...things sure do look bad many nights, but I pray for sunshine in the morn.. Many blessings, for you are one!
Thanks for being you, and sharing your heart so sincere! 
Love Timothy xo
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Your popem is very good. I loved the usage of diction in it. However, I have one complaint: your grammar.
I.E. A coffin of dead hopes lie
Since you're talking about a *coffin* of dead hopes, the lie is supposed to be lies. Focus on your grammar a bit more. Otherwise, a very good write, take care, and Keep writing...
~^~Sada~^~
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What a sad poem and it's personal
the words used are heart wrenching...
other than that it's very well written poem, beautifully rhymed as always... meter comes naturally in your poems...
mina
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Excellent
You are becoming an expert poet, this one is really well written with powerful verse. Loved your conclusion, quite exception write Kiddo. Absolutely well done.
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This is very dramatic. I think you have created an interesting write..though it is much different than what I usually read.
Keep writing.
Lady
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Manoj Sanyal right now