by ~Gregg Rowe~
His dream constructed :
on cold winter silver days --
chop white birch, - I hear,
songs of Mother’s season, - stop --
watch Canadian geese fly south
Author notes
LINK TO VERSION 2
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Tanka:
Tanka is similar to Haiku (See Week 1), but is the most rigidly adhered to form in terms of structure. It is composed of 5 lines of 31 syllables or less, using a short/long/short/long/long format (5/7/5/7/7). Overall, Tanka consists of two separate divisions in terms of rhythm structures, each of about one breath length to recite.
opportunities
seized sacred intuition
recognized windows
discovering your purpose
ultimate dream fulfillment
Written by: Tracy Lynn Repchuk
© Canadian Federation of Poets
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Written February 5th, 2006
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A lovely and peaceful poem with a lot of natural imagery
This was quite a natural poem. I found the rhythm quite unusual- is this typical of a tanka? I wondered, as I'm not too familiar with the form. Good write about birds flying south for winter and changing seasons- interesting topic you've chosen there. I liked the title although I got a little confused by the start of the poem.
Keep writing, this was a lovely and natural write
All the best
Pozo
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Gregg,as silly as it sounds, this brought tears to these eyes, that adore you. My precious Aunt that passed away in the hot summer days of July,loved watching your Canadian Geese...more than anything else in the world. And you reminded me of that.
Thank you,
All my Love,
As Always,
Deena
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This Tanka is nice because of the imagery the words eventually create. There are several ways which people write tanka. I myself find this a bit different from mine...however that does not mean it is not correct. I really did enjoy this and the photo suites this perfectly. Keep up the nice work.
LIZ
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