Bitterly tasty, beautifully ugly,
weakly powerful, colourful crow,
sat on a deserted leafless tree
and stares around like a friendly foe.
Shallow well with thirsty water,
lazily searching for a darkened ray.
Thoughtful dilemma in a senseless brain,
searching for a careless way.
A gorgeous girl and a feminine boy,
drowned in crosswords of lovely hate.
Colourless rainbow, painless wound
life is dead, they blame their fate.
- Vichitra Joshi (J.Vic)
Author notes
Colourful Crow - Devil in disguise
Second Stanza - Lust being taken as Love
Third Stanza - The result after the devil makes the couple think that thier simple lust for each other was LOVE.
Title - For few good people taking Love completely as what it is not like.
Sorry for writing on the same subject again.
Nothing else is difficult to understand, I think. If so, Kick Me. 
take cares and have a nice time
*Miss Me*
- Vic
Written November 17th, 2005
What did you think
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brillant
ha this poem it means what i say when i tell my friend shes not in love just in lust of it's just infatuation maybe this well help her get what i mean when i ay it
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wow... that sure was a twist of events... i really love your use of images here. the "thirst" signifying lust, the hunger of bodies...
i like the way you've woven the age old story of the thirsty crow into this... interesting perceptions.
well done!
bless ya!
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Puzzling
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~looks in wonder again~ Wow, nice use of oxymorons, ~applaudes~ You started with a crow in a desert and went all the way to a girl n a guy hating each other 0_o;; heheh..nice
Tc!
Love,
Ruchi -
excellent
wow quite a fallow up already, excellent poem. Very well wrote, I like the way you wrote it, really keeps the readers attention, also short which keeps the readers attention, I have a low attention span as you can figure
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Ah, that word "love"! It's as misunderstood as the "duality" of this world. This was a good attempt to portray what's right in front of people's noses, but they don't see it. Great poem, Vic!
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hmmm... love is strange isnt it? Well paradoxes i believe are the essence of life... for isnt life itself a paradox... we all are moving towards an eventual demise and yet we call it living...
great write... and just because it is written this way... I am going to ask you to spot one of mine called All for Nothing... its a poem with a paradox in each line... do check it out and let me know
tk care
Richa -
Wow!
Shallow well with thirsty water,
lazily searching for a darkened ray.
Thoughtful dilemma in a senseless brain,
searching for a careless way.
What awesome words and a incredible flow...you did wonderful here...I might reread this one a few times
Kari -
Whoops, My Bad..... The First Bit Was On The Wrong Page But The Second On The Right. From "Anyway, Your Poem".
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*Four And A Half Stars*
Thankyou So Much For Your Comment On My Poem-
It is Much Appreciated. Thankyou Also For Your Advice, Once I Read What You Said I Noticed That The Poem Could Have Been Seperated More.
Anyway; x), Your Poem. I Think The Message You Are Conveying Is Very Depthful, And The Clever Oxymorons Well Placed And Meaningful. They Also Emphasise And Communicate. It's A Great Peice.
I Particularly Liked This:
"Shallow well with thirsty water".
It's Excellent And Powerful.
THUMBS UP
Loves
-Tamin -
My Oh My...
I was wondering were all the applauds were at!
They are on your page
Oh well *pouts and envies you*
Well well! The poem itself is something else, the intensity, the word choice, the symbols and the concieted messages.
The second stanza is my personal favorite.
"Shallow well with thirsty water,
lazily searching for a darkened ray.
Thoughtful dilemma in a senseless brain,
searching for a careless way."
The flow, the rhyme and the brievity of the poem give depth and intensity making it more powerful.
You have done a great job
Will be reading more
See you around!
Hasta la pasta
~Hana~
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A gorgeous girl and a feminine boy,
drowned in crosswords of lovely hate.
Colourless rainbow, painless wound
life is dead, they blame their fate.
deep thoughts..n extraordinary way to pen them down
way to go my friend..
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Very nice, like the use of juxtaposition and that works oh so wonderfully with the subject of LOVE.
Like hwo you did explainsome of it at the end too though I'm still left somewhat tangled - though one does have abit on his mind .
Anyway keep it up. Didn't flow as well as I would like :/ but thats cool.
-Tate -
awsome
so far this is my fav..but imma keep goin -
whew...thanks for the author's comment... without it I would not have understood what this poem was about... In either way, I would still (and still) adore it... The form (rhyme, words, EVERYTHING) were so perfect.
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i like the imagery used here, the words are so descriptive and captivating. well done.
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great orientation of thoughts and words... thats why i asked you that are you really 18. you write wonderful...
you wite too mature... keep penning on and on...
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NO need to apologise for writing on the same topic : )
I think people are so quick to fall in and out of 'Love'...just for the heck of it, at the same time, not looking deep enough to find anything meaningful in the relationship. Many times it remains a case of lust, or desire and physical attraction. I like the adjectives used, though some how the whole story doesnt come out unless you read the synopsis..I just wish it was litttttle more straightforward and subject to a little less need for interpretation...
But, on the whole, wonderful job : )
ria-k -
This is unique, very different. I like the style here-Bitterly tasty, beautifully ugly,
weakly powerful, colourful crow,
A gorgeous girl and a feminine boy,
drowned in crosswords of lovely hate.
Those lines are my fav. well done! -
Have I commented on this already? If I have..sue me, I guess... Anyway, I must confess I enjoy attacking you with my comments
Oh well, beautifully done job, as usual. I too noticed the extreme amount of Oxymorons.. I enjoyed that very much so. AWESOMENESS!!
*hugs*
Lisi -
dude...i gotto give it to you. you're good. no...i'm sorry. i'm lying. you're not good. sorry, lol. you're a wonderful poet. i have not read that many poems by you, but frankl...this is a very very well written poem. i love how you manage to give the opposite of everything in such a fantastic poetic way. congrats on another great write. great use of oxymoron.....everywhere.
best wishes -
Lovely
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omg vic! this poem is so cool! i love crows/ravens! their like the only bird that im not scared of! lol this was so good that im applauding and bookmarking it!
-the one and only hailey -
I really enjoyed this work it was a great rhyming poem that flowed well and it was deep and dark. I really enjoyed it keep writing.
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Oh wow, vic, you amaze me, Constantly
I love you buddy
~Alea
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i liked the almost halting style that you wrote in, it makes you stop to think about what was just said
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Aamazing. Just perfect.
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Escuse my language for a moment luvluv but that was fucking awesome and by far one of my favorite poems I have read on here!
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Oxymorons! Don't see those very often...good work
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WOW
OMG!AMAZING!This is an awesome poem!I love it a loot!I'll re-read it a few times cus it's just simply EXCELENT!You're a great writer!
Keep writing
Best Wishes
~LostMermaid~
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well done
its quite complicated poem that means you are realy good in poet writing,well done -
awesome
I shall never kick you!!!nope nope, *shakes head* did you miss me!? anyways I really liked it Vic!this is something so different and wonderful, a lot of hidden symbolism, good tone, wonderful flow and great imagery, I miss you a lot and I Love you so much don't forget about me 
Ruth
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you're so cool
...soundsd a tinge like Ovid's story of "Pyramus and Thisbe", with y our own unique and wonderful twist of course!
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so full of oppositions so is the girl in the last stanza really not gorgeous? hm, Nicely written though, I have missed y our incredible talent!
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This piece was awesome! You made it satirical without the humor! You shouldn't have explained the poem, for it is so easily brought out, well, for me. I can see along the lines where some might not understand it though. I love how everything was based on the society based on lust instead of love. I wish that it were to be discouraged, but the media promotes it, as do many. This poem takes a stand against such practices. I love how you used symbolism in this piece...keep up the great work and keep writing!
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Excellent poetry
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I love it! This is simply beautiful. The flow, the emotion, the imagery, just everything about this was amazing. Wonderful piece.
Yours always,
Stormy the Clown -
O.O wow.
give me a minute.
wow. hehe, excellent poem!! I love your descriptivness and vision and imagery and wow! haha. good job. =) -
oooh good job eternal
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This is a fabulous poem! Your work is wow! I am in awe when I read it! Oxymorons make for great poems in my opinion and this is just taking it a step further. I do not see anything that needs to be changed or tweaked. Maybe, you'll find something in the future but this is a lovely poem!
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preety good dude. i think the tect in the poem fits nicely with the plot your trying to make.
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oh wooow
talk about a poem loaded with oxymorons!
this is quite ingenious i think! keep it up
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Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!
Vic, I'm sorry it took me so long to get back here and see this lovely poem that you decided to share with all of us.
You got very deep here and even though you shouldn't have to explain yourself about the poem's meaning. For those who wouldn't understand it was so good of you to do that. 
and choco for you my vicilicious little brother and friend. You may still call me Lady Joyce if that is what you prefer. I will think of lots of good things to call you.
Excellent work and thank you so much for sharing with all of us. You definitely get a standing ovation to go along with my applause and keep smiling little bro.
and zzzzzzz for you from your sis, Joyce
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Loved your poem, Vic, though it is a bit too mystical for my brain to understand completely. You sure write good, with good rhymes and even rythm... I could never get the rythm right in my poems, hard enough to make the lines rhyme!
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wow- you're extremely gifted! =) i'm new, "lime"- they call me.
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Man, I love it!! You are extremly talented!! What an awesome buddy I have I can't wait to read more of your work! *hugs*
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This is great.You are such a talented poet I can see why you are called eternal poet! Excellent!!!
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Dark & Beautiful
Very expressive, your mastery of oxymoronica is amazing I especially liked "colourless rainbows", I have felt that way a time or two. Brilliant write.
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absoutely brilliant! u r truly talented!!!
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Excellent
Another Excellent write wishing you the best of luck in the contest ~Brian~ -
good poem
crows aren't colorful........... wait a minute I get it!! thats the opposite! *sigh* clever -
good work
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GREAT WRITE!!!! I lved the part abou the girl and the boy... it was great... I miss you....
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I know hehe sorry ill come online more often now and ill read you more often now *pinky promise*
♥Kiki -
... do you have any idea that you are reading me after almost soo many months ...i like it Miss-Smart-Spiffy ... aka my dear Mish-cool-kiki
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Splendifferous
Twas splendifferous!
hm suprisingly i understude it before reading the authors commens/suggestions... and what not... OMG i think im becoming.... smart?! geez like that'll happen hehe
s n s
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Wow... I agree with Laura..this really does deserve two applauds. This was really good and I really didn't expect to see anything dark written by you, but this turned out really good and I enjoyed reading it. (Plus I totally appreciate the explanation in the author's comments )
*clap clap clap*
Lisi
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How on earth did you come up with that?!
Twas amazing, you deserve two applauds. But I can only give you one because that's the rules, damnit.
I'll keep an eye out for more of your work,
Love Laura xoxoxoxo
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brilliant
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Paradoxical by enternalpoet's poem significance truth in front of us due to reality, we feel light but there's dark inside it that's why the poet penned paradoxical name for his creativity, anyway, we feel ourselves inside this poem.
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Awesome
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Hey Vichi,
It was an awesome piece...The opposites were brilliant and the best part was that the flow of the poem was not disturbed...
well done..
ur pal,
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oww scary background! its unusual to read a poem of yours that is so dark, but it it still as wonderful as always x
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Wonderful poem my dear and very well written. You did this to perfection. Congrats. Hopefully you'll look into my poems soon...
Rogue
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Excellent poem Vic. You created a lot of awesome oxymorons in this piece Very smooth and your rhyme skills are becoming impeccable as well. s and best wishes to you always... ~genie~
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Nice poem hun very discriptive nice to see some new poetry from you you are a talented person keep writting sweetie
XxXsophieXxX
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Dear vic, this is really amazing.. you've done a great job..
I was tempted to give it a read coz of its title and it really turned out wonderful.
I've never tried writing such a thing.. Now I'm thinking to try.. it sounds good.. paradoxical!!!
s All the best for the contest.
take care.
Neha -
My dear brother,this is so wonderful.I always tell you that you're a great poet.
Shahrzad
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awesome
You are an awesome poet my luv luv! Ihope you ever ever always continue to write! Lottsaluv!
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This is a wonderful write...I LOVE IT
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WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!! Honey that is so sad.... it is amazing but so so sad....... Keep up the good work. You are an amazing writer and the best friend anyone could ever have.
*hugs and kisses sweetheart*
Raina -
hmmm.....I dont knwo what to say about this one. my feelings twards it are paradoxical lol. I love the paradox'es but i found the over all poem quite confusing. Your explenations helped quite a bit, but you really shoudlent have to explain yourself. Im not nocking you as a poet or the poem itself. I think the poem is beautiful, just a bit confusing thats all. great write in the end.
kevo -
Captivating!
WOW! This is pretty deep. A Paradox definately exist.
Its amazing what can be achieved with the english language.
Mixed metaphors and similes make this puzzle of a poem
razzle and dazzle! The gothic kind of creepy background
adds dimension to this extravagant piece.
Extremely good writing which captivates and entertains
the reader until its finale! Bravo!!
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Great job keep up the great work!!!
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I love how you take the opposite of everything " colourless rainbow; friendly foe" great words and a great way to write. I loved this.
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this was incredable. the opening lines really took my attention and you held me the entire way through. you are amazing
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