Alone on this misty cold dawn
Wondering from where to start
This year winter has come too soon
Freezing my soul, my heart
I'm so lonely in this exile
On the end of a long, long trail...
Don’t try to quell my passions
Anything, everything I will surpass
Left all alone on an autumn morn
I shall follow the path of green grass
I'm so lonely in this exile
On the end of a long, long trail...
Ships are sailing, I’m not free to go
Home and loved ones are so far away
For now sorrow shall be my guide
And dreams of you and me, my only joy
I'm so lonely in this exile
On the end of a long, long trail...
I shall keep on going for ever
Until I will reach the goal so far
Tired of long journey, home is calling
Still following my guiding star...
I'm so lonely in this exile
On the end of a long, long trail...
Author notes
Got inspired by Lionking II, the exile of Kovu (guess the spells are okay) I have seen that movie for about 10 times without getting bored lolz
Written February 14th, 2006
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Hehe! Lion King! I love the movies! All of them! Haha A great write!!
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Well, I am not sure about notepad. I use Works and if I copy and paste, these strange characters do appear on my pieces.
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I'm not sure Tiya, I didn't see any question marks when I came to this page to read your comment.. strange.. I use note pad to write and copy and paste from there... Do these strange marks appear there?
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I didn't know that this was a collabration. As for the question marks, if you see the copied and pasted stanza in my prior comment, you will see weird characters, thats where I saw question a mark yesterday. For some reason there seems to be not even one question mark in your piece today, did you fix it? Well, I saw them yeasterday
. Keep writing...
~^~Tiya~^~
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this stanza that you just picked out isnt my idea at all anyways... as you see its a collabration. So i have no pains about it
and.. Im not sure about question marks? where did I use them? thanks for the comment
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I really really like the first stanza, that was a wonderful start. Later on the poem went well. I have one enormous comlaint:
Ships are sailing, I�m not free to go
Home and loved ones are so far away
For now sorrow shall be my guide
And dreams of you and me, my only joy
...In that stanza the rhyme is off, lol. Well, its not really an enormous complaint, it is a suggestion to tweek the stanza a bit. I loved the original Lion King. I haven't seen the second one though, maybe I should. Oh yea, you might want to take care of the question marks . Nice write overall, keep writing...
~^~Tiya~^~
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