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undone despair

in my thirsty graveyard,
your prompt answers
turn into liquid moons

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Even though you won't read this, thank you for being by my side on such a  day...
Written February 19th, 2006

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  • hilly
    October 23
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    hmmmmmm i really love this, even as short as it is. i hate the word despair though, it's so.....idk, maybe it's becoming cliche. although i guess the same thing could be said of "moons" but i loved your use of that, so maybe i'm just nonsensical. lol, nice piece dear.
  • drunk in traditions
    March 10, 2006
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    I like this a lot.
    saying so much in a little amount of words.
    Short poems with long meanings.
    Are very good.
    Thank you for writing this.

  • doughjoe silver member
    February 27, 2006
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    short poem and long powerful meaning love this I'm new to AP and just learning all the different poem styles like this one thanking for sharing you work

  • lies-n-pain
    February 27, 2006
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    wow! very strong poem! it was full of emotion and it was full of just like power... do u understand what i mean?!? lol... sorry i'm tired and in the middle of class!

  • Tinkerbell-Or-Me
    February 27, 2006
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    extremly well rounded and amazing

    This is amazing! Though it is a tad short, it is still an truly awesome work of poetry. Just the thought of grave yards makes me shudder....and then you put in liquid moons and it made me at peace. It's a mix of dark and light and I love it!

    I give it a 10!!

    <3 becca
  • Voodoo witch
    February 27, 2006
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    Although very short it has a deep meaning!

  • Angel Eyes
    February 27, 2006
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    Romantic and dark...i loved it. Very intense..great imagery. The liquid moon did it for me.
    Great write!
    Keep up the great work!
    Take care,

    ~Angel Eyes~

  • Red Shoes
    February 25, 2006
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    Romanitcally Dark

    *FINAL COMMENT BEFORE JUDING* This was a powerful piece. Very poetic and different. I particually liked the liquid moons. Although the use of graveyards and thirst initally give a dark edge to it, the romantic use of liquid moons turns it around into something else. Thank you for this dramatic entry into my contest.
  • Pome
    February 19, 2006
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    This is sooo imaginative and just wonderful to visualize Great job.

  • Maria y Ivan
    February 19, 2006
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    Even though this is short and everything, it still seems rather dark and I like it because I love dark poetry.

  • Red Shoes
    February 19, 2006
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    Well this is just wonderful! Liquid moons...such an image..Thank you for your entry!
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