One moment, one sigh, one whisper...
One dream that finally came true
One smile, one person, one lifetime...
Of eternal bliss with you!
A contest entry
- Pic Prompt: Love by IrishGypsyRose.
600 points, ended October 11, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Castle Of Dreams. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended October 12, 5 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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This is very nice, and congrat on the silver trophy as well. Best of luck in the contest. I am sure you will do well
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Breathtaking!!!
So much said in so few lines. I found it to be beauteous in its structure. Great write. Yours in poetry,gypsy
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Thank you, and thank you for the silver! I was focusing more on the feelings. I haven't personally felt this yet, but just wrote it out of what I one day hope to find. I'm glad you found your eternal bliss!
Thanks again!
Hugs!!!
Cayla
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Such a sweet little one here... I feel this way too about that special someone and he knows who he is, but he's not on this site anyway so doesn't matter!
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Awww. I could really see this piece on the inside of a valentine's card. Beautifully sweet. Thanks for entering.
DancingRed.
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This is so short, but blissful and sweet. you have a great technique with short poetry, I haven't read anyone who has a good a handle on it as you seem to. Nice work, no wonder you won gold.
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Hey! Thanks... I didn't know that but I changed it!!! Thanks for the comment and the help!
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a good short poem here, look at those ellipses though they shoudl be just three dots when you use the ...
hehehe i am always in the writing mood
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Congrates on winning this contest! Total coolness!
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hehehehe ::hug:: but you do know me.
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As Always your so sweet! If I didn't know you I'd say......Oh, anyway Thank you so much!!!!
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congrats hun! great job getting the gold!
LP&CG
Liz
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bliss, indeed!
WOW you did good here. Again. You are a master at the short form of poetry, saying a lot in a few words. Awesome job.
(And I'm not just saying that to flatter you because you're holding a contest I'm in HA HA HA HA HA) Not only does it rhyme but it flows well. Good work.
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4 Stars ****
wow.. too much it says in short form of poetry... tee hee.. i like the rhyming... because i like rhyming in poems....best of luck in the contest again...
take cares and have a nice time my dear friend... just keep it up... your humble little friend....
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.... ..... - vic ( who else? )
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i reeeeally like this. just work on the length and re-enter it!
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good night
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i know your secret, yet you are so good at trickery ::grrrrr:: great write again!
LP&CG
liz
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Oh!!! Another short poem! I'm so ... jealous that you can write short poems with so much meaning!! Ahh!! hehe, but i'm so happy you can. You're a very talented writer! Keep up your great work ok!! Goodness i say that on ever poem! I just cant help myself, you're a good writer!!
Stephani -
Thank you!
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simple sweet and to the point good lucj and nice form
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a good piece of poetry, i like the layout, looks effective, made me think of that song too by queen, one vision hehehe
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sweet
ooo that's really sweet. reminds me of a hallmark card. great job! -
this is a very cute piece.short but sweet.you definatly captured a very magical moment
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ooooooooh my god!! that is soooooo cool!! it is simple, clear and very very very very beautiful!! good job writing this piece of work!! (sight!) it is sooo cool!! i love it!!
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simply said for a short poem it's full of feelings
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(sighs) I love this one. So simple but so full of love. Great job on this thanks for sharing.
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hehe..This was very pretty. I think more could be done with it, but it was a very nice poem all the same. *sigh* I wish I could feel something as pure as this again!!!
this was very, very nice and I really liked it, but I like I said, I was wanting to scroll down and read morez!! hehe
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Ahhh. Hallmark has a run for its money. This is totally hallmark potential! I love it. Just wish I had someone to say it to
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this is very simple, and to the point. sometimes the best way to say something is to make it easily understoond.
blessed be -
beautiful, short and sweet appreciate the opportunity to read your work - good luck in the contest
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lovely, I think everyone else has already said everything about this piece
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Short and sweet! Lovely and to the point, and yet it keeps me thinking. I love poems like this! You did a wonderful job on this poem! I applaud you!
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wow that was great even tho it was short but some of the greatest poems are short keep it up
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awesome job on this one! it was pretty short but sumtimes the shortes poems can b the best! amazin job!
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Wonderful range of emotions captured in so few words. Great work and good luck in the contest.
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This poem made me feel all lonely. I don't have one. But I loved it just the same. Great write, so simple, so to the point, so much emotion in such a few words.
Great write, good luck to you in the contest.
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Aww, what a beautiful poem!, I love the rhythm and the way u set it out! Good job
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wow...this was really good.It said so much in just a few words.Beautiful,sweet and simple; just the way things should be
great job.
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This was pretty good; simple, beautiful, and provocative. Made me reflect on some more intimate moments in my life. Thanks, I enjoyed that (smile).
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wow.... the flow was great... the poem was excellent. I really liked it and I think its great. Keep up the good work.... M.T.B....
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even though this is a really short poem, i think it is soo sweet! the poem is great and you did an awesome job writing it. keep up the good work!!
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Repetition works so well here in these few lines - simply stated, yet says such profound truths. Nicely written.
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Wonderful
My God, what is this? Is it a little gem or a sparkling nugget of gold? -
it sounds like love. it seems like the writer has been waiting so much for this special person...but i guess it finally payed off... we would all give everything to live in "eternal bliss."
The title, "One Moment," seems like it brought a lifetime of happiness though.
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and one of everything can mean a lot for a life time .. your words bring awe to my mind, very well done, thanks for sharing this piece, keep up the awesome poetry here!!!!!!!!
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