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When The Bloom Is On The Roses

When…….... the bloom is on the roses I’ll be thinking of you dear

                      When I feel the sunshine on my face I’ll know that you are near The………....soft caress of your sweet touch that flows upon the wind

                      The whisper of a love song that the nightingale will send Bloom….......of love within my heart that grows each passing day

                      Bloom that stays forever bright since you have gone away Is………........it your sparkling laughter I hear echo through the glen?

                      Is my love for you still stirred beside the places we have been?

On…………..sunny days your spirit shines so brightly in the skies

                      On starlit nights it’s then I see the twinkling of your eyes

The…………glow inside grows stronger as the years go passing by

                      The flame of love will burn until the day that I will die

Roses………in the early spring are things I love to see

                      Roses that you loved so much bring memories to me

I’ll…………....dream of you at night when I lie sleeping in the bed

                      I’ll hope that you will hear each whispered prayer that I have said

Be…………...patient dearest sweetheart and I’ll join you one fine day

                      Be waiting for me in my dreams till I can come to stay

Thinking.......of the times we shared will keep me until then

                      Thinking of the day when I'll be with you once again

Of………..…. all the loves that might have been I’m glad that I found you

                      Of this I am quite certain and my love for you stays true

You…….........are the one each morning whose sweet memory I keep

                      You are the last thought on my mind before I go to sleep

Dear………... you’ll always have my heart and I know you are near

                      Dear, the roses that you loved look beautiful this year

 

And… When the bloom is on the roses I’ll be thinking of you dear

Author notes

Split Acrostic
Written March 9th, 2006

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  • pyro1011
    April 9, 2006
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    Sweet

    I love how you positioned this poem. It was well thought out, and its beautiful.

  • Kochibo
    April 3, 2006
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    Oh this is SOOOOOO SWEEEEEEEET!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love the repetition, the structure, the content, EVERYTHING! So romantic! *slaps boyfriend who isn't romantic at all* lol. Wow, this is definitely a deserved win, great job. I love the ending piece:
    Dear………... you’ll always have my heart and I know you are near


    Dear, the roses that you loved look beautiful this year

    This last line, I don't know why, it's just so sad and beautiful at the same time. Also, the way you played out the sentence twice, not just one time, it really added to the effect. Excellent write! *adds u 2 favorites*

    Leasha



  • Frogzter gold member
    March 18, 2006
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    Absolutely wonderful! Congrats on the well deserved win!
    Blessings
    Frog

  • ShelleyA gold member
    March 16, 2006
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    A beautiful write and message. A lovely expression of love. Good flow and rhyme. Well crafted and a most enjoyable read.

    Shelley

  • Hoosierpoet silver member
    March 13, 2006
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    Very well done - reads like a beautiful song. Hope you can have this put to music sometime.

    Best wishes,
    Moses
  • Honeydew
    March 13, 2006
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    THIS IS SAD, YET BEAUTIFUL..A GREAT SPLIT ACROSTIC..GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST!

  • March 10, 2006
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    try more..and more

    It touches the heart and soul.This piece is absolutely great...

  • Melodies silver member
    March 10, 2006
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    so surprising and fun!

    How'd ya do it? This is more clever than usual! Thank you for showing us how and maybe we'll try it out! This was a lot of work and I don't know how you did the colors. Is there a class for this? Your poem is an adventure in many ways and I am always finding the best things on AP! This is definitely one of them.
  • kat14903
    March 10, 2006
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    this has such a great melody. hope you can put it to music. i can see this as top of the charts

  • Debbysmiles gold member
    March 10, 2006
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    What a beautiful Piece !! I like the double acrostic.. and the contrasting colors. You did a wonderful job with this.
    Be Well. debby

  • The Angellightwolf
    March 10, 2006
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    Fantastic

    How friggin' fantastic! i just love the contrast in verse and colors.
  • SexyCGirl45
    March 10, 2006
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    this is very good and it makes me think of new things to write about
  • Rhygirl60 silver member
    March 10, 2006
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    An exquisite piece of writing from a very tal

    A stunning piece of writing enhanced by the use of the double accrostic.Your poem would sit very comfortably (or maybe restlessly) beside poems of the classical period,poems maybe from the days of yore.This poem brought peace and beauty and deep emotional memories to this reader.I look forward to discovering more of your poetry and more about its writer.
  • Aronoded
    March 10, 2006
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    Amazing

    Just....wow. This is such a beautiful poem. I love it, and am going to send it to all my friends. I love the way it was written, the subject. All of it was so utterly lovely. Super good job. So completely well done. A winner in my book.

  • CountryCousin
    March 10, 2006
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    Beautifully done.

    Now this was a most unusual poem and written in a way that you follow the word accrostic and read the lines in it that say so much. I will forward the poem to my friend whom I call Rose because it is highly sensitive but done in an artistic manner. This is very well done and I would applaud it a thousand times if I could.

  • March 10, 2006
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    What can I say? Your poem says it all. What a wonderful inspiration to those of us who have lost a loved one. Your poem is so soft and sweet. Thank you for sharing this, it is lovely. Peace be with you.
  • OctoberRain
    March 10, 2006
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    Very good I liked it alot very creative and you dont see much creativity with poems latly. This is one of my favorites now. Thank you for sharing it with the rest of us

  • DD Sai
    March 10, 2006
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    Love the way this poem is written, and very well written it is. It takes a creative mind to make a masterpiece like this.
  • Virginia Logsdon
    March 10, 2006
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    NICE!

    This is very lovely and so romantic!You did an excellant job on this poem!Keep writing poetry!You show lots of promise!You definATELY HAVE A KNACK FOR THIS TYPE OF POETRY~!

  • Im3
    March 10, 2006
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    Wonderful

    Nice set up to the pice. it is well thought out, and gives the reader a guideline to find your thoughts.
  • FaithForeverLost
    March 10, 2006
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    hey, ive read a little and i think ur great. im new here and i havent been writing long but my friends think im really good

  • twilight seduction
    March 10, 2006
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    You do acrostics very well, and you weave a loving, romantic feel throughout this piece. I love the way you orgaized it, too.

  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    March 10, 2006
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    this is so beautiful. very warm and touching. i just loved it. very lovely poem and a great write.

  • Viyanna Rosemarie
    March 10, 2006
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    this is really beautiful. having done a few of these, i know how difficult it can be. it is odd. i wrote a poem about a rose last night and they are so different but seem to fit somehow. thank you for sharing your talent with me. viyanna r langager

  • SpiritMother gold member
    March 10, 2006
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    Fantastic

    Poignant, vibrating with love..it took my breath away just reading the first few lines, then the ending was so well done.

  • queenie gold member
    March 10, 2006
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    i was really at a lost as how to do this,but you have,in such a magically delicious way brought this to life.this is very imaginable and creative.i applaud this form as being one of the best i've seen yet.you just went ahead and claimed this as part of your soul.the beauty of you is so interwined in the lines of this.i read this becase i haven't read anything of yours in a while,expecting something good .i can surely say that i was not in the least bit disappointed.i must try this even knowing i could never do it the justice you have done.still,after reading yours,how could i not want to try it.this is the masterpiece.thank you for another bookmark moment.

  • mzladyt
    March 10, 2006
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    This is fantastic. I love the way you divided your poem and made it come out just right. Simply beautiful. Added this to my favorites.

  • mysinfulAmadeo
    March 10, 2006
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    Great

    Wonderful. When pieces have a set pattern that they have to follow, such as a split acrostic, it is very difficult to creat a rhyme scheme that doesn't interfere with the flow and rythem of the poem. Not only did your rhyme not do this, it actually added a good deal to the poem. I rarely read rhyming poetry beacause most of it seems so forced, but this was very well done.

  • laila.
    March 10, 2006
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    this is beautiful. it's something i can't say in words, well u know, when u see something as elegant or beautiful as this u just can one word.jus one word "beautiful"
    very, very well written.
    i hope u win this, wish u all the very best.
    tc.

  • IamMEg
    March 10, 2006
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    This is so incredible BEAUTIFUL! It brought me to tears - I lost my beloved husband this January and these words have given me strength - THANK YOU SO MUCH! It reads so smoothly; the rhyme patter is good - This is a perfect piece - one of my ALL TIME favorites!

  • doughjoe silver member
    March 10, 2006
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    real shoe of poetry

    really this is a true show of poetry done here love is in the air just as sring is here you done a great job on this poem love the imagetry and love the layout you gat a applaud from me thanks for sharing this, this morning have a great day

  • beautifuldisaster
    March 10, 2006
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    i love love LOVE this set up! beautiful poem. i enjoyed reading it... good luck in the contest.. i think you will place for sure!
    -shelley

  • Stirrer of Stardust
    March 10, 2006
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    This is amazingly beautiful, and touches me so very deeply I cannot begin to describe the effect this piece evoked within me. I can tell you it arrested my heart for more than a moment. This will be added to my favorites shortly.

    A truly wonderfully written piece of poetry that I'm sure will do well in the contest and continue to resonate within me.

    ~ ~ Sincerely, Janet ~ ~
  • montez gold member
    March 10, 2006
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    A fine innovative piece of work, with excellent rhyme and rhythm.
    Well done old lad.
    R.
    PS Have the clap!

  • Smirnoff Ice
    March 10, 2006
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    excellentlyn written lovely imiagary good luck
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