Baby come on over lets lay by the fire,
before the night is done, I will fill your every desire,
withgentle strokes of my fingers I caress you,
our hidden fantasy's tonight will come true.
Close your eyes darling as our lips meet,
my turn first can you feel the heat,
we melted our souls slowly into one,
passionately falling in love until the rising sun.
Today is the beginning of pure bliss,
and to think it all started from one kiss,
you fulfilled my dream made me feel whole,
I want to share my everything heart and soul,
you turned to me and said, I love you babe,
that was the day, my heart was saved.
Author notes
you requested I write a love poem well here it is I'm not
use to writing things romantic.
Written March 10th, 2006
What did you think
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THIS IS SO SWEET AND PASSIONATE!!!
You may not write like this often but this is so touching and tender, the very thing we all deep down want to find in another.
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thank-you so much for reading and leaving such a lovely comment take-care
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This is a beautiful poem angel. Very romantic and sizzling. Need a cold shower after reading it. You need to continue writing love poems. As I told you in chat it was awesome, hope you got that message.
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thank-you for you lovely comment take-care
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Phewwwww - puff puff - pant pant
Hey I like this poem - it is beautiful - the content warm - err - hot - err sizzling - you are a rhymer alright - there are a few places I would tweak - but all in all a very nice write - keep that fire lit babe - lol - where did you say you lived ? - lol - lol - Bless God - Joe - P.S. I read your poem about the colored man - but didn't comment - I wrote a poem about "Mandela" - you may have read it - try alternating your lines so every other line rhymes - just a thought
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thank-you so much for your comment this poem was my first attempt at a love poem I always wrote dark or sad work and a friend on allpoetry requested I write a love poem and thats where Pure Bliss come from my poem man of color was inspired by my friend from south india I was reading all what was happening over there.
thank-you for reading.
take-care from tracey.
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you have a real talent for these types of poems. I felt like I was being transported into your world. Thank you for sharing. Keep up the great work. peace,
Kendal
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thank-you so much for reading ..pure bliss..
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
take-care
from tracey
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Very passionate and heated write, this is such a sensual and seductive tale of naughtiness, it was an exciting read to say the least!! Loved the wording and structure, well done on another great poem, keep up the great work,
-Brenden
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hi thank-you for reading glad u liked it, I use to mostly only write dark or very sad poems I got a request to write a love poem and this is what I came up with.
take-care
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A very beautiful poem. So touching and filled with warmth.
Great Job!
Azlyn
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thank-you
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Good write. I think my favorite line was ..."We melted our souls,slowly into one," Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
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thank-you so much for your lovely comment, this poem was a request from a guy on this site i have never felt this its all made up,i am having my second contest if you are interested,its called lifes most embarrassing moments.from TRacey.
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Wow this was a great piece.. It made me so happy, yet so sad because I am not feeling like that with my partner right now. I don't think I ever did. I need love like that. You made it seem so simple and so wonderful. I remember one love like that, and thankfully we are still friends.
I love how you described everything in this poem and it actually gave me butterflies in my stomach...Thank you haven't felt that for a while and I never realized I could get them from a poem either.
I love the flow of it too. Great rhyme scheme and order. Awesome! Thanks for sharing with me!
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thank-you for your comment Bazza, shame the poem is all fake, I was requested to write a love poem by a friend on this site,from Tracey
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Beautiful written and beautiful sentiments.
A wonderful account of your feelings and passions that spell of excitement and exploration of each other to the very depths of each. Passionate but delicately done with an overshadow of desire patiently explored and experienced in a combining of two hearts. -
hey you know i just cannot take my mind off this poetry. wow its so beautiful. I do not find lust in this but pure love. this is replete with love, i cannot help myself reading it again and again. this is a masterpiece. you accepted my request and gave such a wonderful poetry, oh god thanks a lot. You know , i read it again and again. this is so lovely
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thank-you for your amazing comment well you did request it so I'm so glad you loved it,your accident my god are you okay?
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this is absolute bliss. I feel sorry to have read it after so many days. Actually, i met with an accident, thats why, i couldn't read soon after you wrote it. This is the kind of poetry i wanted you to write. Filled with love. this is one great piece of poetry. Oh. can you write more this way. just filled with love, love and more love. this poetry was awful. so wonderfully written, so beautifully thought, so nicely crafted. keep up the good work -
it's magical how one word, in one day, from one person's mouth can make all the difference ... nice
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I definately got shivers on this one. You are a passionate writer...amazing
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this is good keep pennin
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and you said that one of mine was a little... how did you put it, oh yea, "raunchy" ... HAHA. Very romantic (blushes). and you can tell it's not about lust, the way you make it flow and the words you chose... it sounds like passion forged from love. I really liked this one.
and so is given 5 stars, to the all desverving poet tairs!! It doesn't matter how used to it you are, you've got the gift of rhyme and heart. Keep it up!!
your friend
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exelent !
wow !hot and passionate,lovely just what the doctor ordered! exelent work ,very sexeeeeee! it is truly sensual i tingle with sheer delight , he he he x -
Ha, I like it, nicely written,. Romantic indeed. Thanks for sharing. Take care. Tori
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wooooooooohooooooooo another great one!! keep it up!!
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so very beautiful. sexy, warm, and touching. i really enjoyed.
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I loved it!!
Lovely!! Passionate, and nicely done!!
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