High up in the sky,
Your kiss, so "divine",
Infinite happiness found.
High up in the sky,
Your arms, so "divine",
Unspeakable happiness confound.
High up in the sky,
Your touch, so "divine",
Unnoticed blindness passed by.
Oh all so right...
Oh all so perfect;
Although for every up,
There is always a down.
High up in the sky,
His mind, so vile,
Disposable girl found.
High up in the sky,
His hand, so vile,
Sadness and crying confound.
High up in the sky,
His groin, oh so vile!
Unnoticed blindness got caught too late.
Oh all so wrong...
The world is not fair;
Looking down at all those ants,
Problems coming back to my head.
I prayed for God to help,
But no can do;
I prayed for a boy,
But I got a bastard.
High up in the sky,
I look down at the ants,
As I get in front of the railing,
With tears coming down from my eyes.
All my problems started to flash in my mind,
My purity,
My Family,
My Friends,
My everything,
All my problems started to torment my mind.
I let myself go,
And fly down,
And smile,
To freedom.
Author notes
Written March 11th, 2006
A contest entry
- Show me emotion. Ages 13-16. Prewrites Allowed. by xkhiemster.
300 points, ended March 28, 2006, 28 entries
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ah, this poem is a great way to start off with judging a contest. that's the kind of thing i'm looking for. great job on the emotion. the repetition was used well. good luck.
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Thanks, I'm glad that you think so, I'm having such thoughts atm...but at least, poetry is here to the rescue. At least I can vent it here.
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Powerful
A very powerful poem. It definitely shows how powerful emotion can get and what happens when those emotions get turned upside down. And it's a lot better to put it in poetry than to see those ants get bigger. Keep doing what you're doing. -
Thanks alot for supporting me this much; I really appriciate it. Yes...this is unfortunately what is really wandering in my mind most of the time, as most of it is true...
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Thumbs up!!!
WHOA! You teenagers can get pretty emotional. WOW! My friend. This is an awesome write. Very sad to think that soemone thinks life is so bad that it must end this way. Things can be overcome with help! Keep that ink flowing. Your life as a poet is just beginning. Thumbs up!!! Love and hugs...
~Donna~
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