A silent victim
Whose scars won't heal
left there to suffer
Helpless in the overcast
A restrained soul
Kept down by a household
Found it difficult to love
While surrounded by hate
A lost shadow
Standing in the corner
The cries of this silhouette
Left unseen and unheard
A giving child
Who did nothing more
Than try her very best
To make herself convenient
A suffocating essence
With wounds of self-infliction
Such radiance destructed
By such hostile vicinity
A fair spirit
That I ask not to weep
If she makes it through tonight
Tomorrow will be her escape
Author notes
I really hate seeing people treated like crap, especially great awesome people who don't deserve to be treated anything less than great. It pisses me off, and I hate feeling like there is nothing anyone can do about it, but just sit back and watch.
Written March 16th, 2006
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Beautifully writen. I can really relate. I really like how you end it. The ending shows the danger in her life now but a glimce of hope if she can make it. Great job. A awesome write. Thanks for sharing.
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Very profound...and coming for a spirit that is not all that broken...Only strength can portray the helpless with sunc finess, In this world that fight's to believe in it's on self-worth...everything belittles itself to gain a better spot in the pecking order. But a poet...lives for truth. In the birth pain of disappointment comes a work such as you have written..And I invite you to view my work...as I think you understand so much.
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This is a sad one. But I think you did a great job of showing how it feels to live through abuse with the hope of getting away from it one day. People do live through this stuff and people do go on to live happy lives but it never really leaves you. It is good to have some poems like this. People need to know that not everything is rosy all the time for everybody...indluding children.
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i'm about to cry. that was so heart felt. i have you on my fav's list, i can't remember why, but after reading this piece i now know why.
the only piece of advice that i can offer is that your page is very hard to read. perhaps a bolder italic of the words would make it easier. in any event you did and extravagent job.
way to go
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i agree with you and with Azcess Denied it is a beautiful peom with so much sorrow how the girl is in the moment but her mind is in the tomorrow the hope yet sadness...great write thank you for sharing i really enjoyed it
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Oh wow. I love the last stanza as well. Its very beautiful and powerful. Keep writing! I'd love to read more!
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I love this!! Wonderful job, keep it up!
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The last stanza is my favorite. "If she makes it through tonight Tomorrow will be her escape" That's beautiful, and inspiring. Keep the ink flowing!
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This was a beautiful poem. I hate when people treat others like dirt because they might not have what they do. It really sucks to see it happen. It happens to me all the time. I have a lot of friends, but people pre-judge me. I think this was a great poem, and more people should pay attention to it. It's not a joke anymore, it hurts more than you think. [ ♥ ]-Amber
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