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His Kiss

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His touch was soft,
The sweetness of his kiss
Left sugared edges on my lips.

His warm mouth curled
Gently around my own,
Each curve of his smile

Pressed to the curves of mine.

His tongue played music
As it swirled,
Met mine yearning for its touch,

And our lips danced deeply entwined
To the melody that was only ours.

His touch was soft and sweet
Like whispered secrets shared,

And as my worries drained away
From my conscious memory,
I floated up with happiness,

And we melted into the night.

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Written February 16th, 2003

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  • fantastix
    February 17, 2003
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    Floating

    'And our lips danced deeply entwined
    To the melody that was only ours.'

    Moments like you have described are magical. I long to share tenderness likethis someday. A fitting answer to 'The Smile'...

    A dreamy write for a young, inexperienced girl such as myself.

    ~Angela

  • bonnie blue
    February 17, 2003
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    how sweetly these intimate moments are described...beautiful feelings flow from this, joyce somehow the ending seems to need something, though....in my opinion, the comparison between happiness and a fairy princess seems out of place...but then, that is only my opinion either way, 'tis a lovely piece with graceful imagery

    *hugs*
    bonnie

  • Kalexi
    February 17, 2003
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    Oh soooooooooo beautiful, Joyce Now I have to read Jaden's

    This makes me smile to feel such warm love radiating from your heart to create this beautiful poem filled with love


    Karen

  • Jaden silver member
    February 16, 2003
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    I like mush
    It's so edible-
    then when it
    dries along
    the edges of
    lips, you can
    mix it in with
    the cookie batter


  • gecko
    February 16, 2003
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    mushy

    man you two are mushy



    some really lovely lines in here Sprite

    hugs

  • Dreamweaver silver member
    February 16, 2003
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    Excellent

    Sigh
    Captured perfectly .... The wistfulness, the wanting, joyous in the feelings invoked.
    Beautiful written ....
    Take care, dear friend,
    Sammy.

  • LostMunkyGi
    February 16, 2003
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    Sweet...

    Ahh!!! Love poems! Sorry... Great write. Good visual going on here. Nicely written.
    ~*~Gi~*~

  • Lurie
    February 16, 2003
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    Soooo very sweet Sprite! So full of love and hopefulness girl you got it bad don't ya! ;) Nice write!~Laura

  • smiley
    February 16, 2003
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    Just like Jaden'e "the smile" it was beautiful. As a matter of fact it was the perfect answer.

    Yvonne

  • Maureen silver member
    February 16, 2003
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    I just read Jaden's "The Smile". Both of your poems left a smile on my lips!

    Maureen

  • Nam
    February 16, 2003
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    A good piece here

    This didn't seem like it ended to me, it sounded abrupt at the end, whether attended or not, I do not know.

    But, none-the-less, a lovely piece.

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