The train never left the station.
It was parked in shadows,
where the evils of men flourish.
There was no subtle, soft swaying
of the rails ~
only terror ~ a soundless scream
as a mortified child wept silent tears
under harsh hands,
trying to avert her gaze
from the soulless black eyes
of Lust.
She was only ten ~ she had no knowledge
of what was happening,
she only knew it felt wrong.
He was eighteen & knew better,
but did not care.
He did not penetrate Innocence ~
he only tarnished it
with his intentions of avarice
& threatened her with harm if she told.
She was lost,
but found her way back home, somehow.
Crying hysterically, she told.
She was beaten for telling
& forced to go with her father
to confront her abuser & his parents.
Aghast,
she locked her Self in Sorrow's room
& never spoke of it again.
Ever.
Until now...
Author notes
option 5
Graphic artist unknown
Written April 15th, 2006
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A contest entry
- OPTIONS(enter anything you like)PW allowed by ExpectingMommy18.
900 points, ended October 16, 2007, 41 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I love the way you describe emotions as people. 'Sorrow's room' and 'soulless black eyes of Lust'. I think that in some lines you would use a little more description, but I would be very careful not to ruin the perfection of your writing. 'As a mortified child wept silent tears.' That line should forever remain untouched, the words click together and flow extremely well.
You may wish to go back through and edit the grammer and punctuation. In some places it is there, and others it is not. Both can work, but done the way you did it, it looks more like a mistake than incidental. -
wow this was an amazing write...i loved how it was written...i think you could have used more detail but this was good...i enjoyed reading it...good luck in the contest and thank you so much for entering!!
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I'm sorry... I want to kick his ass myself...
Anyway, put one of your purty ones in please...
OH SHISTA! THAT EYE BLINKS!!!!!
You're supposed to put your name in the author notes... as if I don't know who wrote it muhwahwa!
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Still Trembling...
OMG... A tender 10 years old.
Right now I'm struck with overwhelming shock and numbness.
I'm unable to comment at this time... this was beyond upsetting to my sensibilities...
I need a breather ...sigh!
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Not much time, Nicholas; I'm going to copy my last reply, my Friend...this is merely one sentence of one paragraph in a single chapter of a very long book. There's so much more to tell of 48 years on earth than a single poem can say; even than mere words can say. A dark time, but one I got past. In fact, this was the first time I ever wrote about it; I never even told anyone after it happened. I don't even remember if I told Don. We are so much more than the pain we experience, Poet. SOOOOOOO much more. It's alright, Sweetie. I'm fine. 
Wanda
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Damn you Wand
why do you have to be such an outstanding Poet... I'm still teary-eyed.
Seriously Wanda, I'm glad you have Un locked your Self from Sorrow's room. You've also unlocked many other doors for many other people... how can anyone NOT LOVE YOU! You are definitely SOOOOOOO much more than the pain you experienced. ....sighhh!
As for the poem;
"There was no subtle, soft swaying
of the rails ~
only terror ~ a soundless scream
as a mortified child wept silent tears
under harsh hands,"
Emotive, Fiery, Moving, Poignant, Heart rending, Heart breaking, Gripping, and Too real (for me).
You're The Best Wand ~ Nicholas ~
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"It's alright, Sweetie. I'm fine."
Yeah, but I'm not.
Don't worry, I will be!
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deep and dark...
I understand now...
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Sighhh...ahhh, John; this is merely one sentence of one paragraph in a single chapter of a very long book, my Friend. There's so much more to tell of 48 years on earth than a single poem can say; even than mere words can say. A dark time, but one I got past. In fact, this was the first time I ever wrote about it; I never even told anyone after it happened. I don't even remember if I told Don. We are so much more than the pain we experience, Poet. SOOOOOOO much more.
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As the saying goes, "There can be no shadows without the presence of Light." 
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Now I know why you reacted the way you did about my poem of the child molester. We've both been through it: this gives our bond an eerie dark cloud: but our warmth will disperse the cloud. You'll see, Darling, you'll see.
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Thank you, my Friend...
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Parents are so un-adult. Lady Peach you have had quite a week displaying all. Thank you. Congratulations on receiving yet another trophy.
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Thank you, my Friend...& I'm sorry it hit home, for whatever reason...No one should ever have to understand this...
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I read this earlier and had to keep my jaw from falling to the floor. Your words hit home.
Thanks for entering.
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Thank you for hosting, GodsxLittlexGirl...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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This is a beautiful and emotional poem! I loved reading it! It was so good! You are very talented! Thanks for entering my contest!
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Thank you, bound and broken...I've been letting things go by way of writing poetry for 33 years now...It's also a good way to keep things close to your heart...Obviously, not in this case, though...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thank you for your kind words, JD...I appreciate your Time...I do try to be a good person...sometimes, I think I actually succeed...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Poetry is a good way to let things go. Good luck.
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What a terrible story. He should have been locked up, but I suppose they didn't do much in those days. It's a very strange world we live in. However, you've come through it and out the other side a good person who can overcome adversity and move on.
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Thank you for your caring words, Elaine...Be well, Poet...I am... Wanda
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Thank you for your compassionate words, Zayra...I appreciate the opportunity to experience catharsis & possibly help another, in the process...Love ya, Lady...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thank you for your kind words, Melodies...but vengeance doesn't belong to us...& my life has been a good one...I'm quite sure he's already paid his dues for this...Be well, Poet...I am... Wanda
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Thank you for your kind words, my sista...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Wanda - you already probably know that this subject matter is close to my heart - thank you for your bravery - the power of these words are beyond compare and i hope the writing of them helps and releases you even more.
sometimes we share for a purpose- often it is just that it is the time too share - or we know that it is one of the final steps on a journey that leads to our emotional healing... You know that I could talk for hours on the need to tell tell tell, and the need for caregivers [so called] to listen and believe. If untold - or more importantly the telling goes unheard or unbelieved - then the truth becomes a secret that merely festers and lingers.
I just want to say BRAVO!
Elaine
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Although I have spoken about other painful parts of my past, in various poems since I've been here, which is something I've never done before, this is something I've never even spoken about...I've read so many things here that makes me realize that silence only aids these horrid people...it is by voicing our terror & dismay that they lose their power over us...If only one person is helped by the telling, then it's worth unveiling this horrible episode...I know you have helped so many deal with this sort of thing, only worse...I have really been most fortunate in my Life...No one can ever harm my Spirit; I won't allow it...Love you, Woman... Vlindertjie
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Oooo, my dear sister of the soul.... I never knew this - I am sorry that you of all people had to experience something like this
. I am at a loss for words, even though I have seen your story in the eyes of so many other little girls and women. But there is hope in this poem too and hope in your life - and light, because yes, your innocence is still intact, Vlindertjie - you are a walking example of that . What a courageous woman you are - you just raised yourself SO much higher in my eyes!! I am glad you you wrote this and shared it, because by exposing a secret you gain power over it. Wonderful poetry - and you...the shining example of courage, my friend. Much love...
~ Nicolette
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OMG Wanda this is an amazing moment of the soul exposing its deepest wounds.
This makes the contest all worth while. I am sorry this experience was part of your life. You have created a miracle by writing about it with such courage. Thank you for entering this into the contest and gracing us with your story.
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Sigh..deep breath...lift my shoulders...OMG, I am going to add this guy to my list of people who are kept prisoner by me in a dungeon. He will only get to suck bones that are left over from my cat's dinner. I will sleep on cement. What the heck. I will mentally send him to North Korea. That's how the people live there. You are an amazing poet and thank you for sharing this.
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A true and resilinet soul has spoken. Wanda, you never cease to amaze me. tiem and time again, I read your poetry and it smacks me, right where it should. robin said it all best. I can only say that I am made a better, truer expression of my own soul in your pure expressions.
this is so full of so many truths for so many. I can not wait to get your book! -
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Some of the crosses we must bear are train crossings...for those trains that never moved...You know. I know. We love in spite of our sorrows. We love deeper because of them. My heart is with yours, my Sister.
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Thanks for reading, my Friend...I have been dealing with many things from the past ever since I joined AP...a window opens whenever a door is closed, that sort of thing...Your Light is luminous, Joyful One...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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My dear sweet Wanda
Shadows may cast fears but when you step into the shadow your image breaks through and sometimes you just can't see the shadow anymore. So my wish for you is to keep on stepping into the fear of repressed feelings..acknowledging them, releasing them from the place they once hid. By doing this you walk into the illusion and see the empowerment and beauty that you have within. May the healings bestow you (as I know they have) because you shine brightly my dear beautiful friend.
Much Love Always~
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Thanks, Karen...I appreciate ya, my Friend... Wander Lea
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Come here for a hug hon
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Thank you for your compassionate words, bill-po-nee...If there's something specific you want to know, IM me...I'll answer...Although it is rather private, I am pretty much an open book...I wasn't physically hurt, except for the beating afterwards...but it took quite awhile to get past the despair & mistrust of what had happened, through no fault of my own...part of the "blame the victim" scenario...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thank you for reading, WJames...We all have shadows that haunt our sleep...I sleep much better now...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thank you for such a generous comment, Robin Candor...I am honored by your words...Strangely enough, considering your analogy, I have just published my first book...I've had about 75 others in anthologies before, but this is the first one of my very own...I appreciate your time & efforts in leaving such an in~depth comment...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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a poem that will move the reader
The poem was told to me rather than read, your words came to life and as many of the other poets/friends have said had a page turner quality.I had to find out what happened and you certainly had a horrendous experience.You left me wanting to know so much (I know that it is none of my business) but I wanted someone to take you in their comforting non sexual arms instead of what happened and how you were shouted at.May you always be inspired to write whatever Life throws your way or at you...
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W renching...
WOW Wanda...Ive seen some incredible writing flow through you but this is a powerful analogy of the train and reaping of innocence by a perp... DAYAM...
I remember a quote from the foster parent days and the Psych lectures...If you name it you can tame it..Very cliche(ish) but very true too...
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Ok, don't say this too often, but I forgot I was reading like when you get engrossed in a book and drift away until some interruption breaks in. The problem with the format of AP is that you click, you read and know there are sundry other pieces crying for your attention. A poorly written piece as I'm sure you know is almost an excercise to read. On the other hand if one was to pick up a poetry book at a local store that is brought home, there is something personal just in the 'fact' that you own the collection. You know you can go back an reread anytime, so there is no pressure as you get absorbed in digesting the texts. I am saying all this because if a write can pull the 'drift away' here, its value speaks in the fact that cognizance of your surroundings is lost while reading it. This particular piece did that to me. My take on the write was akin to a witness in a movie recollecting the story in a courtroom with eyes blazing holes in the poor soul who had hidden this away for many years. Now the unearthing of the unpleasantness with witnesses (readers in this case) to bare the truth into the open. As i stated the magnitism of the write declares its own value. Be well. RC
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Thank you for your compassionate words, rose...but truly, I got "over it" many years ago...I just never spoke of it before...when I read Zayra's poem, this is not what I expected or even planned to write about...but as you know, sometimes, the pen takes over & we merely hold onto it for dear Life...It was time...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thank you, Sammy...as you know, I nearly always manage to leave a Light on in my work...This one apparently needed to be written...It only took me 37 years to do it...There are many that have suffered from similar circumstances; it's long past time they had a voice...I appreciate ya, Poet... Wanda
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All i can say, Wanda, is ... oh my God. I can only imagine the self torture you went through to write this incredible piece of non-fictional poetry. You are a truly amazing woman, Wanda ... and, for your sake, i am so glad Zayra's poem opened you enough to be able to write about this horrific experience. I won't say "forget it now", because i know you can't and never will be able to. However, i will say that i hope writing this will bring you some measure of peace and closure over this "incident".
Blessed be,
rose
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Outstanding Creativity!
Terroristic threats and enactments are brought to life and paralleled here in your work. Not a direction i tend to take my positive energies, but, am glad to see you addressed it for your contest entry. This was very well done my friend! Thank you for sharing this with us!
Sammy -
Thank you for reading...I'm sorry you understand it so well...I appreciate your Time...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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been there as well except i was younger. thank you for sharing this. :hugs:
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Thank you for reading, EarthToJim...I'm glad you enjoyed it..I appreciate your Time...No, not fiction...I wish it was...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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That's precisely why I used it...it's a creepy, dark piece & I knew it would be unexpected...Thank you for reading, Rift-Legion...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Janet, I am honored & touched that this piece was your 1,000th critique...Even more so that I was able to surprise you with this one...Thank you, my lovely niece...Smoosh, Darling... Wanda
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Stunning narrative. That's one you don't put down very easily. Of course, it's only a poem, not a book, so you don't have to put it down, but it was gripping nonetheless. I could read pages of that if the quality didn't wane. BTW, hope it's only a work of fiction.
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Sorry, I was taken aback at first, the eye creeped me out...I did not expect a .gif file. I think this is a wonderful dark write. Well, the subject matter is not "wonderful," but it is very well written--the flow, the emotion, the word choice...it all comes tgether very nicely. Good job!
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Darling auntie
I am stunned, as you approach the feeling of dread and self loathing that adorns the macabre without the Vampire Gothic, what is that, Rococo, embelishments. Impressive auntie.
Smoosh
Janet -
Thank you for reading, Dark side eternal...I appreciate your Time...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thank you for reading, madeofashes...I appreciate your Time...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thank you for reading, Tracey...I appreciate your Time...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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deep poem, i liked the flow..it actually sounded like a story i progress..
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Thank you for reading, Aaron...I appreciate your Time...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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this is really well written. it was really dark though, but i could picture every word that was written in this piece. also, the emotions you protrayed were sad and terrifying. i can relate to them, though. and it's a scary thing. i really enjoyed reading this piece...it's just so chilling and depressing but i liked it a lot. awesome job, keep up the good work. <3
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heartfelt
A very deep emotional write,sadly this realy happens more then some realise very upsetting write,though wonderfully written you have a great gift in expressing what you want to say that makes an awesome poet.thanks 4 sharing this piece,take-care from tracey. -
Wow, this is the second poem this week that I have read with a similar feel and subject matter. You did an excellent job on this. Well written and well put. I have to say that I really appreciated this piece. Thank you.
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Thank you for reading, The Angellightwolf...I appreciate your Time...I looked at your author's page; I am Iohagh's AP auntie, former Baroness of the Pixies...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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True art at it's finest
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Thank you for reading, Viyanna...I appreciate any comments, brief or not...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thank you for reading, The Rocker...I'm glad you thought it worthy...I appreciate your Time...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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wow!! i have goose bumps from reading this. i am really quite speechless so this will be the shortes comment you have ever gotten from me. i am sorry if this is true which i suspect it is. vilanger
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Mmmmmmm. This is deep. I like it! You always come up with good writes. I could picture this whole write and I could feel some of the emotions, which is good. I love when readers can feel what I felt as I was writing which ever poem. Now I'm getting carried away lol! I'm going to applaud. Thanks for sharing and keep penning!
Safely hidden in the darkness,
~ The Rocker who lost all aka Sacred Shadows
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