My own inner demons relinquish all hope of sanity
Years now, evil creatures overpowered my own vanity
Inner vile torments that so vehemently harassed
Neurotic suicidal passions momentarily passed
Nocturnal apparitions instigated this immobility
Exhilarating mania disrupting all normal stability
Rejuvenating a dark protracted alter ego disorder
Demonic voices summon in a dialogue much broader
Envisioning self- abuse as a demented outside observer
Morbidly enjoying my obliteration with immense fervor
Obsessing over demonic possessions that I once dread
Now allowing these tortured visions of darkness to spread
Sanctifying these inner demons, embracing them in my head
Author notes
~Choice number five~
Written May 19th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- The Acrostic Contest by Hekate.
400 points, ended July 27, 2006, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This was a very deep write....it was very good...I wish I could have awared you more points then what I had you deserve way more for this write. You did awesome! I love the ones that tell took a lot of work...and this one for sure did!
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Thanks Hoodoolover, good luck to you in the next round.
~much love~
carol
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Great job mzblonde, congrats on your trophy
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Thank you KariKreations. Best of luck to you judging the enormous amount of entries.
~much love~
carol
PS.
I like your motto
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Good Luck!
wow that was very deep -
Thanks I love to write in rhyme and at times speak in rhyme I know it sounds crazy but then maybe it is. thanks so much for the comments.
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You're hearing voices in your head, going absolutely mad, and you -rhyme- about it? HEHE. This was really good, though. The background rocks.
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great
very very good
this poem was just what the dr ordered
and perfect for my contest
good luck
~black roses -
Thanks and I'm blonde too,
Thank you so much for your encouraging comments and applaud. I am so happy you liked it.
Edited on May 22, 7:28 p.m. because 'typo'. -
HEY..i'm blonde...don't insult us..LOL!!
seriously: For todays purposes, as i prefer to respond to all who have had the kindness to take time and read my work and either comm or applaud as soon as possible, today,...as i am SO PRESSED FOR TIME!!!!...i will only be leaving this short note and not a formal review/critique/breakdown. Know that if you have received this, you have achieved the purposes of either, impact, flow, consistency, theme intent, rhyme or free-flow structure that was worthy of applause.
Thanks for your understanding ....and for a great read.
All the best............................Lionslove
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I think we are all fighting inner demons at one time or another. Great way at expressing this. WOnderful poem.
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Thanks a lot I am happy you liked it
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AWESOME
Intense write! I liked the darkness blended with the confusion.
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Thanks, I am glad you liked it.
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Love the word choice here, and it's not overdone, flows quite nicely. Glad I clicked on this, in other words
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Thank you so much for taking the time read it. I am glad you liked it. Thanks
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Good use of the form! I liked your use of language too, very vivid and powerful. It felt like a dark and quite distubing poem, and the fact you could do that AND put it into an acrostic is great. Well done!
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Thanks Lori, I am trying to write darker poems but they keep comming out as acrostics. lol
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WOW!!! This is incredilbe!! You create the most interesting acrostics I've read on this site. They are so vivid and brilliantly phrased. I love this piece!! Wishing you the best of luck in the contest! This is definitely a winner in my book!!
~*Lori*~
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