Exodus Immortal
An Epic Poem
Prologue
Invoking of the Muse
Help me, oh gracious muse. Help me share this story to all of those who read. Let me share this tale of darkness, death, and tragedy. Tell the story of Athensius and his sins against the world; tell them of his great battles, his battles with the sea serpents and of the rocs; tell them of the dragon and of the basilisk; tell them of his lust for destruction; tell them of his wretched hex. O glorious muse of death and tragedy tell them how Athensius breaks his shackles and how the story ends.
Committing a crime most a crime most heinous, after his brutal mutilation of his family. Athensius was cursed to live in agony and regret, for the rest of eternity. But if he were to face his curser, find the necromancer and pass his trial, Athensius could be set free. But when does his tale take the turn for the worst? When has he had enough pain and torment? When will he accept his deeds and seek the way to mend them.
O great Calliopie, provoke the ear and mind of all, until Athensius is to fall. I praise thee muse of death and tragedy, now its time to tell his tale. Help me tell it without falter, and praise thee more I will.
Author notes
sry for leaving you all hanging... i'll post the chapters of the story as they are written. you can also check out the prewrite outline if you want...
Link to chapters
Prewrite
allpoetry.com/Poem/2021514
Chapter 1
allpoetry.com/poem/2027353
John 
Written May 20th, 2006
A contest entry
- - The Fantasy contest - by Aureola.
300 points, ended September 10, 2006, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Hey! thanks for entering my contest! this was very well worded. Sounds like greek mythology, is it? It's a very promising beginning, that's for sure. Please keep on writing!!
good luck and very good writing here,
♥ Aureola -
this was really different...i loved it. good luck in my contest
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quite interesting.. sorry it took me so long to read, i been going through some stuff, but this was good, and im glad that i got around to it.. i wanna know why his family got murdered and what he has fone about it..
should be interesting!!
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Awsome !!
Very nice ffreak!! This is deffinatly something that I might check into. You have an odd way of capturing a readers attention, very nice! -
wow, this is wrote with extremely good wording... and I like how your start it off giving sketchy details about the story 
I can't wait to read chp.1 it better be as good as the porlogue makes it sound 
lol J/K, but it better be worth my time for real if it's long 
okay, great job.
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brilliant the way you invoked the muses to help you write the story of such a tragic character. I love this story so far. I am so very anxious to read and critique as you go along! Let me know how chapter two comes along, but first elaborate on your chapter one. I love the way you worded this thus far. Good luck with this. I think you show real potential with this story. I want to know everything as you go. Good luck. ANd blessed be!
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A good beginning
An intersing premise. I would like to see where this is going and how it gets there.
My only nit is the spelling of some of the characters.
Athensius = Athanasius
Calliopie = Calliope
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FANTASTIC!!!!!!!!!!!!I loved it! Keep up the great work!!!
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Your story seems to be making the reader want more. Time to get busy and write more for them, exactly what a story is suppose to do.
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you have wonderful imagery
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nice work
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Intriguing premise, I'd like tosee how it pla
An interesting premise that emulates or at the very least conjures up Greek tragedy in my recollection; I look forward to reading the story in its entirety! -
more more more
mmmmmmmmmmmmm i want more i wanna know more!!!! tell me o great one! tell me the story
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