Soulful eyes
In my mind
They shudder
At the touch of air
Carefully threading
Dark clouds
Round my brain
Summoning fingernail stains
Ripping, tearing
Creating their masterpiece
Weaving curiosity
Resurrecting animosity
Maze game mind games
Crystallised blood stains
Visual interference
Radical adherence
Central blackouts
Inner peace
Silent screams
For the deceased
Weaving webs
By candlelight
Brown eyes take
A final bite
Sheltered child
Cut the string
Fall back
Head cracks
Piercing organs
Enter the iris
Play a game
With death
Author notes
I'm officially a freak of nature. It's weird cause I don't really understand it myself and it probably makes no sense at all. The rhyming scheme is so off it's scary. It's all around a really shit poem - but I still like it. Weird huh?
Written May 24th, 2006
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Wierd as hell, but I love flow of it. I like weird....I love this.
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All may not understand BUT i DO in somekind of way..there's this hand..invisible hand that grabs me into this poem...it just pulls me into the emotion! GREAT JOB! I like the feeling of a shadowy hand pulling me to the feeling...i like this poem, it makes me feel like i am clawing something..makes me feel someone dark, someone mysterious, someone drowsy but still awake. GOOD PIECE OF WORK!
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Me too...I hope that one day it will actually make sense with me but until then I guess I can just enjoy not knowing. Scary that I can write something so weird, not even I understand it isn't it? Makes you wonder where it came from!
Thanks for your comment!
Coral -
Hey! Who told! lol. Actually I'm really a very nice completely non-violent person (except on Mondays). So ummmm...did you like it, hate it or did it just scare the hell out of you?
Coral -
Lol. Thankyou for your comment. I'm glad someone found a message - you had more success than I did!
Coral -
DEAD
Are you on probation...phew! -
Intriguing. I really like your style in this poem, but I'll admit that I'm a bit puzzled as well. Either way, you have a way with words. I just need to figure out the meaning of all those words together
I especially liked the second-to-last stanza. Confusing, but intriguing.
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Thankyou for your comment. I have NO clue what this poem is about. While I was writing it I was hoping I'd find the point. I didn't. Lol. Every time I think I know what it means - I move to the next stanza and get confused again. You're right about the background not fitting. I'll probably play around with it on and off. Trying to stear away from the normal ones I use.
Again, thanks for the comment.
Coral -
You know, its different. It's unique. You don't always find unique poetry in people, but I have to say this is definately unique.
You get a decent sense of imagery, which isn't really a GOOD thing, but obvious reasons say that it is a good thing.
And.. now your kind of creepy?
The background isn't COMPLETELY typical for what you'd think of a poem like this, but it's ... got the eye ^_^. I'd picture something dark, but it isn't. Trust me, this is definatley a good thing and adds to the poem.
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