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Gone



The empty seat in your form
Will be filled without no thought
You the only one to mourn
You drop the rose you brought
Because she is gone
There’s know one to love
You knew her so long
But now she is above
Her story has ended
It is full of depression
You wish you could mend it
But know just don’t mention
The sadness she suffered
Her story is covered

Author notes

Just another feelings poem
Written May 30th, 2006

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  • xxDrakAngel160xx
    December 19
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    this sounds a lot like me in some wats more then once


  • user name
    November 21, 2006
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    Sounds more like a song, but there were parts where you missed the beat like:
    You wish you could mend it
    But know just don’t mention

    I think trying "dont mention it".

    The idea works, but this seems to lack personality.