Manic-depressive disorder is tough to hide
Another day brings a new rollercoaster ride
Never knowing when this mayhem will all subside
Intermittently twirling up down, side to side
Chaotic manifestations are outwardly denied
Depression sets in, and both of these worlds collide
Excitement takes over, the brain just can’t decide
Physically waning like the river at low tide
Rambling beliefs do occasionally misguide
Exhilarating moods identifiably divide
Sabotaging ideals on which the psyche relied
Sacramentally avoiding the cold world outside
Immobilized by the manifestations inside
Veracious mind-altering corruptions aside
Enduring in a life resembling Jekyll and Hyde
Author notes
~ Figure out why ~
Written June 5th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- A what sticks (contest #4) by rainyday woman.
350 points, ended June 21, 2006, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Thanks so much funkychickenhaha, I am happy you enjoyed this piece.
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I love your poem and how it has the same ending rhyme. I don't see how my poem beat yours. I think the poem is just really really good.
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Thanks so much for the lovely comment and applaud they are much appreciated.
~much love~
carol
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Absolutely Amazing
This is an amazing acrostic!!!!! Probably the best on I have ever seen , so filled with emotion and truth. The rhyming was perfect and meter the word choice was phenominal and pictures background everything was perfect. Even the portrayal of this illness was down to the letter. Fantastic job on this piece.
Best of luck----not that you will need it.
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I am the EXACT same way I won't go shopping without my mom, and even then I'd rather get the expensive products found in small pantries instead of going through big stores like Foodland and Kroger...
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Yes, Lost-Soul-Maybe, the cold world is in fact a difficult place to live in when afflicted BP or MD. I am so truly happy you could relate to this piece and the flattering comments are much appreciated.
~muchlove~
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DarkenedAuras, thanks , I truly believe Agoraphobia goes along with the manic-depression,I know how you feel, for me most times even grocery shopping becomes a dreaded chore and then someone has to go with me or I wont go, I also feel so safe and secure here at home and I almost never want to leave for fear of ??? I really don’t even know. Thanks so very much for reading and commenting, I really appreciate it.
~muchlove~
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Tishman, I am happy you chose to read and review this piece and I am truly rewarded in return by your wonderful comments, although I think a ten-volume thesis could touch on a whole lot more than I said here.
thanks again!
~muchlove~
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Thanks Poet I am so very glad you enjoyed this write, I am happy you could envision the feelings a manic-depressive goes through. Thanks so much for your flattering comments.
~muchlove~
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Thanks very much Rebeka for the complimentary comments they are much appreciated. I am pleased that you took the time to read it.
~muchlove~
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Thanks channelangel for your honest opinions, the manic-depressive is usually obsessed with the centralized theme in their life (hence the monorhyme). I am truly sorry it didn’t work for you but I truly thank you for the read and your opinions.
~muchlove~
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Thanks Rory, so many people don’t understand what the BP or MD is going through and I truly appreciate you reading this piece for your flattering comments
~muchlove~
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Thanks janet mary I am happy that you have thought this piece was informative am I am so happy you enjoyed it thanks for reading and for the comments.
~muchlove~
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Thank you Natasha I am extremely delighted that you liked this piece.
Thanks for reading and for the comments and applaud.
~muchlove~
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This is one of the things that goes with bipolar is manic depression I am bi polar and also clinically depressed it makes the world hard to live in and you described how this is for us beautifully Great write.
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Wow congradulations for finding so many rhyming words I loved this acrostic
I'm manic depressive too but I'm also Agoraphobic and the Manic Depression only sets in when I'm stressed from the Agoraphobia....which can all be avoided by staying in my house at all times...leaving only to go for a ride in the country with my mom...or somewhere with my brother....but never to a place where there is a lot of people, to stressful.
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Just clicked to know what acrostics was. Was rewarded by a fine example. Thanks On the content, don't think a 10 volume thesis on manic depression could say the stuff you did in those few lines.
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i always found these types of poems the hardest to write because you have to make the words fit by letter. You did an excellent job with this. not only did you give a definition of manic depression but you gave the feeling that it gives its victums. my hat is off to a talented and sensitive writer.
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you show here the fast paced manic as well as the depressed lifeless feel of depression, good work, i like the end line ryhmes all being the same sounds, gave it the manic feel very nicely. did not seem like an acrostic, which is a compliment to your talent.
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Good choice of words you have used, although I personally think your ending rhymes are a bit too much for. Dont get me wrong, it is a good poem, and you did well to find all the similar sounding words, but the poem of its size, it does not work for me. If it was maybe half the size, i think it would sound better. But hey, I am no expert as I am still learning poetry myself.
Anyways, that my personal opinion. I am sure loads out there will love it. Thank you for sharing, and allowing me to voice my opinion. Good luck in the contest, too
Best Wishes
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well done, this piece captures the difficulties bp people face in their everyday life. As others have said, it's a horrible disease that affects the individual as well as those around them. Your poem illustrates the ups and downs very well. Great job.
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fabulous well informed write. and so well put togeather I really enjoyed it
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Thank you so very much Recluse Writer I am delighted you enjoyed this piece thanks you for your comments and applaud
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I have never tackled a poetic acrostic but am enjoying viewing them to gain some idea. Your perfect write here has given me a
wonderful example to strive for. Absolutely Awesome If I was wearing a hat I would take it of to you!!
Recluse Writer
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Yes it does cause problems for evey one around they don't understand the mood shifts. Thanks so very much for reading and commenting.I am truly pleased you liked it.
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Wow. This whole piece is quite a trip! I don't know what I was expecting but you really went all out on this. Thow whole background is choatic and crazy and so is probably really perfect for your message in this piece. Your poem itself has a very strong and dominant tone that says that you really take this seriously and want to get the message out there. I think that's great. Because manic depression really is that way. And it causes a lot of problems. Both for the person and those around them. I think you represented it well. So thanks for featuring this so that we all had a chance to share your words and feelings with you today.
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I am so sorry you had depression it is a tough fight to get over it. Thanks so much for your comments and applaud.
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Thank you for hosting such a great contest! I love writing acrostics. Best of luck with the judging.
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Thank you so mych for entering this contest, and good luck. It's starting to look like a really good one, and I'm looking forward to the judging. Again thanks for entering.
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wow, this was awesome
i had depression, but not manic depression.... good write
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Thanks Allen, I really enjoy writing Acrostics, and I think I have an easier time writing them when I am in a depressive state. Thanks for taking the time to read this and for the comments.
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Thanks Poetic for reading and for the comments and applaud.
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Wow! This is a brilliant write! I have also just started to do acrostics and find them very challenging. But, you made this look easy. I'm sorry that you are down and depressed at the moment. I hope that it leaves you and that you feel a lot better soon. Great work here and thanks for sharing it.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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Inventive
I enjoyed the truth in this poem. I also enjoyed how you made it rhyme without making it seem forced. And the background and the picture fit well with the theme. You do a superb job of tying things together. Great job--keep up the wonderful work! -
Thank you so very much. I have many days of ups and downs and my poetry reflects that as well, Some days I am extremely happy other days I am in deep depression. So I know how it is.
Thanks so much for reading and for the comments and applaud.
~much love~
Carol
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Top class
Wow!!! This is an outstanding poem on Bipolar disorders. My mother suffers from bipolar and so this poems resonates really deeply with me. I have been with her on many of her manic ups and heart wrenching downs and I always feel so utterly helpless. This poems speaks volumes to me and you have penned it so realistically!! A thousand thank you's for bringing this mental illness into the light and making more people aware of it. All my love, hugs and blessings. Marilyn
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