In Dream,
we are together ~
natural,
in the center of a warm,
still pool ~
we are an Island.
Embrace eternal
shelters us
from the chaos
that surrounds our world ~
our peace is found
within our eyes ~
looking out, looking in.
Time is suspended
as we float,
encircling each other
slowly ~
we are soothed
by the mingling
of Spirit...
Author notes
Graphic artist unknown
Picture courtesy of Toots
I used photograph #3
Written June 6th, 2006
In a list
What did you think
Comments
1 - 22 of 22
-
Thank ye kindly, m'Dear...
-
Yummm, Wanda! Now I'm feeling the gentle swaying of the water in the pool. I love what you did with it! Toni
-
Thank you for your lovely comments, Richard...I'm pleased you enjoyed it so well...Toni preferred that I align it to the left & in this instance, I agreed with her...so that is the only edit I performed...Thank you for your efforts in hosting this great contest...Be well, Poet... 
Wanda
-
Thank you for your thoughtful comments, Toni...I'm pleased you enjoyed it so much, Lady...Thanks for hosting a great contest...By the way, you're not the first to remark on my troubling tendency to try to center things...a lot of it is 'cause I'm a double Libra; we seek balance in all things possible... I agree with ya on this one, though, so I went ahead & "slammed it to the left" for ya, Toots...
Sometimes, I like it on the left; other times I prefer it centered...a lot of depends on line length & the size of the picture, too...I'm just weird that way... I appreciate ya, Poet... Wanda
-
Every time I read your poem I find another possible metaphor. Of course, that is the idea behind this contest, so that is really great! At one point, I was certain you were speaking of a personal relationship. Then, I thought, she could be talking about a relationship with poetry, or a concept, or an animal – actually any relationship. I think it takes a special talent to come across in this manner, and to be able to get your reader to see the endless possibilities. Your capitalization of the words Dream, Island, Embrace, and Spirit added the spiritual lift that made the meaning of the poem so universal. Placement of the words on the page was good. The main problem I had was following the indentions with the poem centered. AP doesn’t offer us much to work with in that way. I think if this poem been lined up to the left, the single word lines would have been more powerful. Thank you for contributing your lovely poem to our contest. Best regards, Toni
-
well written
This poem makes me feel peaceful and calm, as is reflected by the image you create. I like the way you have painted your personal feelings around the photo. It is peaceful, calm and accepting of a great love. This love is reflected in a mature view, without "lovely mush." It has vivid vocabulary such as:"Embrace eternal."
I appreciate the suspense of the enjambment created by the spaces in the lines:
"encircling each other
slowly~
we are soothed…."
I like the feeling of the lines:
"we are soothed
by the mingling
of Spirit."
I can see nothing to improve and I have no desire to do so.
Congratulations on this poem.
Thank you for entering our competition...Richard..
-
Thank you for reading & for your kind comments, TwistedThinker...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...I always say my humor is macrame'd... Be well, Poet... Wanda
-
I like the island section. It sounds very mysterious which causes for enticement.
-
Thank you for reading & for your kind comments, DarkHunter...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
-
This is awesome, soft and gentle flow throughout. Good luck in the contest.
-
Thank you for your kind words...I agree with you; Poets are amazing people...Good luck to you in the contest...Be well, Poet... Wanda
-
i was inspired by the same picture and went a totally different direction...poets are amazing people
this is truly beautiful and deserves a win in my opinion
best of luck to you
-
Thank you for your kind words, Brenda...I'm glad you enjoyed it, my Friend...All better now??? Be well, Poet... Wanda
-
this is simply delicious my friend it soothes...like someone put balm on my boo-boo
it amazes me how you gather a few simple words and organize them into beauty. amazing
-
Thank you for reading & for your kind comments, Pam...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
-
OOoh. This felt good. It just felt good and what an image presented. Best of luck in this contest. ~Pam
-
Thank you for reading & for your kind comments, Richard...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Peace to you, too...Be well, Poet... Wanda
-
Night Hope: Good to have you here. I hope you get a lot out of being in the competition. Peace to You. Richard.
-
Thank you for reading & for your kind comments, David...I'm pleased you enjoyed it, my Friend...Be well, Scribe... Wanda
P.S. You just haven't cruised the neighborhood much, my Friend... Look at these pages...
www.allpoetry.com/poets/Nicolette
www.allpoetry.com/poets/Poetryality
-
lovely
This poem is like a refreshing and blissful bath in a blue rejuvenating pool or something. Don't we all need that sort of sanctuary away from the world for a time. Another beautiful write, and best of luck in the contest.
(p.s. That's quite the stack of trophies you have there! My goodness, I've never seen that many in one place before. But if anyone is deserving of them, you surely are )
All the best of everything always,
David -
Thank you for hosting, Toots...Be well, Poet... Wanda
-
Thanks for entering our contest! We'll be around after while to make comment and critique on your poem. Best wishes in the contest! Toots
Adding your comment:
1 - 22 of 22
4 old applause
