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Take It Away...

Take away the pain
Take away the fears
I'm all torn up inside
Will you sew me up?
I'm lost
Will you show me the light?
Take it all away
Until all that's left is
You and me

Author notes

Yeah. Just something I jotted down.
Written June 9th, 2006

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  • shadowedkimmy
    September 17, 2006
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    Holy crap, I haven't been on here in like half a year... -.-
    At first, I would have to agree with Michael, but then the poem doesn't seem to flow with punctuation. >.<
  • superl337sauce
    August 9, 2006
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    I think you need some PUNCTUATION to sew closed the open ends of lines.

    This is a good simple poem, but it need punctuation...

    I dunno, I just think this one would be a lot better with some periods.

  • Deadly Shame
    June 9, 2006
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    interesting poem. I like it. Good job. Keep writing.

  • Je Suis Prete
    June 9, 2006
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    Sometimes simplicity has the most meaning, weather you realize it right away or not.
    Sara