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Loving Sighs

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You hold me softly
within your silken wings 
of splendor

 

& tears of Grace 
fall slowly upon my cheek ~

you move my pages
with a whispered touch, 
smoothly turning
my Heart

with the power 
behind your unfathomable eyes;
I have become more
than what I once was ~ 

a story for all time, 

delectable ink
spilled by your loving pen.

I am luminous
with silent evenings
spent in rapturous gazes,

wordless with wonder...


 

 

  ~ June 9, 2006

 

       6:20 p.m.


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Picture credit: Kirk Reinert


www.kirkreinert.com/gal/angelic.shtml


"clarity of expressions in people's faces."



Written June 9th, 2006

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  • Colin OBrien
    February 15
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    Sensual

    I have become more
    than what I once was

    Fantastic line Wanda, another great write

  • PageTurner
    July 11, 2007

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    W O N D E R F U L !!!!

    You M'Lady... most definitely write with your Heart, Mind, Body & Soul... Me thinks at times that even YOU are awed by what beauty you create!

    "I am luminous
    with silent evenings
    spent in rapturous gazes,

    wordless with wonder... "

    It is I who is wordless with wonder, again, and again, and again, ad infinitum!!!

    Never stop Sighing or Swaying in Ink, Scribe!
    ~ Nicholas ~


  • Night Hope gold member
    July 13, 2006
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    Thank you, Lexie. Mum

  • Fallen Hard
    July 12, 2006
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    wow mum this is really good like ur other work... Love it alot..
    Gl
    Your lil one!
    ♥

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 28, 2006
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    Thank you for your gracious words, lady beatrice...I can only blame my obsessive use of seemingly random capitalizations, ampersands & ellipses on my Emily Dickinson influences... I also use them because I am never quite finished with what I want to say; I've been writing for so long, each poem is merely a sentence in a paragraph in a book in a set of encyclopedias... I'm glad you liked it...The metaphor of a book is a natural to me, being a (former) librarian...as if there is such a thing... Thanks again for hosting...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • lady beatrice
    June 27, 2006
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    I liked this better than your other entry, not because of its length (which was satisfying and short), but because of its content, which, rather than being lots of nice, descriptive ideas, focused on one, thus condensing the imagery and making it denser and more interesting to read. I thought your metaphors were not overused, in fact, rather original, especially comparing to a book (my favorite). Well done. One teensy thing I didn't like was ending with the ellipse (...). I thought a period would have said it all.

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 23, 2006
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    Will, see the lil' feather above the comment, next to the person's name * time they submitted the critique??? Click on it & it applauds the person's comment... Here's the link to the art site I got it from...pass it along to Joy, too, would ya??? Wanda

    www.kirkreinert.com/gallery.html

  • AgeofAquarius
    June 23, 2006
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    mucho bueno !!

    Beautiful with the bg...had to take a look again...Many cudos... If I knew how to do the clappy things in here I would.. that will have to do..

    Loved the grafic used it to replace a personal pic in a poem for joy..
  • Azul Mariposa
    June 23, 2006
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    That is a beautiful picture and I am glad that you added it back to the poem........

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 23, 2006
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    Thank you for such high praise, Will...I'm pleased you liked it...I didn't realize the picture was gone when I featured this one; I put it back on now...Thanks for coming by...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 23, 2006
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    Thank you for your gracious words, Joyce...I'm pleased you liked it...I didn't realize the picture was gone when I featured this one; I put it back on now...Thanks for coming by...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 23, 2006
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    Thank you for your lovely comments, Azul Mariposa...I'm pleased you liked it...I didn't realize the picture was gone when I featured this one; I put it back on now...Thanks for coming by...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • AgeofAquarius
    June 23, 2006
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    with the power
    behind your unfathomable eyes;
    I have become more
    than what I once was ~

    Beautiful praise to the respite of unconditional love..Write ON gurl..WRITE ON...

  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    June 23, 2006
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    once again you amaze me.
    your poems are so very lovely and great to read.
    you have become one of my favorites here on ap.
    you are truly a very talented poet.
    i am honored to read such touching and wonderful words from your pen.
    please keep the poems coming.
    great job my friend.
    joyce
  • Azul Mariposa
    June 23, 2006
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    Wow.........this is another fantastic poem, your words flow so beautifuly from the tongue when read and speaks of such wonderful love......I raise my glass in toast to you for you are a beautiful poet.

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 10, 2006
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    Thank you for reading & for your kind comments, Eric...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...I'd thought "indelible ink" before, but hesitated using it...what do you think??? Any suggestions on an acceptable alternative??? Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 10, 2006
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    Thank you for reading & for your kind comments, Allen0826...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Jeremy0826 gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    Absolutely beautiful! Wanda you did it again!
    Great work here my friend. Thanks for sharing this write with me here.


    Allen0826
  • Eric Nunnally
    June 9, 2006
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    I enjoyed this piece ALOT! The only snag in it for me was your use of the word "delectable" when describing ink in the sixth stanza.

    Reworking that particular stanza (in my opinion) would perfect this piece, though it is definitely a wonderful read as is!

    Thanks for sharing!

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    Thank you for reading & for your kind comments, Adis...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    Thank you for reading & for your kind comments, shzoosy...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    Thank you, my piratey Friend...

  • M a r l u x i a
    June 9, 2006
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    Absolutely brilliant. ABSOLUTELY MAGNIFICENT. A definite gold winner! The picture is so.... gorgeous... and just the beginning stanza and picture dragged me in to keep reading! Bookmarking this! Thanks for sharing! This is... amazing.

  • starwing gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    this is absolutely wonderful.... a very good read... lovely imagery...peace and harmony...shzoosy

  • queen Greeters member
    June 9, 2006
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    Congratulations

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    Weird??? Nothin' weird about Love & loving, Poet... I write with my Heart, Mind, Body & Soul...anything else just isn't worth the time...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    Thanks for reading, Poet of dreams.

  • Sonrio
    June 9, 2006
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    this is really good. I enjoyed it. It's kindof weird, but hey, writing is all for exploring new fields. My favourite part was about the pen. It was a unique take on things...I've never seen it used like that before, but I loved it. Keep up the good work. you manage to write with both your head and your heart. Not many people can do that. Great job. ~Kiwi

  • Poet of Dreams
    June 9, 2006
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    a very interesting concept, wished i would have caught it earlier

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    Thank you for reading & for your kind comments, mikeyschick...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    To fall deeply
    into Passion's smoky, sultry eyes
    is to never touch the ground,
    wings sweeping wide with wonder ~
    Innocence reveals the sacred depths
    of the Heart's longing music...

  • Angel With No Halo
    June 9, 2006
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    Simple yet so very beautiful.You have really done a great job with this write.Hope you win something.Good luck.

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    I'm notorious for it, Scribe... Thanks, my Friend... Wanda
  • ian sawicki
    June 9, 2006
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    see that looks a lot better without them i think peopel way overuse them in poetry i have noticed

  • kaibab silver member
    June 9, 2006
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    To sink with passion's smile
    and still look as innocent
    as spring in songs of
    bursting meadows...
    touches every miracle
    and moves to magic...

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    Ok, I only left the one at the very end...tough taskmaster, ain'tcha???

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    Hmmm...perhaps, Ian...I kind of think of them as pauses between the sighs...I'll see if I can remove one or two of 'em for ya, my Friend...Thanks for hosting, Scribe... Wanda

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    Thank you for your kind words, Pure Haitian...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
  • ian sawicki
    June 9, 2006
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    a good piece but i was a little put off by the amount of ellipses being used, to use them a lot removes their power. especially in such a short poem spill ink and twist me into the shape of love...

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    Thank you for reading & for your kind comments, robster1225...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Mackintoch
    June 9, 2006
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    This is truly beautiful. I think this part right here just complete the entire piece:
    wordless with wonder... Keep up the great work and thank you for sharing. You have a bless day
  • robster1225
    June 9, 2006
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    really nice poem. Very simple, but emotional. I love the analogies you used. Good JOb
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