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Silver Path

Valley shadows
Embrace the night
Guided only
By forgotten branches

There we walk
Devoid of sight
And bring to life
A moonlight haven

Silver paths
Of mysterious light
Followed by
Our shadowed minds

It's there we find
The limits of might
Surrounded by
Our own creation

Author notes

Instrument: Balalaika
Quote: 'Simmer down Billy, you're forgetting here there is no time, this is the beginning and the end' Carousel (19 and a classic buff - slightly sad)
Written June 12th, 2006

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  • Sincerely
    June 14, 2006
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    pretty cool. I like the second line rhyme. It acts as an adhesive for the whole poem and makes it work as a unit. Your imagery is just spectacular. You move so gracefully from one thought to the next. Very nice. Much Love.

  • gothchyld
    June 12, 2006
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    Whoa..this is refreshing. Love the ambuiguity of silver light - it can just flow into so many directions,whether it be a guiding light, or something mysterious. I am most captured by this line: And bring to life
    A moonlight haven

    The image of moonlight haven has got to be one of the best! Good luck in the contest