Weathered branches
Raised in laudation
For those neglected
By the ocean breeze
Withdrawn from nature
They lie encased
In a tomb of bile
Pleading for release
Death of dawn
Rising through voices
With the sullen despair
Of crackling leaves
Pulls at the hearth
Of hopes cold ashes
Laughing at the blindness
Of those deceived
Author notes
Wrote specifically for the competition - my word was laudation if you haven't guessed 
Decided to take this one on a rant as if I think about it too much I'll end up in a worse place than before if that makes sense. Anyway - this is what came to mind. Hope you like it.
Written June 13th, 2006
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Congratulations on winning bronze in this word contest. Rants are good - they say lots and let people interpret as they see fit,
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This little poem packs a powerful punch. I like the images of nature you used and the mood you set. There is no ryhme scheme that i can see but thats ok it works for this piece. nicely writen keep up the good work.
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Great Job!
Magnificent Job Ireally liked it. It truly touched my heart because of how well it flowed. -
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"Withdrawn from nature
They lie encased
In a tomb of bile
Pleading for release" wow! those lines are magnificent. the whole poem is perfection coral! you really outdid yourself. the uniquness, imagery and underlying sorrow n torment. this is exquisite work.
Edited on Jun 14, 2:41 p.m. because ''. -
Hey thanks for entering this contest
You described your word great in here Good luck in this contest
Kimberly
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