Mummy doesn't want you
Mummy doesn't care
Mummy is too selfish
To even know that you are there
Mummy wants to party
Mummy is to young
To know what it is to be a parent
Mummy just wants to have fun
Mummy doesn't know
She is just a child herself
How can she raise a child
Why can't she ask for help?
Mummy doesn't realise
What a miracle she's got
Mummy works the streets
Just to find her next shot
While her little angel
Lies helplessly at home
Mummy doesn't see what's so bad
With leaving her child alone
Mummy needs a miracle
An angel in which to save
Mummy needs some guidance
And to be shown this isn't how to behave
Mummy is too stoned and messed up
To realise that you have been taken away
To be taken care of by someone that loves you
While she continues to be led astray
I will never quite understand
Why some mothers act the way the do
How they could mistreat something as beautiful
And precious as tiny little you
How can they sleep at night
Knowing all that they do wrong
Why do they keep these babies in the first place
Knowing that it isn't what they want
Why do woman who don't want children
Seem to have them and neglect
How could they do this
To something so innocent and perfect
While the women that so desperately
Want and would love a little one
Never get the chance at being a mother
It seems impossible to be done
Why is mummy so selfish?
What gives her the right to be so fucked in the head
She continues going out and getting wasted
When she should be looking after her baby instead
The answer to this question
Is one that I'll never be able to find
I just know that I will be a good mother
In knowing this I will always have piece of mind
To all the women out there
This is my only plea
Only become a mother
If this is what you want to be
Author notes
"Love" Not sure whether this will fit but I am 20 weeks pregnant and wrote this the other week, it breaks my heart to think what these children go through, when there are so many people breaking their hearts that they can't get pregnant. Or like me found it hard to fall pregnant.
Written June 25th, 2006
A contest entry
- Babies & Engagment by BeautifulBirdie.
300 points, ended July 20, 2006, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Crying... by near1202apocalypse.
450 points, ended January 14, 87 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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great job! this really made me stop and think about it. it is an important issue that right now isn't getting that much attention. it seamed a little harsh on the mother but sometimes that is needed! children need to be loved no matter what and if a mother is going to get herself pregnent then she should take on responsibility!
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that was so precious! it reminds me of women who are single teenage mothers and 2 irresponsible 2 take care of their babies. congradulations on being pregnant! how old are u? if u dont mind me asking?
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I share your well expressed concern
I worry about children too, "first, kids need love" - When I was a kid I had to say the prayer "When I lay me down to sleep blah blah and if I should die blah blah" and it always bothered me like the fate of the child in your poem bothers you. I wrote a poem THE DAY JESUS MET SANTA that resolved my worries, and you wrote yours which I hope resolves your worries. There are lines in your poem that are too wordy and can easily be shortened which will keep the wonderful rythm your quickly established unbroken. If you would like some help and specific suggestions on this let me know. billpoet on Allpoetry
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This made me cry to think of the children out there who are neglected and hurt by parents. It was even more poignant because I just found out a few days ago that I'm pregnant, and even though I'm a little nervous about if I'll be a goo mum or not I know I'd be better than the women who treat their children like an inconvenient pet.
This is a GREAT WRITE.
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A little heartless from certain points of view. Interesting topic, handled strongly, with some questionable rhyme and rhythm (better towards the beginning rather than the end.) I hope you teach your child tolerance, and best of luck - have a safe pregnancy!
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a little heartless? to whom? a dead beat parent who's abusing her child? I'm sorry but they don't deserve sympathy, that little bundle that they brought into the world needs the attention....heartless I think not
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Good emotional write. Keep it up.
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The content was very strong. Emotionally, your readers will really like this poem. The flow was good. The feelings were strong. Hope to read more of your works.
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very good
the title got me
lots of good rhyme, coherence, continuance
brings light to an important issue
child abuse / neglect
the best part is you the "why" lines
questions that will never be answered
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also, there is an different answer for each mom
alcoholism, drug abuse, "who cares" attitude, not knowing how to be a parent, life issues, financial concerns, hereditary (lots f, for sure, raising / neglecting their child because that's the way they were raised, etc
the list goes on and on
literally a different excuse for each child
profane language takes away from the importance of the verse as it does in conversation
but
this is a "10"
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I do know how you feel. I can relate to this poem, I'm 34 and just was able to have a baby in Oct 2006 after wanting one for so so many years. Wonderful poem, it makes me angry to think about how some people never know what a great gift they have been given when they have a baby, and then another and another! I love your poem.
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This is sooooo good! i absoultly love it. its so sad but truthful and it made me think about all the horrible stuff that women do in the world and i never want to be one of them. good luck in the contest!
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ohhhhhhhhhh this is sooo good so many feelings :S and the repetition iss o good
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You have deffinatly hit the nail on the head. You made a great point.
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even though this poem is written a bit amateurish it still is very captivating and emotional, this is definitely a question that most women dont consider when they have a baby, i think you put this issue very well into perspective and who knows the amateur quality to the poem might even be an essential part, maybe it is written by a young girl who observes this, either way i enjoyed it and was even able to read through it!!! lol, i dont ussualy do well with long poems
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Your words are filled with truth of our days and how little ones suffer, from parents selfishness. Well done.
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Awww...
**sniffle**sob**
It really makes me mad when parents neglect or abuse their kids. It's so sad and awful, it makes me feel so helpless cuz theres nothing I can do about it.
This poem is so emotional: love for the children, the feeling of helplessness...I swear, if I wasn't in school I'd probably be crying my eyes out.
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Precious
How the world turns in its deceitfull ways, mommies are led astray by the pressures of our modern day. Mommies are so young that they just don't understand what it really means to love somebody unconditionally.
That a child be left alone is the most selfish sin that a mother can commit, is it the Allmighty that has failed to bring Mommy a little peace and harmony in this man's world.
Your peotry rang like a song to me, I thought I was listening to Pink Floyd as I read it, perhaps my mind is musical or perhaps your pen was delightfull.
I like it, I like it so.
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WONDERFUL!!!
wow Mara, uve gotten heaps of comments for this one, and so u should, its amazing!!!
It really shows how emotionally and psysically ready u are to be a mother.
It is incredibly sad to see teens getting pregnant for the money, to shoot up the money, but the kid is still there, and not being cared for..... its tragic!!
"To all the women out there
This is my only plea
Only become a mother
If this is what you want to be"
I LOVE THAT LINE!!! I always tell ppl that they should have kids only when theyre ready , u just put it in better terms lol!!!
This piece bought tears to my eyes, because I thought of u and how hard u and adam hav had it, but im happy that u guys finally have what u want
love always dani
GREAT JOB SWEETY!!!
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it kills me to read this as i know it is so damn true. i was lucky to get a mother that cares but there are just too many kids out there being treated like crap because there mother is out getting her next fix. this write realy put it all in perspective and showed the true emotion in it all. I'm so glad your child will be getting a wonderful mother!
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I really love how you opened up and spoke up about this because it is is so true and we know this. I love my daughter with all heart and soul, and to think about neglecting her would be a devastating thing. I thought about giving her up for adoption,(due to my situation) but I quickly changed my mind because I just couldn't bring myself to give her up.
That would have taken a big part of me. And I probably would have never forgave myself. But I had someone special by my side to help me through it. Thanks for sharing this lovely, deep emotion felt poem of yours.
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Wow! This is an amazing piece of writing! I don't know exactly what to say! Very powerful and truthful .. And I agree that it is not fair!
I recently lost my baby, which I loved and wanted more than anything in this world .. I know that I am only 17, and I have been told that my loss is actually a blessing in disguise which hurt because not at all young people are unfit to become mothers! I stopped my harming habits and sought the help I would need to do everything right for my baby .. I took no risks, yet she was born prematurely with no explanation!
One of my friends is pregnant and doesn't want the baby, and another girl I know, who is only 15, had a healthy baby despite drinking and doing drugs through her entire pregnancy, and now won't even look after her baby herself! Where is the sense in that?
You have expressed yourself well with this piece .. It really says a lot ..
"To all the women out there
This is my only plea
Only become a mother
If this is what you want to be "
Sums it up perfectly!
Congratulations on your pregnancy! It is the most wonderful and precious experience, and just from reading this, it is obvious that you are going to make a fantastic mother!
Best of luck with everything, and good luck in the contest
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wow this poem is beautifil i like it i bet it is hard to lode a child good luck in our contest
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Its sad to say that your poem is very true. I have known a lot of young people that have got their children taken away. Your poem was heart felt and beautiful. I congradulate you on your baby to come. I wish you the best of luck in my contest.
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so sad... help can often come in the form of a kind stranger, but many times it overlooks those in need. I feel nothing but pity for a mother that could do this to their child. None should raise a child unless they truly know what to do, and people should do something to help those that don't. at least some take wisdom from this. I am comforted by the thought that some will learn from this woman's mistake, and care for their child the way they should... enough rambling. you said it was a poem that you think everyone should read, and I think you are right. I hope that I shall be the kind stranger who helps a child in need, if ever I get the chance. I hope none who read this poem are so hard-hearted as to do otherwise.
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I agree with what you are saying. Don't fuck around unless you are mature enough to handle the consequences. It is disgusting that the youth of today have no morality and no responsibility. Children are a gift. It's so simple to avoid having them if you aren't ready for such a prize. Close your damn legs! Honestly.
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so true some woman have children n dont give 1 shit about them heh like my mom heh good job i like this 1 a lot
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Ah, fuck. I've got chills.
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You have hit this perfectly...I could never understand why God gives people babies that don't want or need them...and women who dream of babies and see them everywhere never get them...it's like pun or something....one of my [sorta] friends has 2 babies...would now have 3 except she miscarried the last one....but she is quite young (smokes and does drugs even through pregnancy) she kept the babies but never watched them luckily she had a mom that did sense she still lived with her....but then her mom got put in the hospitol and the kids got taken away...now she is finally trying to straighten her life out...she gets to see the kids every weekend, she has a job, and her kids are in a christian home right now
but one of her best friends is about her age and she has 3 babies (almost on top of each other) she smokes, drinks, does drugs, and cusses to high heaven...though her mom is the same....she don't care...I see such a difference in the two.
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Wow.... you've brought tears to my eyes with this piece. As you know, I'm one of those women who so desperately wants to be a mother, but fate has decided to punish me with the inability to conceive. It infuriates me when I see mothers such as the one you describe not give a damn about their children and then complain when they get pregnant again. Both young and old do this, and I'm afraid I'll never know why these bastards were blessed and I was not.
Thank you for writing this piece. I know those who need to hear it probably never will, but it sure made me feel better!
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'Mummy wants to party
Mummy is to young - ('too' young)
To know what it is to be a parent
Mummy just wants to have fun'
I could totally relate to the feelings in this poem!! I'm sure most people can, but it is especiallyt close to me as I can't have children due to infertility. People just don't know when they have it good!
Mind you, by the sound of this charactor, they probably were too stoned to take precautions and became pregnant without a second thought - that makes me even more angry.
'Children' seem to be popping out babies at an ever increasing speed here in UK. You see groups of them trawling the streets in low income areas with their buggies, cigarettes hanging out of their mouths, screaming at their tiny, helpless babies.
Not only are they sacrificing their educations and lives, but they are not provoiding safe and secure environments for their children and are far too busy with their friends to notice a baby's needs - It makes me furious!! And all because the government give them plenty of 'young parent family' benefits and accomodation.
I AM NOT SAYING THAT ALL YOUNGSTERS DO THIS, but I actually know under 18 year olds who have had babies just to keep boyfriends or to get a council flat and benefits and free NHS prescriptions! It is sick!!
This poem seems to approach all sides of the situation, I liked that, but found that they seemed to blend into each other - have you considered putting each persons part in different font sizes or italics?? Just an idea!
The content was really thought provoking (as you can see
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Excellent!
Sarah Louise Hudson
PLEASE DO NOT TAKE OFFENSE WITH MY COMMENT - I AM TALKING OF A MINORITY OF PEOPLE IN ONE CITY IN ENGLAND AND MEAN IN NO WAY TO SLAG OFF ANYONE ELSE!!
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Great poem, It really brings out the issue with, "accidental" children and mothers who can't handle children they've wantd for so long. I like it, If you get a chance, please critique some of my poems. I've just started writing again so I suck even worse than before but I like it so, :-). -
There are many women out there that become mothers when they shouldn't. I do however take offense at the person who commented that "there are plenty of jobs out there and good ones" I have two children, I wanted to be a mother, I was a great mother, unfortunately their father wasn't a great father and I never got a lick of child support. I worked two jobs and still couldn't manage to make ends meet. My children were latch-key kids in between my legitimate jobs. My children now live with my mother because I "failed" as a mother. While I agree with your poem for the situation it addresses some of the lines were painful to read if you've had to try and provide for your children and were not able to.
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Sad
Very sad and emotional. The rhythm and rhyme go very well and the content is extremely sad. There are a lot of mothers out there like this who shouldnt even call themselves mothers, and this poem makes me, and many others, think of the people out there who are like that; it shows us that not everyone is wrapped up in a comfortable niche, but it may not be their fault (I'm speaking from the child's perspective here). I dont normally read stuff like this, but it makes me sad to think about it. Great writing. -
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it's not something i usually read or am into, but i liked that. it made me think. nice
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i still love it. love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Excellent-poem,Indeed'
Hey,QueenT;You really 'Hit The Nail,On The Head,with this one.There is 'No-Excuse',on 'Gods' Green Earth,that I can see,that anyone,should have to live,like this.There are always,Jobs,and 'decent' ones,at that!I really 'dug',on this poem,cause you put it,'Directly To The-Heart,and Point,of the Problem-O! I just hope,some p'women',will take the time,to read this,cause it is ,such a true and ,'everyone should read',kinda poem.'Fabulous-Write'...'God Bless You,My Friend'...Love,Shirley ann shaw-Raytown,mo.64133.(And U-Have-My-Vote)!!!!! -
OMG SORRY ABOUT THAT JUS T IGNORE ABOVE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I DID THAT RONG
I WAS MEANT TO SAY GREAT POEM TOTALLY LUSH AND SO TRUE -
Alex is obsessed with gym,
Does everything her way,
From backflips to roundoffs,
She's compeated in USA.
She also loves jake flower,
He's in the year below,
Someday she'll want to marry him
So go on girl go.
She loves all her friends,
And they all love her too,
Alex is my hunni girl,
She's special through and through. -
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Oh wow, it really amazes me how sick some people can be...I read your author comment thing and that's just really disgusting!! I hope she got put in jail!!!
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I don't know what I can say that so many others haven't already. But I really love this poem. It's so true. And I feel the same way. When I become a mother I will definately not be like the mother in the poem. I think your a stupendous poet. Your really (so far) the best I've read. Keep it up. I'm gonna read your others as well. Probably not now tho cuz it's late and I have to get up early. lol. Your Great!!! ^.^
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a reminder of life
Well QueenT unfortunitly what you have written is so true and to all reading it will bring them back to what life is today. we do need to remember this drug and abuse problem that is out there. i feel for this poor neglected child but also for her Mother,she was most likely too stoned to know that she was even having sex. maybe repeated drug addicts need to be forced to take contraceptive to prevent these known problems. keep sending out these reminders, loved your work, came from the heart and soul. read my poem (walking behind coffins) it's a paradox to what you;ve wrote. god bless. tsol xx -
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this, sadly, happens all to often. I dearly wish it didn't, but it happens all the time in cities and even in towns. Have you ever been to Mexico city? Or NYC? When I went to those cities, I cried. There were CHILDREN sitting in the streets begging for money while their parents were hooking and selling drugs! It blew my mind away. We never realize how good our lives are untill we see poems like this, or see abre footed children sitting in the streets begging for scraps. This is a sad world we live in, and it is up to us to change it. Anyways, before I start trying to recruit you, because I am not trying to do taht, I just want to say taht this is a very good poem, it really made me thing.
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this, sadly, happens all to often. I dearly wish it didn't, but it happens all the time in cities and even in towns. Have you ever been to Mexico city? Or NYC? When I went to those cities, I cried. There were CHILDREN sitting in the streets begging for money while their parents were hooking and selling drugs! It blew my mind away. We never realize how good our lives are untill we see poems like this, or see abre footed children sitting in the streets begging for scraps. This is a sad world we live in, and it is up to us to change it. Anyways, before I start trying to recruit you, because I am not trying to do taht, I just want to say taht this is a very good poem, it really made me thing.
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thats a good poem, it was beatificly sad... and i know a parent like that, my former best friends who was a parent to me too.. its depressing and dumb. espically because it just their fault, their selfishness thats hurting those around them... i truly liked this poemm, though- please keep writing and the best luck to you!
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fantastic:)
Your poem was beautiful..many many mothers weren't prepared when they had their children n' still aren't when raising them...seeing as how their still children themselves, they don't feel the need to learn because its all about themselves..
thanks for writing something so touching and for making people think! This is why i love AP because you get a chance to read some really wonderful pieces.
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Oh My Goodness! I love this poem soooooooooooooooooooooooooo much! It is sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo awesome! I am new here and I was looking to see what other fun things I can do with my poetry! Like writing and styles and things like that! I love this poem a lot! It is just soooooooooo wonderful and it is breathtaking! I know I am only 14, but this poem makes me realize what mothers would do that, and that I know I should take care of my child when I have one! I love this poem a lot! Keep up the great writing!!!
Sammy!!!
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Your poem is great perfect and is so true about most teenage mothers and I love the message you conveyed in the poem. I applaud this poem to the highest decree. -
hey queent your poem is so beatiful and full with emotion, i am sure that you are a great writer cause you write from the heart, keep writing and i wish that every thing rong becomes right one day.
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Hi thanks for the comment, it means alot to me, and I will return the favour as soon as I get a minute. To add someone to yours favorites list, click on settings at the top of ur page. Look for a heading that says manage favourites or something like that, click on that and there will be a box that you type in the name of the person you wish to add. If that doesnt work let me know. All the best QueenT
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Amazing. Meaningful, and this clearly deserves applause. Great rhyme scheme too.
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This poem speeks the hard truth of over half the mothers in the world. I don't quite understand the reason why mothers would want to do this to gods most precious creation. You really hit it on the head when you wrote this one. I know of someone who is sort of like the mother you describe in this peice, it is a damn shame. You keep up the good work. I would like to add you to my favorites, but I don't know how, if you could tell me I would be grateful to have you on my list.
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Brilliant!!!!
A very important message thats been tackled in a wonderful way. It really make the reader think. Great use of powerful language to bring the point across!! -
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OMG! i loooooooove this poemmmmmm!!! the message is just amazing!! i love love love love loved it! it was fan-freaking-tastic!! you are an amazing poet! YOU GET A 10000000000 ON A SCALE OF 10!!!!!! -
holy fucking shit. That was freakin awesome. And so real. WOW im i jesus i dont know what to say this should be the number one on the top appluaded. WOW i almost what its like to read a poem thats real and just overall a great poem. SO amaturs but your clearly. wow imma gonna go read some more of your poems. This was obviuously fanstatic!!!!!! You definitly get a TEN from me!!!!!!!
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holy fucking shit. That was freakin awesome. And so real. WOW im i jesus i dont know what to say this should be the number one on the top appluaded. WOW i almost what its like to read a poem thats real and just overall a great poem. SO amaturs but your clearly. wow imma gonna go read some more of your poems. This was obviuously fanstatic!!!!!! You definitly get a TEN from me!!!!!!!
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holy fucking shit. That was freakin awesome. And so real. WOW im i jesus i dont know what to say this should be the number one on the top appluaded. WOW i almost what its like to read a poem thats real and just overall a great poem. SO amaturs but your clearly. wow imma gonna go read some more of your poems. This was obviuously fanstatic!!!!!! You definitly get a TEN from me!!!!!!!
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LOVED IT!!!
LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It is totally amazing! I totally agree to everything in this poem and I'm going to have my older sister read it. I think it would open her eyes a little to what she's doing to her kids. Anywho, I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW really awsome write!! i dont think i'll ver forget this one!! i agree completly!!! u should only keep the child if you can take care of itand if you want it!!! applaud!!
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WOW!!!!!!! WHOA...I am suprised you didn't get run off A/P for this one. I am sure you hit a lot I mean a lot of sore spot with that. I applaud you first off and say that this is one of the best, well written, heart felt poems that I have read in a long time. thanks for sharing and please keep up the good work.. whew..watch ya back!!! j/k
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I'm Speechless!!
OMG!!! I'm speechless!! A complete loss for words!! Incredible piece!! Bravo!!
A mother of 8 beautiful kids~
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This poem was amazing. I have heard a lot about young mothers doing stupid things like leavign babies in trashcans, leaving them alone all the time, and other horrible things. When I actually see a teenager at the least being a good mother it makes me want to give them all I have. It takes guts to be a mother and a lot fo devotion and love. If some oen doesn't have that then I agree they shouldn't have a baby. One of my mothers friends had a baby and left it with my mom all the time. It was sad. My mother had me and my brother when she was merely 19. I have a friend though that got pregnant at 15 and she is now 17 and truley grateful for the child she has and has been a good mother. So it's good to know there are many good mothers out there. Despite the bad ones. Great write.
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great write
hey wow wow wow this is really good truly amazing work i want to say this is so good and what a great point you bring out
wow wow wow wow ok now i need to control myslef this makes me angry and sad at the same time
i so see your point i know there are some people that really want to have a child but theyy just can't and then the ones who are able to have them treat them like crap well not all some of them are parents who also had it rough or they got pregnant at a young age but still that is no excuse to do what ever they do to those poor children well i like this alot hey i was wondering if maybe when you had a chance you could check out some of my writes too i liked the way this was formatted nice way of doing it i like the meaning to it and the way you rhymed it i love this so much keep writing lots of love-Perla
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it's worse than tragedy how some children are brought to the world by entirely the wrong parents, Mara...mothers and fathers are supposed to protect their children, and your poem expresses so well what it's like when parents don't care, and details of the news story you had read are horrendous. this is such a touching poem.
to read this poem is to know that your child is gonna have a very special mummy...one who's very life and happiness is the the life and happiness of his/her mother.
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AWSOME >>> THATS ALL I HAVE TO SAY
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This poem almost braught me to tears, I agree that any mommy shouldnt leave her kid alone and do what some do, its really wrong, so if you wanan become a mom treat them right, be a mom.
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Outstanding!!!
OH MY GOSH!!!!This is fantastic!!!Wow...this is just....brilliant!!! I loved this and I totally agree with what you said. I loved the lines:
While the women that so desperately
Want and would love a little one
Never get the chance at being a mother
It seems impossible to be done
I know people that try and try to have babies and can't and to see a mother mistreat or not appreciate her baby....your right...she's being selfish. You did an excellent job and you will have twenty nine applauses now. Keep up the great work...you are a truly amazing poet. -
Yup. Makes you wonder, doesn't it? Sometimes the alley cats have big litters.
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Wow that is so amazing and painful at the same time. I cannot believe how many moms leave their beloved children. Thanks for writing such an emotional piece! I can't wait to read more!
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hey thanks for the comment, I am not knocking all young mothers, I am about to come one myself. I am onyl 20 years old. I am only talking about the ones that abuse and neglect their child. I know plenty of young mums that are great parents, so please dont think I am knocking them all.
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This is really eye-opening, I love poems about issuses that normally people wouldn't bring up. I'm glad you put this in the view of the child- I hope the message got through and that young mothers will understand fully the miracle of a child.
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Very powerful poem
This is a very powerful poem, i myself am i mother and it disgusts me to know how some mothers treat such a miracle as a baby, dont knock all young mums though i had my son at 17 and my daughter shortly afterwards there are a few of us left who appreciate the innocence of a baby and the joy one can bring -
wow this is a wonderful piece!..and i can somewhat relate..well a family member of mine can because her mom was never there for her.!well keep up the awesome work! -shanna
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My words are useless!Amazing piece of art!
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I have known a few worthless mothers like this myself. I think this write speaks volumes, and I hope it gets the message thru to at least one person. Athena
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O my gosh. Thats terrible! I'm glad my mother doesn't do things like this. Even though mothers can be a pain sometimes or whatever, I think this piece of yours gives more appreciation for our mothers. I think im more thankful, after reading this. Awesome work!
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Amazingly Brilliantly Superbly Emotionaly....
Wow. I....I....wow. I don't know what to say. My mother, is horrible, she doesn't do drugs, or anything like that, but she is cruel and hits me. I can relate to this poem. Brilliant. -
What an absolutely magnificent piece of writing my friend and all so true in everything that you say.And the piece you have in your comments about the mother getting her kid high,what kind of idiot does that?These people should be locked up for doing such a thing.Anyway,excellent writing my friend.Kenny
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Very honest. I agree with you a 100%. Some women should never bring a child into this world; unfortunately, my mother was one such woman.
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Is it worse to be a mother who neglects her child, or to be an irresponsible young girl who gets pregnant repeatedly and has abortion after abortion?
I totally understand your message here. What is wrong with people today? Mothers, and fathers, mistreating their children...it's sick.
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this poem has some real emotion in, its so creul how people can do such terrible things it makes me realise how lucky i am, even if i grew up with just my mother, i know that i got it easy compared to some.
keep writing this was some amazing work thanks for sharing.
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Wow, this poem is really strong and thought provoking...
I totally agree, what some (or many? I don't know...) do to their little children is so terrible... I've read you author's box... I cannot understand how anyone would be able to do something cruel like that to her OWN child!
Unfortunately, the flow was not the best throughout the whole poem... Especially towards the end reading got harder... Also, I think that the word "Mummy" was used a bit too often...
But still a really well written poem, you get an applause from me!
LittleAnn
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