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Time roams the world eating its fill
Of the edges of lives held in suspense,
Until the hours drain into a glass face,
Pooling in the bottom where no man lives.
But with your passionate words embracing me,
Only love holds the power of my extinction.
In response to those eloquent words
Poured over me like silken caramel cream,
My lips moisten with honeyed ejaculation,
My heart surges forward in its beating,
My legs become limp under my body, and
I quiver, yearning to be fed by your touch.
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Written March 27th, 2003
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oohhhhh...
i like this tons better now, with the rest of it.
this is *stunning*. the words work together, making it so... so passionate
and finally, the 'ejaculation' seems right at home to me.
*sigh*
anyway, lovely poem. it makes me feel bad for having a line limit on my challenge.
Katie o) -
You capture the sensual--erotic moments in few words of passion, but this is not just another quickie... Great job...
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A mixture of wonderful images and vivid honesty make this piece real and dreamy at the same time. The underlying theme is wonderful and very well expressed. You have demonstrated the power of words on both levels
Exceptional write -
Excellent! Lovely poem!
Very "tasteful"
passionate, eloquent words to describe Passion's Roar! Enjoyed this immensely!
Maureen
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RAWR
ahem sorry
thats all I can manage
this is srumptious
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Oooolaaalaaa :-) Pretty hot ! I love poems like this, and seems to me, your words are eloquent also :-)
I especially love these lines;
"Poured over me like silken caramel cream,
My lips moisten with honeyed ejaculation," Yum... definately yum...
Very sensual stuff, nicely done,
~ Wendy
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Okay, I should not have read this while hubby is at work! LOL... what a beautiful write! Love the imagery and it is sizzling with sensuality....
honeyed ejaculation... I love your turning this male related verb into a feminine one.
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hubba, hubba,
this is fantastic in mystical illusions
my heart is a racing.....
very well done Joyce
Tamara -
This was a very enjoyable read, great piece!
Thanks for sharing!
~Timothy~ -
wow. wow. that's great. i really, really enjoyed this.
"honeyed ejaculation"
great phrase.
this is full of great lines
well written
cat -
I love this, it provokes vivid images and strong feeling. You did an excellent job with this write, thanks for sharing.
-Angel aka WoundedAngel. -
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MY EYES! MY EYES!
MOM!!! You could warn a kid that you're gettin all...MOIST in here!
Oh, by the by, excellent imagrey, especially in the first and last stanzas. Love the idea of Time eating its fill, and the overt lust!
But seriously... MY EYES! MY EYES!!!!!!!
~ Jimmy -
7.5/10
Intense piece. A good one here.
I like the metaphors or innuendo's you have
in this piece.
A lovely piece here.
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wow.
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wow.
thats basically all i can say! this is so phenominally written, so....so....WOW! i love the words u used in this poem, and the way it can have 2 meanings, depending on how u think i had to read it 8 or 9 times before i commented, its such a lovely poem! thanks for sharing
*~!)o(Azul Corte Katze)o(!~*
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