To Dare
Dare I dream to touch the sky,
which flashes in my widened eye?
To gaze into the heavens high
to be,to love,to live to die.
Countless times I've stood below,
this vast canopy in warmth and snow.
The incessant question I ask,bestow,
Will fate befriend or become a foe.
Furious winds come whipping 'round
caressing my face from all around.
I weep at beauty that's chaos bound
as i so small do stand my ground.
A flash,then thunder fills the air,
striking close,invokes despair.
A fading star at me does stare,
beckoning me, to dream... to dare.
"SOUP" Hendrickson
July 4th,2006
3.41 a.m.
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Written July 4th, 2006
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BRAVO!!
Soupie!!!! Excellent write hun!! I truly love this. I can actually in my mind, see you penning this. I am going to keep a copy of this if you don't mind!
Hey, it's been a long time, over due..give me a hollar. PM me with your phone # and I will call you. I have free long distance.
Love you doll!
Eternal
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I really liked this.
About how do you dare to intervene(sp?) with powers greater than you, such as fate and nature. I liked that, I haven't read very many poems like it. I also liked the personification that you used, it stood out more in yours than it does in other poems using personification, and I'm not really sure why. Also with the rhyming, it wasn't forced at all, and the flow was good, so props for that.
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Nice piece, the flow is very smooth and the ontent clearly portayed
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hey thanks for the applause and honest critique. i dont write much 'hope' poetry. so, this was wierd,lol, thanks again
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Nice description of nature and personification
Good use of alliteration and rhyme here A small point= 'i' should be 'I'. Keep writing, I liked the hopeful feel of this piece
All the best
Pozo
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