I was in love with a man
Who told me lies
He said that I was his only
Then why'd you cheat on me?
You said I was everything
Only to find out
That I was absolutely nothing to you
And one day I got sick of it
He said,
"Sorry, baby."
And I said,
"I'm sorry you couldn't be a better man."
"Sorry."
"Sorry I saw right through your lies."
"Sorry I found out that you didn't love me."
I'm sick of you
Sick of your bullshit
Sick of your lies
"I'm sorry you didn't know how to treat a woman."
You thought you could deceive me
"Sorry, baby."
"What for honey? I said. That you fucking lied?"
"You thought it was acceptable to cheat?"
"To bleed me dry of myself, you fucking selfish bastard."
I said,
"Love is a gift, not to be taken for granted."
"Get it through your thick stupid head."
"Sorry boy."
I'm sick of hearing you say
"Sorry, baby."
So then I said,
"Shut your mouth! I don't want to hear your lies, no not again."
"Boy, we're more then through."
Author notes
This poem is about a woman whose boyfriend cheated on her. In this poem she is saying, that she's had enough, and although it hurts her, she has come to accept that she cannot change him.
The words that are being spoken back and forth are in quotation marks, and the words that are not being spoken and only thought aren't in quotation marks.
My challenge to the reader is to figure out who is saying what. Is it the girl or her cheating boyfriend? That's for you to decide. I know who's saying what, and I know what it means to me as the writer, but I want to leave it up to your interpretation. So good luck.
Note: When I was writing this I didn't have myself and my own experiences with life in mind , and then I looked at it again and realized that this fits me more then any other of my poems, and is the most honest and raw poem that I have written, even though I've never been with a guy who's cheated on me.
I know that there is a lot of cursing in this poem, and that is why I put it under the adult category.
Love and hugs,
~Amanda~
Written July 7th, 2006
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G'Day ShadyLass
Well expressed, I liked the challenge of trying to figure out whom was saying what in the conversation.
Cheating is a hard thing to experience and you penned the emotions and thoughts of pain, confusion and anger so well.
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Thank you for your entry
Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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Thank you for the comment. I'm glad you liked my poem.
~Amanda~
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Well done!
This poem is so raw and true. I love the fact that you left it up to the reader to decide who is saying what... Wonderful! Thank you for entering and good luck.
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Thank you so much for the comment. Was my pleasure entering the contest.
~Amanda~
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excellent~
I am glad that you friend told her crappy boyfriend she was tired of his glib lies the cheating asking for forgiveness and saying Sorr Baby thinking this line would work again..hooray for your friend for sticking up and telling him to get lost.
There is someone much better out there for her and she will find him...
Let him tell the same stories and lies to another girl until she too realizes he is no good
Powerful write..will try to catch up more not feeling good this morning did not sleep at all last night might head back to bed for a nap
Hoping you have a good day
Hugs
Susan~~~
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Thank you my dear for the comment. I've been trying to catch up on my comments, but since my grandma just died I'm having a bit of trouble finding the time. Go nap and feel better. My day was good. I listened to one of my favorite CD's by Nightwish and just lounged and watched TV all day.
Love to ya,
~Amanda~
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wow. I remember reading this a while back, and then i realized i never commented. maybe because it was too hard for me back then. I was cheated on and it hurt. you've really captured the raw emotion and i love that you don't tell who is saying what. much love.
--Rianna
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Well thank you for commenting now. I always appreciate it.
~Amanda~
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Thanks for the comment. I actually had to write this one more then once to get all the kinks out, but I like how it turned out and I'm hoping to make this into a song soon.
~Amanda~
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This is a really strong write. When I read it, it felt like I was living it. Maybe its just because I know the feeling. Very nice job
and keep it up.
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Thank you for the comment. I agree that cheating is one of the worst things a person can do to another.
~Amanda~
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Wow, this is really deep and emotional. I really like it though. Really says a lot within the words. I despise cheating..it's wrong for someone to lead you on and on and on..and be with another person or multiple people. Awesome write and keep it up.
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Thanks so much for the comment. I know that not all guys are like that, and I'll find a good one someday. It's just that somedays I forget to remember that.
~Amanda~
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Nice Work!
Sometimes life is not fair. But to trust someone else again is to have faith in life. I am sure you will find someone who will treat you right. I promise that not all guys are like that. You have expressed your emotions very well and I liked this poem a lot. -
Thank you for the comment. My intention was to make the reader think. I like your quote. It's really funny.
~Amanda~
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Thank you so much for the comment. I appreciate it. I'm glad you like the black rose.
~Amanda~
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finally, a poem that makes one think!
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This is a very intense
and powerful poem. She
said all the things I
am sure a lot of us would
have loved to have said.
Great writing.
Thank you for sharing.
Love the black rose!!
Jeannie D Hunter
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Thank you so very much for the comment. It is greatly appreciated. It's funny that I've never had a man cheat on me before, but I've been cheated so many times in life that I have a lot of the same emotions as if someone had cheated on me. About your husband I am sorry, and I know that we are better then that.
Love and hugs,
~Amanda~
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thought provoking~
Indeed you did show raw emotion in this poem...
In my earlier years I was cheated on too...by my husband no less so I know where this poem is comming from....and what the words mean as well...
Just know we are better than they are and we can hold our heads up high...while they still have bitter remorse in their heart and soul....and forgiveness will take a long time in comming...
Very thought provoking and well penned poem sweetie...
Hugs n love
Susan~~~
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I agree. What makes art art is that not everyone has to agree on what makes it such. It all depends on what it means to the viewer. Best wishes to you as well.
~Amanda~
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And the benefit of such arts is that we need not all agree on what constitutes art, so long as it enriches someone's life in either the execution or the viewing of such, I must say. Best wishes.
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I really appreciate this comment. I'm glad you understand it. That's great that you could even add a few lines onto this. It proves that you truly understand this and have some thoughts and feelings of your own, which I find amazing. Thanks so much.
~Amanda~
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Fabulous
I have been through this too, and I know EXACTLY who saying what and who's thinking what. I could not only go line for line and expalin it if I had to, I could probbably add a few lines of my own as well, LOL. I know what you're feeling so let it out and it makes for awesome reading. Thank you for sharing such raw, meaningful thought with all of us. I really appreciate this excellent piece. -
Why thank you kindly.
Saying my rage writes well is a very great compliment. Thanks so very much. Your comment is much appreciated.
~Amanda~
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Thank you so very much. Saying it sounds like a Maya Angelou poem is one of the greatest compliments I've ever recieved, and means so much to me. Love you always too.
~Amanda~
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By saying I've captured the emotive impact, that is worth something to me. I agree that there isn't much poetry in it, but that was my intention. I wanted more raw emotion rather then a poetic form. Yes, I know it must be a little harder reading this being a man yourself. Lol. I swear this poem isn't guy bashing in any way.
Thank you very much for the comment. It is greatly appreciated.
~Amanda~
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Wow so vain! What an angry poem! I hope all is well now. And agreed with TJCasser, for once cursing in a poem didn't turn me off. Keep it up, your rage writes well.
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I agree with TJCasser above - I think it's very highly emotionally charged and very Maya Angelou-esque. It had a huge impact on my gut emotionally when I read it. Poetry form matters not here, you've captured something real - something important...
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I dunno. It is a very emotional write, truly, and very heart-felt... but I don't know that I actually myself see much poetry in it.
Maybe it's just from the fact that I'm a guy sitting here reading it... who knows.
The cursing's not a turnoff in a piece like this, by the by - I think it's entirely appropriate for the mood, and I think you've definitely captured the emotive impact... if that's worth anything.
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