Resplendent in satin evening wear
On a glorious pedestal in the sky
Awaiting a date with destiny
Luscious moon heavenly glides
Dancing on scented air,
Stairway of brilliant stars
Symphony of the night
Wrapped in lush velvet
Sprinkled with stardust
I yearn to climb that starry stairway
To reach out and caress its loveliness
As it exquisitely floats by
Eyes entranced, soul captivated
Awed by its magnificence
Seated upon the throne of God's creation
Author notes
Written July 7th, 2006
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Well done, Bunny! I just love words like “resplendent” – they conjure up so many images from just one word! And a satin moon – well, yes – the moon does look like satin sometimes – but I never thought of it before. Same thing for the velvet sky and scented air. The spiritual side of this poem is subtle, which I think is an excellent way to approach a spiritual concept. I like poetry that is religious, but to me there is a huge difference between spiritual and religious. Your entire poem was a spiritual one – and you only mentioned God in one line. Very well done! I would not change much of this poem. The main thing I see that I think could be a bit better is the flow of the lines. Each stanza looks to be pretty much an individual idea and not strongly attached to the previous. The flow and rhythm of the poem might benefit from tying those stanzas together more closely. That could be accomplished by making the stanzas unevenly broken insofar as the number of lines is concerned – and you could use the technique of totally separating a line or two that you mean to have a greater impact than the surrounding ones. Of course, the poem is lovely as it is, and a welcome entry to the contest. Best regards, Toni
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Thank you so very much for the wonderful comments and encouraging applause, I am so glad you enjoyed this piece!
Bunny
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Brilliant!
Absolutely beautiful!!! Marvelous scribing! Very descriptive.
Great imagination and creativity. You made Gods creation
a masterpiece. This was exhilerating. The magic and enchantment
in your words made this poem very special. Very mystical.
One could visually see the images you so vividly cast
on the canvas of you heart. Brilliant writing! 
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Thank you so very much for your wonderful insightful comments and encouraging applause, I am so glad that you enjoyed this piece! Bunny
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Thank you so very much for the wonderful comments, I am so glad you enjoyed this piece! Bunny
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Thank you so very much for your wonderful insightful comments, and your mental wanderings indeed led you to the right conclusion, and yearnings. Thanks for looking inside and I am so glad you enjoyed my view! Bunny
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beautifully written
Beautifully written words that show us this earth is very important to us and also to God. It is where we wait our return to the celestial dwelling above. write on, your talent is amazing...........ennovy
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Sometimes the most simplest of things turn into the most beautiful of words! Well done!
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"The throne of God's creation"? My often overanalytical mind is trying to define this line. Is the throne of God's creation the earth? Is the narrator staring off into the heavens from her place of deep reflection on the soil of the earth, wishing he/she could join the celestial dance, not for any desire to escape the beauty of the world that he/she inhabits, but because of the simple longing to experience something so transcending as a dance amid the glory of the stars. Ok, so my mind sometimes had its own psychedelic moments without any assistance from mind altering chemicals. I apologize for spinning off into my own raptures of the soul. This poem was inspiring and thought provoking and peaceful and powerful and I enjoyed it tremendously. Thanks for promoting it so that I could stumble upon it in my mental meanderings.
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Thanks so very much for your lovely comment and encouraging applause, I'm so glad you enjoyed this piece! Bunny
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ONe day I hope to be setting beside you in that heavenly bliss, **************way to go********
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