In shreds I'd love to see you,
Manipulated by faceless identities,
Lose the flow, lose the consistency,
Curse you to the bowels of hell.
No element proved stronger than you,
No element so painfully constant as you,
Change, not a thorn in your path,
Curse you to the depths of an abyss.
Your existence, a hindrance,
Words said cannot be unsaid,
Deeds done cannot be undone,
Curse you to the ignorance of insanity.
Destination unknown, on a one way ride,
Emotions felt for so short a span,
Pain felt for eternity, unto death,
Curse you to the tormenting stillness of paralysis,
You've been on my side before,
Digging my grave behind my back,
Throwing all my desires out of reach,
Curse you to the emptiness of unfulfilled wishes.
Time, my friend, but, my enemy,
Time, my beacon, but, my death,
Time, my hope, but, my addiction,
Time, your annihilation is improbable,
Your invincibility, is but penetrable.
Author notes
I said something to this girl I shouldn't have.. I apologized to her.. she said " Don't bother apologizing... you'd be apologizing only for saying it.. but you did mean it.." ... not the exact words.. but thats what she meant.. And twas so true... She understood me so prefectly well.. I'm so guilty I told her what I never meant to.. If only I could take back those words..
That is why I hate TIME .... Wish someday I'd be able to go back in time and change what was never meant to be.. Until then.. Time will be invincible...
Written July 10th, 2006
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"wearing your heart on your sleeve" means what you write of is exactly how you feel and holding absolutely nothing back.
it is pure emotions or as i call it "your heart on paper"
thank you the very kind replies. i enjoy your poetry and i write what i feel as to how the words in a poem inspire me to feel. i do find your author's comments fascinating and do believe they are all poetry unto themselves.
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"wonderful writing though sad to see so much anger between two who once cared so deeply for one another"
I'm friends with that girl again! She was damn pissed n sad for a week or so.. And then gracefully... like a Goddess..she accepted my apologies and we're thick friends again!
And does "wearing my heart on my sleeve" mean something like "being frank, open, transparent"???? If thats what you meant... Thanks! Love ya lots! -
Wow! Wow! Wow!
the passion and contempt i feel through your words is astounding. to write from such a personal place is no easy feat and you have done an incredible job of portraying so clearly your feelings. your words are stark and harsh and really drew me in. wonderful writing though sad to see so much anger between two who once cared so deeply for one another~
lynn
p.s. again, your author's comments is poetry unto itself and i so admire you for wearing your heart on your sleeve as i am not at such a place to do so; therefore i have great repsect that you share so much with your readers~ -
Nutty Fairymother! Thank you for the comment!
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Wow! Intense poem, Dumbkiwaniwinkydodo! Well done! Evokes such powerful emotion.
Love and hugs,
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Angel! Whoa! Thanks for the comment! You rock!
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awesome man!! I really like this one a lot!! =) very good, very good!!!! awesome write, awesome read, thank you for sharing that, it was great dude!
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The one who must not be Named...misery breeds defiance and defiance breeds courage and courage gives rise to introspection...My my.. Never read something like this before.. You must be a person of great wisdom... And yeah every word you said is true! The World would be a mess if we could go back and change what was done.. Don't think any of us need more confusion in this world where everything is already in a big mess! Thanks a ton for your comment.. Glad you liked the structure and the emotions.. Really.. thanks again! Rock on!
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Wonderful poet huh? I loved that! Glad that you read my stuff! Thanks for commenting on it! I'll definitely IM you when I write my next piece! Thanks again!
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Oh.. somebody who has a parallel train of thought as me! I love the way you put it.. love/hate relationship with time... Awesome! Thanks for the awesome comment! And I'm glad I could share it with you! Love ya lots!
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TJCasser! Oh yes.... rightly said.. We are our worst enemy.. Hey thanks a ton for the awesome comment! And hey I should be the one thanking you for reading my poem and taking time off to comment on it! Thanks! Rock on!
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Midnight.. Whoa.. thats really uplifting.. Glad you could feel the emotions when you read my poem... Thanks for the really encouraging comment! You're the best!
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yeah i fully agree .. a great rebounding regret in these lines ..but then my friend time is never constant .. and to go back in time to change something is well not a practical idea ..however this is how it is meant to be ..why if everyone had a choice to go back in time and correct his or her wrong doings ..this world would not have existed at all and you know misery breeds defiance and defiance breeds courage and courage gives rise to introspection which culminate in to hope ..so your emotional outburst is all but justified ..by the way your poem was quite powerfull and well structured but more than that it was the emotion within the lines that was quite intriguing ... so dont worry you will get over it
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this was very dark and wounderful because i'm like that it was wounderful...i can't wait till your next piece! you are a wounderful poet!
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Wow, this is awesome. I like how you kept repeating "curse you" at the end of each stanza. I personally have a love/hate relationship with time myself. Thank you for sharing.
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Sometimes we're our own worst enemy, no?
A powerful piece - I like the repetition at the end of each verse, the structure of the whole thing. Well said, truly, and I thank you for sharing it with us. -
Wow..this is very dark and so compelling. Your word use is outstanding and adds more meaning to your write. I could feel the emotion and hate. Awesome job and keep up the good work.
~Midnight~
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Tessa! That is one awesome picture you have on your Author's page.. Most beautiful sketch I've ever come across on AP.. I'm looking forward to reading your poetry.. I have an idea I'm gonna enjoy em! Hey.. thanks a ton for your comment.. Glad you liked my poem.. thanks for the encouraging words.. Rock on!
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When I write I want to paint a picture with words so that the reader can see, smell, taste, experience what I am through words.... Those are awesome words on your Author's page.. Whoa... Thank you for your comment! Thanks also for your good wishes.. I hope time mends the situation like you said.. Thanks again for eveything!
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Hey There...
This is the first time for me reading any of your work and I am impressed because your words rang so true in my ears...I have used similar words and later wished I could take them back...They are hurtful and should never have left my mouth...
Thank you for sharing this with us...I really liked it...
Much love
Tessa -
Time can be a curse as well as a blessing.........for we can wish that we could turn it back to change things that we have done in our lives but the blessing comes that in time we grow and learn from those mistakes we have made........and my wish for you is that time mends this situation for you in some way. By the way this is a brilliant write.......you have a wonderful talent of expression.
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Sue! Uh no.. It wasn't her doing that brought out my bitter side.. Ummm..Will tell ya the whole deal later..
Regarding the comment abt the poem.. Aaahh.. now I'm satisfied.. no poem is complete without a comment by THE lyrical-rebel! Thanks for the comment.. Rock on!
PS: Those curses.. Oh my God.. they came so naturally.. wasn't even thinkin.. they just tumbled out.. like that.. scary huh?
love ya lots sis!
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deliciously dark!
whoa...! Those are some seriously dark curses there... very unlike what you've written before...
Ok, i know you dont want to hear this... but instead of hating yourself for the surge of emotions or hating time for its eternal non retrograde flow... shouldn't you be thinking about that 'someone' who managed to bring out such a bitter side of you...
Hmm.. that was on a personal note...
As for the poem... its briliant!... the depth of darkness engulfs the reader.. the words shall probably haunt all those who lay their eyes upon them... the curses are such that they make you dread them, send shivers up your spine (and u know i dont get frightened easily!).
Loved it...!
Sue!
ps: take a deep breath... n relax...
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