Chubby cheeks,
with red dumplings,
a chin having,
a deep adorable sink,
with wide blue eyes,
having a naughty twink,
his golden locks,
were soft,
and plenty,
his baby fragrance,
I used to inhale deep,
as in my lap,
he used to sleep,
its only when,
he stirred,
burped,
and crapped,
that his innocent helpless,
beauty,
in fact seeped.
Even then I mumbled,
Child you give me goosebumps. I like that.
Author notes
I used this......10. You give me goosebumps. I like that.
Written July 12th, 2006
A contest entry
- anything but heartbreak.. by ChicaBoo.
300 points, ended October 9, 2006, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Write me a poem for a baby! by Crimson Viper.
600 points, ended August 27, 36 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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awwww this is just too cute ^_^
i enjoyed reading this immensly, good luck and take care
Stephanie ♥ -
This was a really caring piece, I could really imagine holding the baby and all the marvellous things you describe. I loved the lines:
"a chin having,
a deep adorable sink"
Admittedly you also describe the less desirable aspects which is honest but takes some of the sweetness away but then you claim it all back by showing the power of the love. Great Work x -
This is really cute. You did a very good job writing this. Keep up yoru good work!!!
CrimsonViper -
Great piece here
This truly is a nice read and such truth within it for all to enjoy
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Really enjoyed this poem, the way it so sweetly remembers quiet moments with a child.
For soem reason the lines
his golden locks,
were soft,
and plenty,
his baby fragrance,
I used to inhale deep,
Really grabbed me.
Thank you for sharing this with us all.
Tattboy -
Enjoyable to read these lines - they flow well and give us wonderful images of this little fellow. Cute ending when you use the lines you were supposed to in the contest. Think you mean it's, rather than its.
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Oh, It is so true! Sometimes when I see 'lil children I'd like to just lift them up and hug them and kiss their little cheeks and rockaby them.
But of course I do not. 
We're lucky to do that with out own. 
Your poem made me very happy.
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very sweet. I like how you incorporated the line into your poem. thanks for entering and good luck!
~*~Austyn~*~ -
Very nice.
A truly wonderful write for goosebumps.
Very original. best of luck in contest. -
This is so cute for lack of a better word, and it brings back memories...of times that unfortunately go by too fast
Best wishes in ths contest,
reenie
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