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Falling Feathers

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Will the sense of betrayal
never cease
its jagged tearing of my Soul?

I ache at my discoveries,
weep at what I find
without searching.

Shadows are deep
& prolific in their passion
for pursuing
the remnants of my Heart
that I would keep safe from harm.

More than this,
I berate myself for foolish caring,
for wanting Love's light
to warm my yearning skin.

Bones shatter,
piercing the night ~

there is no sanctuary
in this place,
nothing sacred I may trust.

I gasp as though gutted
by the incessant, fiery sword
of Sorrow ~

I fall to my knees in disbelief,
a solemn vow
uttering prayers upon my lips...




         ~ July 19, 2006
                6:00 a.m.




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Written July 19th, 2006

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  • Dream Priestess
    August 2, 2006
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    Wow what a Beautifull Write I loved it I could feel the love and hurt in this piece, it truly is a great one. and the I love the Picture.@};- Blessed Be. Stay well and Live free. Pride,Passion, and Perseverance.

  • Night Hope gold member
    July 21, 2006
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    Thank you for hosting & for your gracious words, Kitty. I'm pleased you enjoyed my work. I appreciate your kindness & your time. Be well, Poet. Wanda

  • Shadow inside
    July 21, 2006
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    sad

    Very very nice, i can really get the sence of hurt and pain in this poem, thank you for entering in to my contest. Good luck.

    ~Kitty~
    Edited on Jul 21, 10:18 because ''.

  • Night Hope gold member
    July 20, 2006
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    Sighhh...Ahhh, Scribe...you see me more clearly than I do myself...& it makes me weep for the Beauty that once was & might be again one day...where only Truth & Love shall hold hands in companionship...& betrayal has no words to speak from anyone's lips...Thank you, Rich...my dear Friend... Wanda

  • kaibab silver member
    July 20, 2006
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    This piece stings at the core of what is wrong with humanity.
    To betray someone else is to betray yourself...and begin a chain reaction of endless cover up...and as truth is burried ever deeper we have lost a chance to love. I do my friend, agree with Nic...and wish you did not know how to write these words so well...but I also know that a flower is always a flower...ever so beautiful dancing alone in the summer wind.
  • FindingFate
    July 19, 2006
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    Your poetry indeed smacks me each time I read it...with a great, big, whopping...WOW! I have felt this part many a time sweet lady...many a time. The whole piece flowed beautifully and the ending was amazement....Great job as always Wanda...Trina
  • Son of Jim
    July 19, 2006
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    Wanda
    you have tied some simple language with complex as well as infrequent. It is a good exercise in darkness and feeling using the metaphor you have used. Very full of imagery. Gives the reader something to chew on and see. good write.

  • sinister-black
    July 19, 2006
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    its ok, dont feel bad about it, i dont like light and slushy.....
  • Buchan
    July 19, 2006
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    excellent

    Brilliant pom and graphic . Such words of love and kindness > As always a classic and thank you for writing and sharing. Great work........

  • Night Hope gold member
    July 19, 2006
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    Sighhh... Dammmnnn...sorry, Poet...I don't usually do dark...didn't mean to make ya feel worse...read somethin' light & slushy, why don'tcha???

  • Creatress silver member
    July 19, 2006
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    Well put. There is definitely some deep thinking going on wherever you live. Great poem. Thanks for sharing I enjoyed reading!! Keep up the good work!!

  • sinister-black
    July 19, 2006
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    yippee......er um

    wow, i almost feel myself falling into the loss of this poem, and its hard to make me feel worse, just read my stuff.........anywayz, good work
  • Titus gold member
    July 19, 2006
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    Now this is what I call deep thought, and an envy of cascading thoughts you have chosen, Lovely work!

  • Elvis
    July 19, 2006
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    Okay, this doesn't sound like a Night Hope poem. But it is very good. Applause applause!!!!! Very nice.

  • SirPort
    July 19, 2006
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    well done and said.

    Your poetry smacks of what I feel excellently lady. My eyes feel Your words as they roam this page. My discipline of mind control helps, but maybe I just like feeling this way for some morbid reason. At least I will try and capitalize on this mood with poetry, so all is not totality a waist. Well done and said poetess lady.
    Ron~

  • Night Hope gold member
    July 19, 2006
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    Thank you for your gracious words, Image and Visions. I'm pleased you enjoyed my work. I appreciate your kindness & your time. Indeed...a "lover's loss, or a sinner's prayers"...very intuitive of you...Be well, Poet. Wanda

  • Night Hope gold member
    July 19, 2006
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    Yes, rishi, blue has always been my favorite color...preferably sapphire or cobalt...I'm glad you enjoy my work...Thank you for your kind words...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Night Hope gold member
    July 19, 2006
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    Yeahhh, "ouch" is right, suse...Thanks, my Friend...

  • Night Hope gold member
    July 19, 2006
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    Sighhh...Thank you, Nic...Love you, Woman...I'll find the Light again...it's there waiting... Vlindertjie

  • Night Hope gold member
    July 19, 2006
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    Karen, I wrote this one at 6 am; that oughta give ya an indication of how bad things have been lately, my Friend...Sighhh...I'll be alright, Lady...I usually am...Just gonna take some time, ya know...It's more than "just" my brother, too... I dunno, Karen...Don't worry, though, ok??? Have a wonderful time on your vacation...See ya when you get home...Take lotsa pictures, too...I wanna see... Wander Lea

  • July 19, 2006
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    Wow!
    the emotions in this poem are so full of anguish;
    makes me feel to just reach out and hug you.
    your words are very heartfelt and come from such
    a deep place; i wish for you faith and love as
    you continue to share these most stunning and
    breathtaking poems.
    Wow!
    lynn

  • Nicolette gold member
    July 19, 2006
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    The wishes and whispers of the heart fall as softly as feathers.... maybe the falling feathers are messages from the angels, Vlindertjie... They hear us dear sister of the soul - even the sighs that escapes from the heart. Such anguish in this poem; as dark as the background and the picture...but your words shine upon this page. I am sorry that you wrote this so well; but it is necessary to write our hurt...to write towards the light; to write towards wings again. Thinking of you... with love

    ~ Nicolette

  • Lady Altheia silver member
    July 19, 2006
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    The picture fits well with the pome of the sense of loss I pick up in the poem. From your words, I get a sense that this angel fell from grace. I especially like these lines : "I gasp as though gutted
    by the incessant, fiery sword
    of Sorrow ~"
  • childlike faith
    July 19, 2006
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    I loved your poem though it was very sad. Betrayal of our trust is a difficult thing to deal with but if we are to come out victorious instead of the victim we must give it our very best try. And then move on and consider this a lesson learned. childlike faith Thanks for sharing

  • ShotgunGoddess
    July 19, 2006
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    this truely was sorrow filled...a very descriptive. well done and may your days be filled with more joy than they seem to be now.

    Fair winds,
    Seth

  • candyinchelsea
    July 19, 2006
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    i wish you peace of mind and hope
    for a better tomorrow.
    i have made a desicion that i would
    no longer let myself be un-happy. i have
    spent so much time hurting and crying over
    the past couple of years while life just
    keeps moving forward and i see people havin fun.
    i suggest you and i get happy and move on with life.
    a big hug
    candy

  • Soulful Woman gold member
    July 19, 2006
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    This was a very powerful piece. This really spoke to me because I have been in a situation so much like this. It rips your heart out..no words can describe it. You did very well with your description. Very well written...

    Soulful Woman
  • rishi
    July 19, 2006
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    Blue is your favorite colour wanda. isn't it?
    Anyway it is beautiful. lets show why you are in my favorite list. In 2nd stanza, most poet wud have written ...
    "I ache at my discoveries,
    weep at what I find"

    but the last line " without searching." makes this stanza special.
    Brilliant display of emotions, in this piece.
    I liked it.


  • suseann gold member
    July 19, 2006
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    This gave the impression of an emotional drawn and quartering done with a dull axe.Ouch! Very descriptive and expressive piece.~~Suseann

  • transcendental baby gold member
    July 19, 2006
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    Oh Baby there's so much anguish in this ... I hope things aren't that bad for you Amazing write though

  • Image and Visions silver member
    July 19, 2006
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    great

    hopem well this so well constructed not crafted but constructed. (of course I am not taking away fropm your talents by saying that. but it seems to be built upon it self that builds until the end. Then to my eyes it could be seen either as a lovers loss, or a sinner prayers, very well done and impressively done my friend, image

  • starlock
    July 19, 2006
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    wow, this is a wounderful piece, i think it is amazing i like the decription, and the words used. i think its a powerful piece, beucase its very questioning, and hasnt got any answers. i like the deciption of sorrow being a sword, because like a sword it pierced peoples sould, and sort of in a way kills them or has the capability to kill them. i like the ending to, of saying prayers as if that will save you from sadness, and it also shows that even when life is in termoil, faith cans still stay strong. i like how, the writters almost critiseing herself, for falling in love and almost having herself for it, myself i dont believe that wanting love is wrong, even if it turns out fake. i also like the part where you hace wrote that you didnt have to even search for the truth which makes the tale even worse, becuase surly, if someone cared even a little bit they would hide the truth or maybe it better that its easy to spot. i dont know. i just really like the poem. sorry that i wrote so much.
    brillint poem,
    hope to see some more of your wounderful work.
    starlockx

  • choaticrose
    July 19, 2006
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    this peice of work.. including the angel in the picture.. was very touching.. it was both dark and sad reading this.. I could barely keep my eyes away from the words that you wrote.. good job..
    I also loved the display of the emotions mixed in with the mental pictues that you get from reading your poem... great job
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