Cold and Numbing shadow take
me at last, to my final resting place.
Were I can Finllay rest
my weary head.
Too much anguish in this world,
never enough love.
Let the wind carry you to me,
With all speed for my time is close.
I feel your presence
even before I see you.
As I watch your wings extend,
and you glide slowly to me.
I cannot help these tears now,
for at last you have come.
Your beauty as always is boundless,
and and we embrace.
All the rot and decay of this world vanishes,
as your wings fold around me.
Suddenly I hear your voice,
The time has come you say.
I'm ready I say in return,
for I have been betrayed for the last time.
Gently you lift me,
high into the midnight sky.
The warmth of your undying body
warms me.
Your heart beat
comforts me as we descend further into
the night sky.
Author notes
Thier will be a part 3 and 4 and so on Thanks Tish
Written July 28th, 2006
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love this poem
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There better be more! This one portrayed great imagery, but it left me hanging and hoping for more! SWACK
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Very good
I love this poem. It is very gothic but has substance. However, three points:
Change the title;
Finlay is spelt 'Finally';
Do not use 'let' to start a sentence. -
Worth reading.
Soft and yet dark, this poem shows the night without feeling the need to be dramatic about it. This shows a true understanding of the darker side of life. Only one thing seemed off to me - the warmth of his/her body warming you seemed repetitive. -
heartbreaking
I meant to say heartbreaking as my verdict lol -
heartbreading
This was very melancholy. Very sobering. Make your heart ache.
But read over it and fix the grammer mistakes. -
Excellent
LOVE IT!!!!! This made me sighhh. The beauty and softness of it and not to mention finally getting to "go".
Thanks Tish??? What did I do? You know I luv ya sweety! Always here for ya when ya need me.
Hugs and bites, Vampy
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