How do you get over the one who
Who made you smile
How can you make yourself go on
Some say it takes some crying for a while
For some it may be hard at first
Then it smoothes out pretty easy
But then theres ones like Ruby
Who seem to open door for the Beast
The Beast said: "Ruby let me in.
I can make you smile again"
I'll help you forget about the past
Just let me in and let me in.. fast!
You dont have to worry
Because I'll be there when you cry
I'll numb your pain and lay you down to sleep
I'll even be there should you die
So as time went by Ruby was so high
She couldnt even walk out the door
He took her strength He made her weak
He had her under his total control
But she came to love the Beast, to say the least
Yeah it was just Ruby and the Beast
One day Ruby couldn't take it anymore
She heard a knock so rare
He stood tall in that white robe
As he held out his hands with such care
He said:" Ruby you need me "
For you know you are too weak
And I've come to set you free
And I'll give you my Word and crush the Beast
So she let Him in as she knelt on her knees
And that was the day Ruby was set free
No more Ruby and the Beast........of Alcohol
Author notes
This one has sort of a twist at the end...so you'll have to read through to get to the point I am trying to make!
Written August 4th, 2006
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awesome write, i really like it, interesting, and different, things i love in a poem =) awesome job
thanks for entering and good luck! =) -
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Thank you! I appreciate your kind comment and the opportunity in your contest
GBY
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How do you get over the one who
Who made you smile
How can you make yourself go on
Some say it takes some crying for a while
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Oooh this was an awesome poem! My heart skipped a beat when you wrote that He appeared white robe and all. I can just imagine it! -
Ended up happy
I began reading and let out a groan - I was wanting soemthing happy but as I read on - you came out right as rain. Thanks for sharing this. You're right there is a twist at the end. Glad I didn't dismiss this. Take care.
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Well done!
Hi SilverButterfly. A heartfelt write and message. Good imagery, flow and tone. Deep expression of emotion. Nice rhyme. You have painted a vivid picture of alcohol as an addiction (beast). Very good metaphor. The twist at the end was very good. Her faith in Christ set her free of it. Shelley
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Thank you my friend!
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I really enjoyed this piece. Very well written and thought out. I look forward to reading more from you
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Wow, the metaphor in this poem really just whisks you away. You wrote it perfectly. You have conveyed this aspect of society well and with flair.
Great job and thanks for entering round 2 of the contest!
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Why thank you honey! I see this as a problem with alot of people I know...especially women now.I feel so bad for them.So thanks for the good word!!! GBY!
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very good
this is a very good write and the alcahol problem is growing with more and more youngsters and women drinking alcahol than ever before,good luck in the contest with this very interesting write
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A very deep metaphor describing an addiction to alcohol and the enternal struggle the ensues. I myself found it fairly easy to relate due to the obvious. I think those without knowledge will perhaps get lost in this one. Good luck in the contest!
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Very wicked twist at the end. Loved that, something I wasn't expecting. ♥ Tink
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thanks so much for your kind comment. i appreciate it very much!! GBY! ")
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Wow, I had to read it twice, but I finally figured out what it meant. God/faith, helped Ruby to turn away from the Beast/alcohol?? I really liked it, it made me think. lol
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yes, i have found out that more and more women are turning to Alcohol to ease emotional and physical pain. This is very sad. thanks for reading it. GBY! ")
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I really wasn't sure where you were going with this....at first. What an unexpected twist. Alcohol is a major problem today. Along with drugs and everything else. We can contribute this to society as all the pressure from the world leads us to drugs and alcohol to deal with our problems. Wonderful write, I really enjoyed the read. Best of luck to you in the contest.
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